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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow! A mini marathon.
I applaud your persistence to achieve a Tiara of sonnets.
Within that tiara you have also showcased the Petrarchan, Spencerian
and English sonnet formats.
Perfectly formatted and rich with description and word imagery.
Spring--my favourite time of the year.
Just a tip;
Check the last two lines of the last sonnet as they are indented from the rest.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 11-May-2016
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Wow! A mini marathon.
I applaud your persistence to achieve a Tiara of sonnets.
Within that tiara you have also showcased the Petrarchan, Spencerian
and English sonnet formats.
Perfectly formatted and rich with description and word imagery.
Spring--my favourite time of the year.
Just a tip;
Check the last two lines of the last sonnet as they are indented from the rest.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 11-May-2016
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Thank you Shirley. That indent is part of the format,
Comment from Eternal Muse
Tom, I am so glad I have a six left. This is brilliant work on all counts. Thumbs up to Cat for inventing this form (I asked her yesterday if she would consider running a Tiara contest). Phenomenal use of three sonnet forms. Flawless sonnets, loved each one to bits. I love the concept of a Tiara of sonnets vs. a Crown, as the crown may be too long for those with shorter attention span (smile).
Excellent work. I will bookmark it.
Love, Y.
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Tom, I am so glad I have a six left. This is brilliant work on all counts. Thumbs up to Cat for inventing this form (I asked her yesterday if she would consider running a Tiara contest). Phenomenal use of three sonnet forms. Flawless sonnets, loved each one to bits. I love the concept of a Tiara of sonnets vs. a Crown, as the crown may be too long for those with shorter attention span (smile).
Excellent work. I will bookmark it.
Love, Y.
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Thank you yeltel, for this wonderful review. The stars are a sweet recognition.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Ah, my favorite time of year. It seems colorful buds and flowers are everywhere. But, the Crabapple is special. Showy and bold. You did this springtime beauty justice with not one, but three sonnets. Well done and immensely enjoyed, Tom.
"A stunning treat to soothe our winter eyes..." (Winter eyes indeed!)
"With glowing shades of dark carnelian red,
its petals swathe broad limbs in Nature's jewels..." (loved this description)
"...where whorls and swirls of elegance unite,
creating lovely, natural bouquets..." (so fitting for the beauty of nature!)
Marietta
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Ah, my favorite time of year. It seems colorful buds and flowers are everywhere. But, the Crabapple is special. Showy and bold. You did this springtime beauty justice with not one, but three sonnets. Well done and immensely enjoyed, Tom.
"A stunning treat to soothe our winter eyes..." (Winter eyes indeed!)
"With glowing shades of dark carnelian red,
its petals swathe broad limbs in Nature's jewels..." (loved this description)
"...where whorls and swirls of elegance unite,
creating lovely, natural bouquets..." (so fitting for the beauty of nature!)
Marietta
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you very much, Marietta. I appreciate this excellent review, and am happy you enjoyed the Sonnets. .
Comment from Dean Kuch
Dang it, Tom. You make writing of sonnets look so darn easy, and I'm here to tell ya that they're not, at least not for me.
And you didn't stop at just one, oh, no. You wrote three, count 'em, THREE! beautifully written sonnets; a A Petrarchan Sonnet, an English sonnet, and a Spenserian Sonnet. Each one was as perfectly written (as sonnets go) and as lovely as the ones before it.
Bravo, sir.
I tip my hat to your poetic prowess...
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Dang it, Tom. You make writing of sonnets look so darn easy, and I'm here to tell ya that they're not, at least not for me.
And you didn't stop at just one, oh, no. You wrote three, count 'em, THREE! beautifully written sonnets; a A Petrarchan Sonnet, an English sonnet, and a Spenserian Sonnet. Each one was as perfectly written (as sonnets go) and as lovely as the ones before it.
Bravo, sir.
I tip my hat to your poetic prowess...
~Dean
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you very much Dean, for that wonderful review. I'll take a bow at that one.
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As well you should, Tom.
You're more than welcome, my friend.
~Dean
Comment from ciliverde
I adore this tiara of sonnets, Tom, you have written is such beautiful and lyrical descriptions of the crabapple tree blooming in wonderful, crimson display. The different shades of red are very apt and imaginative.
