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It Does Rain On Parades

A rather scary day this turned out to be

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Comment from RodG
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I know that some towns give awards to floats in their Fourth of July parades. What trophy was the Pink Posse competing for? Now that the deadline has been extended, can you add more details about YOURSELF? Why are you a member of this group? Also, what were your thoughts and feelings as the weather worsened. I would also like more description of the horses' reactions during the climax of the parade. I noticed there is no maximum word limit and you have plenty of time to revise. Good luck.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. I didn't notice that they extended the deadline. If that's so then I will add some more to the story. In that particular parade, there was a trophy for the best horse group. Two other parades we rode in gave trophies too. One paid fifty dollars for best horse troop. I thought I only had a half hour to complete this so gave the basic details.
Comment from royowen
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I enjoyed your story despite the shortness! I was only in the US on ene Fourth of July, we were in Washington, the day was very hot but dry, we had to walk to our hotel, too many people to catch a cab. Great fireworks dislpiay, we camped at the Lincoln memorial! But you're right, it always seems to rain at certain outdoor events, well done, well written, good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. That was the only time we ever got caught in a downpour. I guess we were lucky before.
reply by royowen on 27-Jul-2016
    Most welcome
Comment from janalma
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Good story. Too bad that the storm ruined your day. Tho, it's good none of you were hurt. Well written, progresses well and is a cohesive story.

Maybe need to redo this sentence >>> concerned(.) (W)ith the humidity being so high(,) (it often created) {often made for} a steamy day in Michigan.

Your call of course. It's your story. Enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. Yep, I think the sentence would read better done your way. I will edit and revise.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
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It was short but sweet. I enjoyed your wonderful story a lot. You did a fine job with this piece. Thanks for sharing.

Wishing you all the best--
Bill

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. I may add more to that story one day soon and make it more complete.
Comment from create4christ
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This is a nice story about your IT WAS ONE OF THOSE DAYS. Good luck with your contest entry. Is this The Pink Posse? Was it a bomb or fireworks, or what that caused the boom that scared your horses? Easy to visualize. Great job.

Thank you for sharing. ..Penny

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. It was thunder and lightning that scared the horses. A severe storm moved in very fast that day; there was no warning.
Comment from Mabaker
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I think I've already reviewed this story but here I go again. Rain and storm. Ah, yes. Hubby and I came from Sunny Queensland to unpredictable Melbourne for our youngest son's wedding. Wind of 90K's rain that flooded every park in a ten K radius. Melbourne turned on a beaut. The only two who weren't frozen were the bride and groom. Regards Anne

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. Yep, a severe thunderstorm moved in without warning. It came fast and caught everyone off guard. It was pretty scary but we laughed about it later.
Comment from giraffmang
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hi there,

I enjoyed this short well-written piece. You do a good job describing the scene and atmosphere. Good ending to the piece as well.

This morning we gave our horses - possibly that rather than this here.

to make matter worse,- matters.

We turned them around and, kept them under control - no comma necessary after and.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016



    Thank you. I am always waiting until the last minute to enter some of these contests. By doing that I make a few errors. Thanks to folks like you someone usually catches them.



Comment from sandramitchell
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Isn't that the way it goes? Every time something nice is happening, something will go wrong. I loved the description of your outfits, and the horses, I am sure you made a striking picture. At least you know you would undoubtedly have won, you couldn't fail to have done so. I loved the photo of you all, very nice! Good luck in this contest, it certainly was one of those days! :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. That wasn't a normal rain, it was a downpour. We still had a great time. I don't think the horses appreciated the whole deal. LOL
Comment from country ranch writer
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This has actually happened to us quite often when we were out on the parade ground. Rain has a way of putting a damper on things that's for sure.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. This was the only time we ever got rained on and we did a lot of parades. I guess we were just lucky.
reply by country ranch writer on 27-Jul-2016
    S M I L E S
Comment from Kooky Clown
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Good story and I have experienced the same kind of thing here in England but not with horses but attending parades and functions and the day starts of beautiful but just as the fun starts the heavens open up and it pours with rain.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
    Thank you. That was the only time we ever got dumped on and we rode in a lot of parades. Guess we were lucky.