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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Nonnet---Going Home"Story telling poems
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Comment from schatzling
Your poem is not a Nonnet. I do not know what it is to be honest.
A Nonnet only has 9 lines with the first line having 9 syllables, the second line having 8 and continues to the 9th line which has only 1 syllable.
Maybe there is a poem type that fits what/how you have written. Should you find out, please share with me. I will do the same.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Your poem is not a Nonnet. I do not know what it is to be honest.
A Nonnet only has 9 lines with the first line having 9 syllables, the second line having 8 and continues to the 9th line which has only 1 syllable.
Maybe there is a poem type that fits what/how you have written. Should you find out, please share with me. I will do the same.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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This is a mirror nonet. It uses the same one syllable word to restart a backward one so it goes
9 8 7 6 5 4 3 2 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow! Expertly done! This is a beautiful tribute to your mother. I've never seen a nonnet done so well. I love the descriptions, and the flow is sweet and easy. My favorite line is, "Yet the house breathes, memories revived". And I love the ending, "Empty chair wondering where she is". This is very well written. Thank you for sharing your talent and feelings with me.
Peace, Jesse
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Wow! Expertly done! This is a beautiful tribute to your mother. I've never seen a nonnet done so well. I love the descriptions, and the flow is sweet and easy. My favorite line is, "Yet the house breathes, memories revived". And I love the ending, "Empty chair wondering where she is". This is very well written. Thank you for sharing your talent and feelings with me.
Peace, Jesse
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Wow, You just made my day. My first nonet so well praised and so sincerely. I can feel the truth in your words. Jesse, I continue to read your pieces too. This is such a great place to learn about ourselves.
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I am so glad I made your day. It is my pleasure to do so.
Jesse
Comment from melyuki
Hi Jusylee thank you for sharing this emotionally strung double nonnet . It tells a deep and meaningful story within and pulls on the heart strings.. Beautifully scribed with some loving memories lingering throughout.
Thank you for the ride.. take care . and happy smiles from mel xx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Hi Jusylee thank you for sharing this emotionally strung double nonnet . It tells a deep and meaningful story within and pulls on the heart strings.. Beautifully scribed with some loving memories lingering throughout.
Thank you for the ride.. take care . and happy smiles from mel xx
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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thank you so much, Yes , that is one of the hardest and sweetest times in life. Saying good bye to a parent. Thank you for reading iit
Comment from BeasPeas
A really touching Nonet, Judy. You tapped into feelings I certainly have. I could place myself in the house with you, seeing the favorite things your mom enjoyed. Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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A really touching Nonet, Judy. You tapped into feelings I certainly have. I could place myself in the house with you, seeing the favorite things your mom enjoyed. Marilyn
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. That is such a hard but wonderful time of life. Mom was ready to go. I wasn't ready for her to go. Cleaning out her house was healing.
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Your mom just recently passed? I'm so sorry. Writing and, as you say, cleaning out the house most likely are helpful. It doesn't lessen the pain, but it is process.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That brought back memories. The first time you enter your parents home after they have both gone, is sad, heart-braking, yet so familiar you want to keep it that way. I thought you worded this nonet perfectly, and if it was your fist one, well, very well done! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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That brought back memories. The first time you enter your parents home after they have both gone, is sad, heart-braking, yet so familiar you want to keep it that way. I thought you worded this nonet perfectly, and if it was your fist one, well, very well done! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. Strangely I thought the structure would inhibit my thoughts. Instead, it truly helped me explain my memory. Thank you so much.
Comment from Rubylou
Hello Judy,
I, like many others, I'm sure can totally relate the experience of visiting an empty home once a parent has passed. Memories, mementos, and lives lived stay with a person.
Your nonet beautifully describes this wonderfully especially the last line as you personify the empty chair ,"wondering where she is."
(As far as I know, a nonet must have a one syllable word at the beginning or, if inverted, at the end.)
Rubylou :-)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Hello Judy,
I, like many others, I'm sure can totally relate the experience of visiting an empty home once a parent has passed. Memories, mementos, and lives lived stay with a person.
Your nonet beautifully describes this wonderfully especially the last line as you personify the empty chair ,"wondering where she is."
(As far as I know, a nonet must have a one syllable word at the beginning or, if inverted, at the end.)
Rubylou :-)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for reading. It is a sad but healing time of life. I'm thinking about revising it by putting Lives twice. One time as a verb , One time as a noun but how would the reader know how to pronounce it.
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May I suggest a note in the author's note box?
Hope that helps.
Rubylou
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That is a great idea. thanks again.
Comment from frogbook
Wow this was excellent and though (thank God) my mother is alive, she is quite elderly, but this sounded so much like her with her mints, crosswords and reading glasses. Very poignant and emotional.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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Wow this was excellent and though (thank God) my mother is alive, she is quite elderly, but this sounded so much like her with her mints, crosswords and reading glasses. Very poignant and emotional.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. Yes She died several years ago but I vividly remember having to clean out her house. It is a job of love and healing.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Judy, first of all if this is biographical then I'm so sorry if that's the way you lost your mother. It is beautifully composed. Only one little nit. A nonet ends in one syllable and the next one needs to start with another one syllable. I've never written one myself, yet, but would like to. It was lovely. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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Hi Judy, first of all if this is biographical then I'm so sorry if that's the way you lost your mother. It is beautifully composed. Only one little nit. A nonet ends in one syllable and the next one needs to start with another one syllable. I've never written one myself, yet, but would like to. It was lovely. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. Yes She died several years ago but I vividly remember having to clean out her house. It is a job of love and healing.
Comment from RoostyNester
You potlatch poem about your mother was heartwarming. You expressed your love and grief with strong emotion. Memories are what we cling to when our grief becomes unbearable.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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You potlatch poem about your mother was heartwarming. You expressed your love and grief with strong emotion. Memories are what we cling to when our grief becomes unbearable.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. Yes She died several years ago but I vividly remember having to clean out her house. It is a job of love and healing.
Comment from Leineco
Even sadly empty - a home is still a home.
I have had to do this twice now, and your poem
captured the trepidation and melancholy that
comes with it!
I'm sorry you had to live this (assuming it is,
in fact biographical).
Excellent construction - except, as I understood it,
when you join them - each nonet must be "self contained"
(i.e. no shared lines) I think your second nonet
has to have its own one syllable opening line.(but I'm not
100% sure about that).
That aside, your double nonet was quite moving.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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Even sadly empty - a home is still a home.
I have had to do this twice now, and your poem
captured the trepidation and melancholy that
comes with it!
I'm sorry you had to live this (assuming it is,
in fact biographical).
Excellent construction - except, as I understood it,
when you join them - each nonet must be "self contained"
(i.e. no shared lines) I think your second nonet
has to have its own one syllable opening line.(but I'm not
100% sure about that).
That aside, your double nonet was quite moving.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. Yes She died several years ago but I vividly remember having to clean out her house. It is a job of love and healing.
