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Comment from schatzling
wow
powerful
very deep....goes from your gut to your soul in a micro minute.
reading this felt like I was the one that wrote it. I could mesh myself into its depth and understand it completely, wholeheartedly, undeniably.
YES....every word, every in between word written in between the lines that no one else could read except me.
This is one of a kind
very emotion filled
very life lived....does that even make any sense???
Every word takes me where you are were; are; are going.....
I cannot even begin to explain in words anymore what this writing of yours says to me at the top of its voice capability which is silence but only vocal if I read it out loud....yet it is almost yelling ....not yelling because of anger, but just because it is very authoritative and meaningful filled.
DOUBLE WOW
I better stop now before I do not even make sense to myself any longer.
THANKS FOR SHARING.
You deserve each and every one of these sparkly brilliant shiny stars.
BRAVO CLAP CLAP
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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wow
powerful
very deep....goes from your gut to your soul in a micro minute.
reading this felt like I was the one that wrote it. I could mesh myself into its depth and understand it completely, wholeheartedly, undeniably.
YES....every word, every in between word written in between the lines that no one else could read except me.
This is one of a kind
very emotion filled
very life lived....does that even make any sense???
Every word takes me where you are were; are; are going.....
I cannot even begin to explain in words anymore what this writing of yours says to me at the top of its voice capability which is silence but only vocal if I read it out loud....yet it is almost yelling ....not yelling because of anger, but just because it is very authoritative and meaningful filled.
DOUBLE WOW
I better stop now before I do not even make sense to myself any longer.
THANKS FOR SHARING.
You deserve each and every one of these sparkly brilliant shiny stars.
BRAVO CLAP CLAP
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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I too love this poem that flowed out of my head in fifteen minutes. That is what we really think
Comment from amada
To read this in one of my sad days is tremendously touching, and healing, in a way. My fave line " The good and evil in men will no longer concern me..." I like to dance as well! Blessings to you for writing this, it was for me, isn't?
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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To read this in one of my sad days is tremendously touching, and healing, in a way. My fave line " The good and evil in men will no longer concern me..." I like to dance as well! Blessings to you for writing this, it was for me, isn't?
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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Today I hope it was for you. and tomorrow may be one of your blessed days. I sure hope so You touch my heart by believing in my writing so much. Thank you. I am going to save your review and read it over and over when I believe I can't write.
Comment from Gloria ....
I am finally getting around to reviewing all the wonderful Walt Whitman free verse offerings to the Poetry Potlatch last Saturday.
I very much enjoy the framework you wrote your poem around, some days, other days, most days and last day. That runs through the lot and it's an amazing piece of poetry, Judy.
Great write at the free write. :)) My sentiments exactly -- Live life to the full.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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I am finally getting around to reviewing all the wonderful Walt Whitman free verse offerings to the Poetry Potlatch last Saturday.
I very much enjoy the framework you wrote your poem around, some days, other days, most days and last day. That runs through the lot and it's an amazing piece of poetry, Judy.
Great write at the free write. :)) My sentiments exactly -- Live life to the full.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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thank you so much Gloria. I so appreciate your review. When I write free verse I just write as fast as I can then go back and listen to what I write. I have learned so much about my self by doing that. I am learning so much on this site. Thank you so much . Your were the first person to ever greet
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That's what I do too Judy. Is get in the "zone" and write what comes from there freely and quickly because that is where the real magic of poetry is.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, Judy, I think you could be writing this amazingly profound poem for every one of us - I KNOW you wrote it for me! You cover the whole spectrum of human emotion in three incredible stanzas. I love how you introduce each one too! Marvelous poem!!!***********************************************!!!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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Wow, Judy, I think you could be writing this amazingly profound poem for every one of us - I KNOW you wrote it for me! You cover the whole spectrum of human emotion in three incredible stanzas. I love how you introduce each one too! Marvelous poem!!!***********************************************!!!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much. When I free write I just go as fast as I can and don't worry about what it says. then I go back and discover what I wrote and edit it. I sometimes learn so much about myself in those moments.
