Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing positively.

Suggestions

Cover mother tripped me up, mostly because it was moving with such speed and skill until I hit the not thinking of his mother. Somehow it didn't seem to fit. Maybe revisit How sadly ... mother. Rearrange so you can end with an easier word?

Mother's .... delete apostrophe

Just an idea Mother's...we can have our children... If the flag...would bear...

but I can tell...Maybe revisit for rhythm.

...go run for president...for rhythm?

And extra points for your fun one line description at the top. Lol.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016

thank you so much I changed bear and I am going to look at the other suggestions also . Thank you so much for a real thoughtful review. I appreciate it so much .

reply by kathleenspalding on 22-Jul-2016

You're very welcome.

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

EXCELLENT work for this If I was Presidente contest!!! Truly enjoyed this fine read. Great job. Good rhythm, rhyme and meter throughout. Hope you fare well as I really love this one. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016

Thank you, I think all of us have great ideas. But how to run a country? That has to be the hardest job ever, but we have to think simply and care about all Americans. Thank you for your honest and sweet review.

reply by Susanne M. Psyris on 22-Jul-2016

We could revive this country, if need be. It's not always about love; sometimes it is about friendship and realism. God bless and hugs, Susanne

reply by Anonymous Member on 25-Jul-2016

We could revive this country, if need be. It's not always about love; sometimes it is about friendship and realism. God bless and hugs, Susanne

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This is an excellent poem. I like the rhyme and rhythm and the history of your ancestors, Very intersting and very patriotic in tone. Great job!

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2016

thank you so much. Your words mean so much to me.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. To be the Presidente of a country is a most responsible job. Thousands of people looking what you do and critisize your every move.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016

so true. thank you very much. I don't really believe I could be president. It is a thankless job.

Comment from JustKneeDeep

Excellent

So thoughtful & personal. Such a unique family with a rich history. True ideals worthy to sit in the highest office. An enjoyable read!

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016

thank you, Yep I could be president. But I would have no idea what to do. It has to be the hardest job in the world. We need to go back to having candidates who have served in the arm services. You have to understand war to avoid war.

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

This is excellent. I enjoyed how you wrote about you family. Loved the line about him not coming home bragging. Sums up men of that time. A very creative take on the contest prompt and an enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016

thank you so much. It would be so hard to be president, but I do have some ideas.

Comment from zatanna

Good

What I liked you didn't say I will do a b or c. You told us a story. It's funny because the politicians never really have the answers and here too you are pondering that idea. I also liked that you used simple language - not verbose words to show off just for the sake of it. You made it different and that's what I look for in a story.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016

thank you for your thoughts

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

and if you were running, I'd vote for you! You
sound a whole lot more sensible that what's running.
Enjoyed your well crafted poem.
Thought expressed well with pleasant rhyme and strong
meter.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016

thank you Nancy. I know, I didn't want to vote for either one of them. SIGH, thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Fridayauthor

Excellent

A very nice message in this poem that reads and flows quite well. While some of the meter seemed off, the thought seemed very sincere.

Thank you for this posting.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016

thank you so much. I enjoyed writing it and some of the meter is off. Just like me. LOL

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

You have my vote! A well written poem with a message for the people. A little tongue-in-cheek comments makes for a enjoyable read.
Well done.

Blessings
janet

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016

thank you so much. Judy for President. LOL.