A Day at the Beach
A short poem of remembrance.16 total reviews
Comment from schatzling
Awesome
Perfect explanation
Captive words that even rhyme
Very deep even though utilizing a minimum of words
Absolutely perfectly written.
You should have won the contest, in my opinion
thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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Awesome
Perfect explanation
Captive words that even rhyme
Very deep even though utilizing a minimum of words
Absolutely perfectly written.
You should have won the contest, in my opinion
thanks for sharing
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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Your praise is much appreciated and very rewarding from a writer's point of view. Good luck in your writings.
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
This is terribly sad, but a tribute must be made and you have done a fine job. When you see war in these terms, you wonder why we don't engage in some sanity and end all war, doesn't it? But we don't and we won't until the last one--I, for one, am looking forward to that one. Touching. Lump in the throat. Deep pain in the heart.
Unbearable sadness. Your few words and thoughtful presentation have wrung every sad sentiment from so few words.
GoodHearted Woman
Marcia
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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This is terribly sad, but a tribute must be made and you have done a fine job. When you see war in these terms, you wonder why we don't engage in some sanity and end all war, doesn't it? But we don't and we won't until the last one--I, for one, am looking forward to that one. Touching. Lump in the throat. Deep pain in the heart.
Unbearable sadness. Your few words and thoughtful presentation have wrung every sad sentiment from so few words.
GoodHearted Woman
Marcia
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016
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Thank you for your kind words and thoughts. War ends when human frailty ends ... not likely. Good luck in your future writing efforts.
Comment from dragonpoet
Well worth the placing in the contest.
This reminds us about all the life lost in this battle and in every war. It also shows we should pray it never happens again.
I like the red background for the blood spilled.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Well worth the placing in the contest.
This reminds us about all the life lost in this battle and in every war. It also shows we should pray it never happens again.
I like the red background for the blood spilled.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Makes me happy to see such appreciation of my writing, but even more happy when past unselfish sacrifices
are remembered. Good luck in your own writing.
Comment from Ginger Banks
Deep and communicative of this sad and momentous occasion. Great wording and the accompanying picture and color within the boards are expressive in themselves. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on winning second place!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Deep and communicative of this sad and momentous occasion. Great wording and the accompanying picture and color within the boards are expressive in themselves. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on winning second place!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Appreciate your kind words and the congratulations. Thank you and good luck in your own writing efforts.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Just2Write
D-Day was a blood-bath, and the world paid a heavy price for freedom on that day. Lest we forget.
The world is back to full-fledged crazy these days, and I hope we don't ever have to re-learn the lessons that so many paid the ultimate price for
Great 2-4-2 - It says it all in just 8 syllables.
Rose.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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D-Day was a blood-bath, and the world paid a heavy price for freedom on that day. Lest we forget.
The world is back to full-fledged crazy these days, and I hope we don't ever have to re-learn the lessons that so many paid the ultimate price for
Great 2-4-2 - It says it all in just 8 syllables.
Rose.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Thank you for the nice review and rating. Good luck in your own writing.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Bravo! Describing the torture of wars reality in a most effective description in minimal words, evoking a visual that is all too terrific to imagine.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Bravo! Describing the torture of wars reality in a most effective description in minimal words, evoking a visual that is all too terrific to imagine.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Thank you for the appreciative words and nice rating. Good luck with your own writing.
Comment from judiverse
Oh, my. This is tremendous. You generated such emotion with your few words, and you even accomplished rhyme! That's a lot to achieve in eight words. Congratulations on this fine work. It will surely touch a nerve at this particular time, too, with D-Day coming up. Thanks for the service you put in. Best of luck in the contest. It's surely a winner. judi
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Oh, my. This is tremendous. You generated such emotion with your few words, and you even accomplished rhyme! That's a lot to achieve in eight words. Congratulations on this fine work. It will surely touch a nerve at this particular time, too, with D-Day coming up. Thanks for the service you put in. Best of luck in the contest. It's surely a winner. judi
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Your kind words and fine rating are doubly appreciated because you obviously respect history and the range of human efforts that produced it. Thank you.
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You're very welcome. Not the usual "Day at the Beach." judi
Comment from Louise Michelle
You did a very good job with this 2-4-2. Every word makes sense and the rhyming served to enhance the poem. World War II vets were indeed the greatest generation.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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You did a very good job with this 2-4-2. Every word makes sense and the rhyming served to enhance the poem. World War II vets were indeed the greatest generation.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed. Thank you for the fine rating and good luck in your own writing efforts.
Comment from Laurel Legion
Agree that it would've seemed appropriate for your contest to have at least one poem to be written on the subject of D-day's anniversary since that was your contest's deadline date as you pointed out. Regarding the 2-4-2 poetic scheme then for your contest entry, it manages to get the idea of what happened on June 6 of that particular day in history without becoming too fixated on the wartime violence beyond "blood-red sea spray."
Instead you chose to close your poem with "let's pray" to honor those soldiers who died from such a horrific battle that even they themselves weren't all too sure that it would succeed; just the overall fear and uncertainty they must have felt - only to get cut done in the prime of youth, never to know the results of their efforts. Good job and wish you luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Agree that it would've seemed appropriate for your contest to have at least one poem to be written on the subject of D-day's anniversary since that was your contest's deadline date as you pointed out. Regarding the 2-4-2 poetic scheme then for your contest entry, it manages to get the idea of what happened on June 6 of that particular day in history without becoming too fixated on the wartime violence beyond "blood-red sea spray."
Instead you chose to close your poem with "let's pray" to honor those soldiers who died from such a horrific battle that even they themselves weren't all too sure that it would succeed; just the overall fear and uncertainty they must have felt - only to get cut done in the prime of youth, never to know the results of their efforts. Good job and wish you luck in your contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Appreciate your understanding comments and nice rating. Indeed, such unselfish sacrifice should not be forgotten. Good luck in your own writing.
Comment from zanya
This is simply a haunting and powerful evocation within the strict structures of the 2-4-2 of that significant moment in the history of the world when serious action had to be taken to stop WW2
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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This is simply a haunting and powerful evocation within the strict structures of the 2-4-2 of that significant moment in the history of the world when serious action had to be taken to stop WW2
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Much appreciate your kind words and fine rating. Good luck with your writing.
