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Comment from nomi338
Ha, ha. Finding yourself in a brand new situation, you are so taken with figuring out what to do, you fail to notice the predator approaching with the full intent of feasting on you as the source of a brand new meal. Burp!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Ha, ha. Finding yourself in a brand new situation, you are so taken with figuring out what to do, you fail to notice the predator approaching with the full intent of feasting on you as the source of a brand new meal. Burp!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Thank you, nomi, for taking a look at this. Bill
Comment from frogbook
Yuccyyyyyy-hahaha. I cracked up as I got a kick out of your going from your wise and philosophical take on life to a worm ball-LOL. Not sure which one I loved more though. (truly, I think it's the worm ball-though it's kind of a love/hate relationship.)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Yuccyyyyyy-hahaha. I cracked up as I got a kick out of your going from your wise and philosophical take on life to a worm ball-LOL. Not sure which one I loved more though. (truly, I think it's the worm ball-though it's kind of a love/hate relationship.)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Thank you, FB, for reviewing the worm ball. Bill
Comment from damommy
You have to feel a little sorry for the worms being dumped out on CONCRETE. No hope of escape from those birds.
This is so cute - worm ball. Very original.
Thank you. 8-)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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You have to feel a little sorry for the worms being dumped out on CONCRETE. No hope of escape from those birds.
This is so cute - worm ball. Very original.
Thank you. 8-)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Thank you, da, for reviewing the worm ball. Bill
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That was so cute! 8-)
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That was so cute! 8-)
Comment from cumulus365
Your poem is very fun to read. I always enjoy reading yours. I think a fisherman would love to see this worm ball for it would save him big time from digging. You creatively and humorously used this subject to fit in the format 7X7. A fine job. I would say, there is no need to capitalize the "The" at the beginning because you want to start out with gentleness for poetry not emphasizing like a paragraph. The ending is very scary... a feast for the birds. Your illustration used effectively enhances the poem. Nicely written. Best.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Your poem is very fun to read. I always enjoy reading yours. I think a fisherman would love to see this worm ball for it would save him big time from digging. You creatively and humorously used this subject to fit in the format 7X7. A fine job. I would say, there is no need to capitalize the "The" at the beginning because you want to start out with gentleness for poetry not emphasizing like a paragraph. The ending is very scary... a feast for the birds. Your illustration used effectively enhances the poem. Nicely written. Best.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Thank you for reviewing the worm ball. Bill
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You're welcome.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Ok, that is one disgusting picture ... yuck! I'm guessing all of the worms were in a container and someone dumped them onto the road. Well, this is certainly a very original premise for a write. I liked your ending ... "eventually birds came" ... good -- get rid of all those yucky worms!
Connie
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Ok, that is one disgusting picture ... yuck! I'm guessing all of the worms were in a container and someone dumped them onto the road. Well, this is certainly a very original premise for a write. I liked your ending ... "eventually birds came" ... good -- get rid of all those yucky worms!
Connie
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
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Thank you for giving this a look. Bill
