New Orleans
Music on the streets!9 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent descriptions to bring the images of New Orleans Jazz to life. My favorite line is
Flutes with violin sounds flutter in air
It creates such a great sensory image.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Excellent descriptions to bring the images of New Orleans Jazz to life. My favorite line is
Flutes with violin sounds flutter in air
It creates such a great sensory image.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your kind words. I am so glad you enjoyed the poem. Have a great
4th of July Weekend!
Comment from foxangie123
A most exceptional oil painting indeed. A very well written poem to go with too. That is a devils playground down there for sure. They need church twenty four seven as the tv tells it. I love this version better.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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A most exceptional oil painting indeed. A very well written poem to go with too. That is a devils playground down there for sure. They need church twenty four seven as the tv tells it. I love this version better.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your great comments. I am so glad your enjoyed my description of
New Orleans. Hope you are having a great day!
Comment from mvbrooks
The use of alliteration to describe some of the sounds adds to the whimsy of the poem that invites the reader to enjoy the music of New Orleans.
I wonder if this fits the "cacophony" theme: a harsh, discordant mixture of sounds.
I guess if these different sounds were performed simultaneous, there would be a discordant mixture.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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The use of alliteration to describe some of the sounds adds to the whimsy of the poem that invites the reader to enjoy the music of New Orleans.
I wonder if this fits the "cacophony" theme: a harsh, discordant mixture of sounds.
I guess if these different sounds were performed simultaneous, there would be a discordant mixture.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and your great comments. Hope your having a great day!
Comment from Bill Schott
This cacophony poem, New Orleans, falls a little short, in my opinion, of creating the sound effects that we would expect in a poem that grabs our attention with the onomatopoeia of band sounds. Outside of those nuances, this is a nice poem that takes us to a cool night of blues.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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This cacophony poem, New Orleans, falls a little short, in my opinion, of creating the sound effects that we would expect in a poem that grabs our attention with the onomatopoeia of band sounds. Outside of those nuances, this is a nice poem that takes us to a cool night of blues.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and great comments! Your comments are similar to other comments I received about this poem. Having a son who is a musician in New Orleans I have to say for me the sounds in N. O. are pretty wild, different, and eccentric! I appreciated your honest review of this poem.
Comment from RYME4U
Well done, The cacophony of New Orleans jazz is well described here. The free verse flows smoothly. The presentation is very attractive. Good job!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Well done, The cacophony of New Orleans jazz is well described here. The free verse flows smoothly. The presentation is very attractive. Good job!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and your kind comments. Hope you are having a great day!
Comment from cumulus365
You chose this topic which involve the percussion, brass loud instruments. You organized your details in the three stanzas, to explain how each instrument is played to make the corresponding sound. In the third stanza, you wrote "Church bells ringing in the Square" sound words like ding- dong Church bells ringingl.
Nice illustration to depict the music playing in this piece.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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You chose this topic which involve the percussion, brass loud instruments. You organized your details in the three stanzas, to explain how each instrument is played to make the corresponding sound. In the third stanza, you wrote "Church bells ringing in the Square" sound words like ding- dong Church bells ringingl.
Nice illustration to depict the music playing in this piece.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and your exceptional comments. So glad you enjoyed the poem.
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I enjoyed your writing. Best.
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I enjoyed your writing. Best.
Comment from Ginger Banks
A colorful poem of oddly melodic noise. A beatiful picturesque view of N'arlins Luz'ianer, as one of my friends used to pronounce them. Thank you for sharing. ð???
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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A colorful poem of oddly melodic noise. A beatiful picturesque view of N'arlins Luz'ianer, as one of my friends used to pronounce them. Thank you for sharing. ð???
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your great comments. Hope you had a great day!
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You're welcome.
Comment from William Ross
this is a nice poem but I feel it lacks the harsh, discordant and jarring words for this style poem. A four because I don't believe it fits the style the word usage is to soft, but a good poem otherwise
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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this is a nice poem but I feel it lacks the harsh, discordant and jarring words for this style poem. A four because I don't believe it fits the style the word usage is to soft, but a good poem otherwise
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks so much for the review and your great comments. I changed some of the words after reading your review and seeing
some of the other contest entries. Thanks so much..........harmony13
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
Music on the streets! What a great job you did with the Cacophony! Have never been there, but have seen plenty of movies. I think you chose your subject matter well.
You used lots of "loud" words--laugh. What funny people poets are, huh?
You use a lot of alliteration, focusing on the "s" sound--that's a good thing.
GoodHearted Woman
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Music on the streets! What a great job you did with the Cacophony! Have never been there, but have seen plenty of movies. I think you chose your subject matter well.
You used lots of "loud" words--laugh. What funny people poets are, huh?
You use a lot of alliteration, focusing on the "s" sound--that's a good thing.
GoodHearted Woman
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your great comments. Hope you had a great weekend!
