An Accounting of Man
ABC Poem21 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, this is an awesome ABC poem....and so very true...man has been given the intelligence to do good...and so many prefer evil...makes ya wonder why...hummmmmm....really a great poem you...and I love the way you have it over this perfect picture...very well written my friend...one of your best...luff Linda xxoo
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Hi Michael, this is an awesome ABC poem....and so very true...man has been given the intelligence to do good...and so many prefer evil...makes ya wonder why...hummmmmm....really a great poem you...and I love the way you have it over this perfect picture...very well written my friend...one of your best...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh you genius!!!!!!! Now that being said, don't let that go to your head.
I love it, your style of ABC is excellent and it made sense through the whole thing at the same time.
Descriptions were spot on...hunger for possession...well, ugh, ok.
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Oh you genius!!!!!!! Now that being said, don't let that go to your head.
I love it, your style of ABC is excellent and it made sense through the whole thing at the same time.
Descriptions were spot on...hunger for possession...well, ugh, ok.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
Comment from nancyjam
Great ABC entry. Excellent flow of
ideas while following the restrictions of
the form.
Man was given intelligence to know good from evil and free will to choose.
It seems lately more are choosing evil.
A thought provoking poem. well done. Best of luck in the contest.
Nancy
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Great ABC entry. Excellent flow of
ideas while following the restrictions of
the form.
Man was given intelligence to know good from evil and free will to choose.
It seems lately more are choosing evil.
A thought provoking poem. well done. Best of luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
Comment from Dawn Munro
Mikey, this is marvelous, but I am not sure that you've followed the form. It's 5 lines - 4 consecutive alphabetically, and the fifth line doesn't have to be...at least that's what I think...I will double-check. But let me say this: as far as I am concerned, this has it in the bag!!!
I'll get back to you...
Yes, I'm right - I just checked Poetry Dances - the reason I remember te form so well is because I did the exact same thing you did when I wrote my first one - Gungalo kindly corrected me in a PM so I could fix it before the contest. I do NOT know if the committee would disregard it for this, but why take a chance?
Check with others to be sure, but this is SO beautiful I would HATE if it wasn't considered by the judges because you have 5-line stanzas that all begin with an alphabetical order...
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Mikey, this is marvelous, but I am not sure that you've followed the form. It's 5 lines - 4 consecutive alphabetically, and the fifth line doesn't have to be...at least that's what I think...I will double-check. But let me say this: as far as I am concerned, this has it in the bag!!!
I'll get back to you...
Yes, I'm right - I just checked Poetry Dances - the reason I remember te form so well is because I did the exact same thing you did when I wrote my first one - Gungalo kindly corrected me in a PM so I could fix it before the contest. I do NOT know if the committee would disregard it for this, but why take a chance?
Check with others to be sure, but this is SO beautiful I would HATE if it wasn't considered by the judges because you have 5-line stanzas that all begin with an alphabetical order...
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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The fifth letter can be any letter. It can be in order or not. I hope I don't have to sleep with the judges to get considered. LOL
I don't think they're fond of me anyway. As long as you liked it I'm happy. A cute picture of my Grandpa though, yes?
Thanks so much. mikey :))
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Liar, liar, pants on fire. LOL. I slept with all of them; left them wanting more. It's why I don't win I guess...HAHAHAHAHAHA!
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Ahhhh. I had the feeling they thought I was nothing special. LOL
Comment from barkingdog
No doubt that's why we lie. Deception has brought men wealth and power.
And to many it's led to their demise.
Two suggestions, Mikey:
-'Vain(,) glorious and proud
walked the master ... slaves marked their
(The dash just didn't work for me. I was reading master-slaves. An ellipses gives the impression not only of a pause but of deleting the word 'while'.)
Good luck in the contest with this excellent well thought out entry.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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No doubt that's why we lie. Deception has brought men wealth and power.
And to many it's led to their demise.
Two suggestions, Mikey:
-'Vain(,) glorious and proud
walked the master ... slaves marked their
(The dash just didn't work for me. I was reading master-slaves. An ellipses gives the impression not only of a pause but of deleting the word 'while'.)
Good luck in the contest with this excellent well thought out entry.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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I see what you mean. I'll think about changing it. Good point, it's a major undertaking fixing it though. LOL I have to redo the entire thing...
Glad you liked this. Thanks so much, mikey
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It's all one piece like in Adobe InDesign. I know how that takes time to add all the elements. Do you turn it into a PDF to put it on FS? I'm just curious about the process, since I'm seeing so many of them now.
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You drop the artwork into paint and size it. Then you type the text onto it.
Then you download the finished piece to Photobucket (a free account).
