Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi TREISCHEL,
Well what a little poser are you. Mind you if I had a car like that I would be to.
So much more fun to be had when the sub comes out. I bet that feels good out there shooting the breeze.
Great poem and some super rhyming.
Brenda:))x

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

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reply by the author on 04-May-2016

Thank you brenda. Yes, it does.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

You sure do appear to have a spring in your step. Lol.
I'm a little envious as autumn begins to settle in here in OZ.
The joy and feedom you feel with the season and the new car is told so eloquently.
The theme is clear and concise and the poem flows just as I'd expect
thoughts to.
I enjoyed the poem.
Free style is challenging foe a rhymer like me. Lol.
"-) Shirley

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

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reply by the author on 04-May-2016

Thank you Shirley. Actually the car is not new. It's a 2007 model. I had it nearly 10 years now. Your spring will come. Cd

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I reccognize this feeling. I have a Mazda MX5 Miata and I'm a roof down man as well. The weather is just beginning to get right for it too. So I could really empathisiz with this poem without any trouble at all.

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

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reply by the author on 04-May-2016

Thank you Pantygynt. I like those Miatas too. If I could afford more than one car, I'd have one of those in the stable. Happy traveling!

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Congratulations on having the car that fits the man! I enjoyed your free style poem and its rhymes to reflect the panache. Keep playing in your hot Pontiac! Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 04-May-2016

Thank you Joan. I will. Every sunny day.

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

Nicely done... great car... I know just how you feel... I"ve had a few convertibles, I miss the top down days... Although my car nowadays is a much better car, even if they were pretty awesome... this one is my dream car. lol
And... my allergies are so horrendous, I can't even open the sun roof in Texas. :(
or the windows for that matter.
Lovely car, lovely free verse with some awesome rhyme, and other poetic devices. I enjoyed it.
Well done
Enjoy the ride and be very careful... don't text and drive.
Hugs
Cat

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 04-May-2016

Thanks Cat, for that sound advice. I promise, I won't text and drive. So sorry that your allergies prevent the joy of top down driving.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
"Top Down, Spring Day" is excellent free verse with unorthodox structure helping carry the meaning of the poem. Its figurative language, rhyme and flow give a sense of the joy you feel driving your Pontiac G6 convertible on a glorious spring day.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you Preston, yup, that covers it.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Yep, it's finally warm enough that you can take that top off and let the wind blow free! I can't imagine how much fun that must be -- allllmost as much fun as this free-spirited, free-style poem with scattered rhyme! *smile*

Thanks!

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you Robyn. Almost!

Comment from edieas

Excellent

A foxy gray haired daddy-o in his foxy ride. Does life get any better for us? The waist band bends southward but the spirit soars! Love it! Thanks for the write and to your wife, forgive my flirt. lol

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you edieas. That was a hoot. But do so close to the truth.

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

A fun read and inclusive of the humor with regard to the sex appeal of the car being boosted by it's driver. Great rhyme and flow and the imagery accompanying it works well. My only suggestion would be to tone down the white lettering, possibly with a cream font would make it not so jarring for the reader? Well done.

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you Mary. I'll consider that.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

I've never owned a convertible, but envy you on warm spring days. It was fun to share the thrill of driving your "Dynamo" vicariously. Nice use of intermittent rhyme to add a playful tone to your poem.

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you RodG. It is fun to drive.