I started to copy down a few favorite lines, and then feared I'd quote your entire tiara right back to you....
claret buds soon fill the bluest skies
Boreas blew winds where Winter looms.
Now Zephyr's west winds yield this bright surprise...
so very nice! I am also a huge fan of the way you brought in the various Greek gods. Quite six-worthy, my friend! Truly inspiring,
Carol
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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I adore this tiara of sonnets, Tom, you have written is such beautiful and lyrical descriptions of the crabapple tree blooming in wonderful, crimson display. The different shades of red are very apt and imaginative.
I started to copy down a few favorite lines, and then feared I'd quote your entire tiara right back to you....
claret buds soon fill the bluest skies
Boreas blew winds where Winter looms.
Now Zephyr's west winds yield this bright surprise...
so very nice! I am also a huge fan of the way you brought in the various Greek gods. Quite six-worthy, my friend! Truly inspiring,
Carol
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you Carol. Glad you enjoyed it and the crabapple blooms.
Comment from WalkerMan
This really should be a six, but I've used my quota for the week. You took the maximum challenge here and executed it masterfully. Bravo! Nice supporting image and harmonious choice of white text on color-family-matched background complete the delightful effect. Then you went the extra mile with the glossary to keep readers from having to stop to reach for a dictionary. Finally, you clearly explained the format, its history, and the way you chose to implement it. As I said, this is a six. Maybe the next reader will take heed and give it to you. Superb.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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This really should be a six, but I've used my quota for the week. You took the maximum challenge here and executed it masterfully. Bravo! Nice supporting image and harmonious choice of white text on color-family-matched background complete the delightful effect. Then you went the extra mile with the glossary to keep readers from having to stop to reach for a dictionary. Finally, you clearly explained the format, its history, and the way you chose to implement it. As I said, this is a six. Maybe the next reader will take heed and give it to you. Superb.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you Walkerman. That was an excellent assessment. I appreciate the review and your comments.
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You are welcome. Sorry about being out of sixes. There's so much great talent on FanStory! You never know what wondrous words might be in the next item to be reviewed. -- Mike
Comment from Joan E.
I have seen some trees in Bejing like the one you photographed, but I did not know what they were. I am glad you were inspired by Cat's Tiara of Sonnets and created each in a different format for this poem. The battle of the winds comes through in the first sonnet. I admired your rhymes--here's to "poets' dreams" and "Nature's jewels' like the cranapple! Well done- Joan, from Beijing
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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I have seen some trees in Bejing like the one you photographed, but I did not know what they were. I am glad you were inspired by Cat's Tiara of Sonnets and created each in a different format for this poem. The battle of the winds comes through in the first sonnet. I admired your rhymes--here's to "poets' dreams" and "Nature's jewels' like the cranapple! Well done- Joan, from Beijing
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you so. Uh for this long distance review as well as those wonderful stars.
Comment from c_lucas
You leave no doubt that you are a well versed poet. Your poem is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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You leave no doubt that you are a well versed poet. Your poem is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you c_lucas
Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
I liked this much better than a Crown of Sonnets. Much, much, MUCH! It was so lovely and the threesome of sonnets seemed to completely round out the image of the crab apple in bloom. They are perfectly striking poems, each, and together, they are music. Thanks for sharing!
A couple of potential notes:
1.) What (sheer) delights blaze, when Crabapples bloom,
--> again in the last line of the poem
2.) (Where?) growth and rebirth stage a springtime stand,
Hope this helps!
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Tom,
I liked this much better than a Crown of Sonnets. Much, much, MUCH! It was so lovely and the threesome of sonnets seemed to completely round out the image of the crab apple in bloom. They are perfectly striking poems, each, and together, they are music. Thanks for sharing!
A couple of potential notes:
1.) What (sheer) delights blaze, when Crabapples bloom,
--> again in the last line of the poem
2.) (Where?) growth and rebirth stage a springtime stand,
Hope this helps!
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you Robyn for the review and stars. I fixed those errors, thank you.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. Yes, I enjoyed this poem. It reminds me of my father's fruit farm. We had miles of blooming trees every spring. It was a sight to behold. Thank you for reviving my good memories.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Excellent. Yes, I enjoyed this poem. It reminds me of my father's fruit farm. We had miles of blooming trees every spring. It was a sight to behold. Thank you for reviving my good memories.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you prettybluebirds.