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You're welcome. :)
Comment from foxangie123
How brilliantly minded penning. This touched my soul at the deepest level indeed. You are such a great Poetess friend. You teach with the words you write versus telling or implying its meaning. A great gift you share.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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How brilliantly minded penning. This touched my soul at the deepest level indeed. You are such a great Poetess friend. You teach with the words you write versus telling or implying its meaning. A great gift you share.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much. When I free verse I write really fast and then go back and discover what I have written and edit it. I am often surprised at what I was thinking.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Judy, what a wonderful poem you have written here which is reflective of all that life throws at you. From sheer joy to deep sorrow. Yes you do express what life encompasses. Beautiful words. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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Hi Judy, what a wonderful poem you have written here which is reflective of all that life throws at you. From sheer joy to deep sorrow. Yes you do express what life encompasses. Beautiful words. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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thank you, I love free verse. I just write as fast as I can then go back and get to be surprised by what I wrote and edit it. I learn so much about myself when I do that.
Comment from Gert sherwood
How wonderful you have written about your days and the moods they gave you
I like your most encouraging day when you wrote-
Dreams will tumble out of me
Scriptures will pour out of my mouth with ease
I will choose the path of righteousness
Thank you for sharing
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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How wonderful you have written about your days and the moods they gave you
I like your most encouraging day when you wrote-
Dreams will tumble out of me
Scriptures will pour out of my mouth with ease
I will choose the path of righteousness
Thank you for sharing
Gert
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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thank you gert. Life has been a wonderful roller coaster ride and i have never lost my faith that the world is a good place. I am the cockeyed optimist in South Pacific. But I do face reality and sadness when it enters my house. Thank you so much for the review.
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You are welcome jusylee72
Gert
Comment from Mary Wakeford
What a thoughtful and reflective work on life in general, faith, and the ability to acknowledge the factors that affect us as we travel the journey. My only suggested would be in toning down the start white against the deep black, which was a little jarring for me to read. Perhaps a change in the font style would tone it down. It seemed to be pulsating for me, but also, I am overdue for a visit to the eye doctor!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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What a thoughtful and reflective work on life in general, faith, and the ability to acknowledge the factors that affect us as we travel the journey. My only suggested would be in toning down the start white against the deep black, which was a little jarring for me to read. Perhaps a change in the font style would tone it down. It seemed to be pulsating for me, but also, I am overdue for a visit to the eye doctor!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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I was thinking the exact same thing when I was reading it. That white does vibrate. Thank you so much for the kind words. I truly enjoy free verse.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Jusylee,
Wow, you've outdone yourself here. While reading this extraordinary piece.
I kept thinking how much I could relate to your thoughts within this. You've
expressed yourself well and yet in a very unique way with vivid imagery
as well as spirituality.
Because you did not offer author notes, I did not realize this poem was in
response to the potlatch challenge. When I went back to read it again...I
saw the "sounds" well represented within this with..."outrageous thunder" "music" and "trees blowing"
This is a compelling piece and seems to represent Walt's style quite well...But, I
don't know much. "On most days" is kind of sad...but, I know what you mean...it
represents the reality of everyday life.
Very gorgeous work,
Linda
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Jusylee,
Wow, you've outdone yourself here. While reading this extraordinary piece.
I kept thinking how much I could relate to your thoughts within this. You've
expressed yourself well and yet in a very unique way with vivid imagery
as well as spirituality.
Because you did not offer author notes, I did not realize this poem was in
response to the potlatch challenge. When I went back to read it again...I
saw the "sounds" well represented within this with..."outrageous thunder" "music" and "trees blowing"
This is a compelling piece and seems to represent Walt's style quite well...But, I
don't know much. "On most days" is kind of sad...but, I know what you mean...it
represents the reality of everyday life.
Very gorgeous work,
Linda
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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thank you so much. When I write free verse I just write as fast as I can and let thoughts tumble then I go back and edit it. I have learned so many things about myself when I do that. Sometimes it tells me my weaknesses and gives me a slam to get back into life with every thing I can imagine. You made my day. Judy
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Interesting.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, what a beautifully written poem. I love the way you show our duel natures, and describes them so perfectly.
Even the "most days" where you show the balanced days,
But, the best part of all is the last portion on "the last day". It is artfully written, and composed.
Well, well done!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Wow, what a beautifully written poem. I love the way you show our duel natures, and describes them so perfectly.
Even the "most days" where you show the balanced days,
But, the best part of all is the last portion on "the last day". It is artfully written, and composed.
Well, well done!
Rhonda
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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thank you Rhonda , I took the Walt Wittman write a free verse challenge. Thank you for your generous stars and for your constant support. I am learning more every day.