From there you can copy and paste to anywhere. It's pretty easy actually with a little practice. I usually use it for short pieces like haiku. But, it can be used for longer ones, just more difficult. Gloria's great at it. :)) mikey
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So it can all be done on like for free.
That's amazing.
Now, I see why so many of the poets use Photobucket.
I learn something new everyday.
Gloria's posts ARE amazing.
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Oh, I know. She's killer!
Yes. Photobucket is cool when you want to put artwork within your piece too. Like a picture at the end. You can have illustrations and graphics in your stories. Gloria did those instructional pieces with screen shots using Photobucket and paint. Paint is to get things the size you want. I'm totally lame when it comes to technical stuff, so it isn't difficult. It just takes some practice is all. I'm getting better.
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There are so many free things on like to use.
I'm learning more than just writing from the folks here on FS. Thank you, Mikey.
Comment from LIJ Red
You have taken the sequential initial letters and formed lines that read as smoothly as free verse, quite a feat of word-juggling. Excellent.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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You have taken the sequential initial letters and formed lines that read as smoothly as free verse, quite a feat of word-juggling. Excellent.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Glad you liked it. I enjoy a little craziness like this. Thanks much, mikey
Comment from Mary Wakeford
An excellent contest entry for the ABC poetry contest. Your word choices are excellent in describing the blight of mankind, and the neanderthal image containing your lines coukd not be better suited. Good luck in the contest, Michael.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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An excellent contest entry for the ABC poetry contest. Your word choices are excellent in describing the blight of mankind, and the neanderthal image containing your lines coukd not be better suited. Good luck in the contest, Michael.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Hi, Mary
I'm delighted you enjoyed this. What an encouraging review. Thanks so very much, mikey :))
Comment from Nichola
I love this. Your poem is uniquely penned and it is compelling. Your use of language is wonderful - "vain glorious and proud walked the master ..." and "man's destiny whose zenith is demise." has good internal rhyme. Simply fantastic.
Also love your second stanza - it is just what the doctor ordered.
Bravo!
Nichola
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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I love this. Your poem is uniquely penned and it is compelling. Your use of language is wonderful - "vain glorious and proud walked the master ..." and "man's destiny whose zenith is demise." has good internal rhyme. Simply fantastic.
Also love your second stanza - it is just what the doctor ordered.
Bravo!
Nichola
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Hi, Nichoa
LONG time. Nice to see you.
Wow. I'm so thrilled you enjoyed this. What a great review. You made my evening. Thanks a bunch, mikey :))
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your ABC Contest entry. You did a wonderful job writing this poem and making a statement. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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I enjoyed reading your ABC Contest entry. You did a wonderful job writing this poem and making a statement. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Thanks a million, Barbara
Trying to get back to work here and get caught up. Jeesh.
So pleased you liked this. mikey
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Mikey,
giving you sixes is becoming a habit. I will have to put one in reserve every week for you I think.
A great ABC poem. Although I have not heard of one before you did an amazing job using each letter of the alphabet. I also like your topic, a great insight into the growth and destruction of man. And they call us intelligent, of course with you being the exception I think they got that wrong.
Great read.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Hi Mikey,
giving you sixes is becoming a habit. I will have to put one in reserve every week for you I think.
A great ABC poem. Although I have not heard of one before you did an amazing job using each letter of the alphabet. I also like your topic, a great insight into the growth and destruction of man. And they call us intelligent, of course with you being the exception I think they got that wrong.
Great read.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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You are beyond sweet, Lady Brenda. Gee, I'm speechless.
I'm so pleased you liked this. I've been so busy I feel like a stranger. I'm buried and finding just enough time to sneak by for potlatch. How's your book coming? Can't wait.
Thanks a million for this. Mikey :)) xo
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Hi Mikey,
thank you for your reply.
I miss you not being so active on FS at the moment. I have been writing less poetry and getting on with my book. I have now written 95,000 words and am just completeing chapter 69. They. are only short chapters and when I finally format the book they will probably be condensed into larger chapters. I'm not sure an Elizabethan saga is your thing. lol Would love to share it with you but it is still in the re-reading and correction stage.
I try to enter the potlatch every week but I don't always manage it on the day.
Will hopefully be there this week.
Brenda:))x
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Yes, I love period pieces. I wrote one set in the Dark Ages of all times. I have a story of two souls who encounter each other on Earth in various lifetimes. So they first meet as cavemen and then it progresses from there. The Dark Ages one went on forever because I couldn't bring myself to kill them off. HAHAHA! I know you have some pieces I need to review and other reviews to answer too. The real world seems to think I'm needed. HA! I disagree. mikey :))xo
