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Comment from GoodHearted Woman
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Hi Michael. I like your style but I had to go way off-course to find you. I'm over here in The Big Wig section of writers. I'll keep looking because, like I say, your style is certainly your own. Just letting you know.
GoodHearted Woman

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2017

Comment from l.raven
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HI Michael, just a bit behind sweetie...trying to move a few things...will be back full in no time at all...you are such a nut...lithium seeds...where do you come up with this stuff???...I can see the prairie dogs now...and yes you are a wild bunch...but so full of life and fun...sooooo very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
    I've a lot of time alone in the desert and the heat hits the top of my head first. As I understand it, that's where my brain is though I've heard other theories from some seemingly irate folk who claimed my brain was stored elsewhere. :)) mikey
reply by l.raven on 12-Jul-2016
    LOL nut...I'm sure your brain is right where your mother put it...LOL...luff to ya always...xxoo Linda
Comment from Jay Squires
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You were having too much fun with your spelling for me to cast out my net for nits. I pointed out one run-on since you can correct it without having it affect the right-chus rhythm of your prose. Cleverly written, Mikey, and entertaining to boot.

I'd vote for you--and I ain't shittin' ya. You're better than the two choices we have.

You can say that out loud, you're in the desert alone planting a lithium grove. [A run-on sentence. You can't have two complete sentences separated by a comma. At least plant a semicolon instead of a comma after "loud."]


 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Ah, damn ground hog. I knew I was over paying him as an editor. I'll fix that ... the ground hog too. I'd make a good President. I'd ban war and take all the money from the rich and pass it out to the poor. I'd shave Trump's head and draw a happy face on his skull. mikey
Comment from Gloria ....
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Oh mercy me, what in the world is a jumbo skrimp? Sounds like one of those oxymoron things with a stretching over of the oxy part into the whole thing, right?

I heard about those lithium groves as someone once told me that lithium grows on trees. Now I know it's a fact.

Krinkle is Crinkle. Haaaaa, nice play on Penelope Cruz, I'm pretty sure Bernie's up to no good, cause ain't he related to the Kentucky Fried Chicken guy?

I don't know about anyone else, Mister Cahill, but in my mind you've got all the proper credentials an President of the US of A needs.

Sure, I'll vote for ya.

Great job Mav. Some excellent satire here.

Ange



 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Ah yes, the groves as we like to call them. We share them with the pandas of course, vicious bastards. Yep, Bernie's Baked Chicken. The family doesn't like to talk about it. I appreciate your vote, Ange. Whatever it takes to repay you, I'm certainly willing and able to provide it.

    Mav
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Michael,
Well, first of all I would say the picture is you--same eyes & mouth from the one on your profile page.

Now your flash fiction story was fun to read. You have a vivid imagination which is great for a writer. Your words kept me engaged the entire time.

I really liked the parts about being the defender of America & one's family. If this is a 'rant' by one who is off medication, it is in good form. I believe some of our politicians act this way without needing meds--they are just crazy & egotistical & self-centered.

I have not reviewed flash fiction before, so please understand I may have missed some things. But your story had good flow, humor, seriousness, and a good theme.

For one who is off meds, this made good sense in what he was saying about the state of society [I know it is not biographical].

It may have been 3AM, but someone was really wound up.

Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    It is me, from a couple years ago. I felt like the medication was clouding my thinking. It had me doing things like working, paying bills, following the law, drinking in moderation, all things that I find boring. I was wound up. I usually am. They say I won't live to be forty going at the pace I do. I aim to prove them wrong. mikey
Comment from jlsavell
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MR CAHILL!


The U.S. Cabinet was created by Article 2, Section 2 of the U.S. Constitution in 1787. The Cabinet members, called secretaries, are appointed by the president of the United States to provide advice in matters related to their areas of expertise.


Ummmmm cabinet posts? I am reaching out. My area of expertise..well here lies or lays??? the 64000 question. Perhaps it is lies, of which the cabinet members are soooo good at. You think? By the WAY, WHERE DID THE TERM CABINET COME FROM? Are not cabinets designed to organize and hide unsightly things which do not lend to the aesthetics of a home, a hospital, a garage, an office? awww the Presidential office? !!!!!!!!

Could I be Secretary of Agriculture and Eveready Batteries? State? Treasury? My Uncle was a Pirate and my Aunt had a psychotic State of mind. I am a true blue blood. Secretary of War? Well hell I am an expert at creating hell, right here, right now, on Earth, right here in my living room... I have stood up to the most threatening and daunting of wimps.

And what warm blooded woman, or a man...depending on your preference... would dismiss the fact you are a man ready to give it to you NOW!

I know you truly love me and miss me.

Jimi






 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    I do truly love and miss you. :))
    You are a shoo in for a cabinet post. The term came from the actual cabinet you describe and the various departments are looked at as drawers and a part of the whole just like a regular cabinet.
    That Constitution had some flaws, but they wouldn't listen to me claiming that the vodka somehow clouded my judgment. HA!
    Got Aaron Burr to shoot that pompous Alexander Hamilton though didn't I? He did look like a girl in that wig.
    So ... it is NOW. Ready? mikey
reply by jlsavell on 04-Jul-2016
    awwwwwwwwww.. you are so funny.. love and miss you too!!!
Comment from LIJ Red
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Sounds like a realist's summary of the present state of the American Dream. I just reviewed a flash horror about the Trump administration.
It was a shambles, so I gave it a four, and edited it, instead of skipping.
It had real potential as a yarn of what the liberals and media may do if Trump gets elected...excellent practice flash here...

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    This was actually fun. Glad you liked it. mikey
Comment from ciliverde
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A Lithium farm? Hahaha! What a great idea. Those prairie dogs will never be the same. So you'll be running on the Bipolar ticket? Your speech has the flavor of a crazy rant, which kind of lost the thread when you mentioned Penelope Cruz - lol.

Noticed this...
"raise decent God ferring (fearing) children..."

My favorite line is this:
"Guns don't kill people, I DO, when they threaten my family." Lol.

I'd kind of like to get a short-barrel shotgun for our property up north, there are a lot of tweakers up there. I'm not kidding. I could probably stand a waiting period, and might even pass a background check!

Nice job, Mikey,
Carol
P.S. just posted a story about crazy homeless people in NorCal, that you might find interesting...

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Yes. Penelope has a tendency to distract me from my ... ah ...
    Somewhere I've read that word, "ferring" I've known it since I was little. It means following. But I have a terrible time finding it. Tweakers are the worst. It'll not be a crime to shoot them in my administration. I may make a sport of it. mikey
reply by ciliverde on 04-Jul-2016
    Lol, I can't wait for you to move into the White House. I plan on getting a license for Tweaker Season!
reply by Anonymous Member on 07-Jul-2016
    Lol, I can't wait for you to move into the White House. I plan on getting a license for Tweaker Season!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Brilliant! Love the lithium farm. You are the best at this sort of "kidding but not kidding" stuff. Your characters say what I think in this one, so I'm slappin on my last six. :)

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Aww. Thanks so much. Not everyone realizes I'M KIDDING. HAHAHA! That's scary, no? mikey
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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Yep, it's only us insane writers up at 3 AM hard at work. I know it's time for bed when the sun comes up. Good flash piece, mikey. I enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    It's so true. HAHAHA! Thanks so much, mikey