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Comment from schatzling
Pretending we do not hurt is just pretend, cause we do. some of us just play it off a lot better than others can.
Thanks for sharing.....and now to make you feel somewhat.....at least I hope....better, even if just a little bit.....
some more of my quotables
ALL THE THINGS
THAT HURT YOU,
ACTUALLY
TEACH YOU
BE THANKFUL FOR
ALL THE TROUBLES
THAT YOU DO NOT
HAVE.
ISN'T IT FUNNY
HOW DAY BY DAY
NOTHING CHANGES
BUT WHEN YOU
LOOK BACK
EVERYTHING IS
DIFFERENT.
ROCK BOTTOM
BECAME THE
SOLID FOUNDATION
ON WHICH I
REBUILT MY LIFE.
IT IS NOT THE LOAD
THAT BREAKS YOU
DOWN, IT IS THE
WAY YOU CARRY IT.
DRESS SHABBILY
AND THEY
REMEMBER THE DRESS;
DRESS IMPECCABLY
AND THEY REMEMBER
THE WOMAN.
THE FIRST STEP
TOWARDS GETTING
SOMEWHERE IS TO
DECIDE THAT YOU ARE
NOT GOING TO STAY
WHERE YOU ARE.
GROWTH IS PAINFUL.
CHANGE IS PAINFUL.
BUT NOTHING IS AS
PAINFUL AS STAYING
STUCK SOMEWHERE
YOU DO NOT BELONG.
SOME DAY SOMEONE IS GOING TO HUG YOU SO TIGHT
THAT ALL OF YOUR BROKEN PIECES FIT BACK TOGETHER.
WHEN YOU ARE HAPPY YOU ENJOY THE MUSIC.
WHEN YOU ARE SAD YOU UNDERSTAND THE LYRICS.
LIVE IN SUCH A WAY THAT IF SOMEONE SPOKE BADLY OF YOU
NO ONE WOULD BELIEVE IT
WHY WISH UPON A STAR?
WHEN YOU CAN PRAY TO THE ONE
WHO CREATED IT.
MAYBE THE JOURNEY ISN'T SO MUCH ABOUT BECOMING ANYTHING.
MAYBE IT IS ABOUT UNBECOMING EVERYTHING THAT IS NOT REALLY YOU,
SO YOU CAN BE WHO YOU WERE MEANT TO BE IN THE FIRST PLACE.
IT IS NOT ABOUT BEING THE BEST.
IT IS ABOUT BEING BETTER THAN YOU WERE YESTERDAY.
SOMETIMES WHEN THINGS ARE FALLING APART
THEY MAY ACTUALLY BE FALLING INTO PLACE.
DIE WITH MEMORIES, NOT DREAMS.
WHEN THINKING ABOUT LIFE, REMEMBER THIS:
NO AMOUNT OF GUILT CAN SOLVE THE PAST
AND NO AMOUNT OF ANXIETY CAN CHANGE THE FUTURE.
AFTER TUESDAY, EVEN THE CALENDAR GOES W T F
ISN'T FUNNY HOW RED, WHITE, AND BLUE REPRESENT FREEDOM.....
UNTIL THEY ARE FLASHING BEHIND YOU.
FINDING SOMEONE WORTH WAKING UP TO
IS BETTER THAN FINDING SOMEONE TO SLEEP WITH.
SOMETIMES WHAT YOU ARE MOST AFRAID OF DOING
IS THE VERY THING THAT WILL SET YOU FREE.
YOU WILL NEVER FIND THE RIGHT PERSON
IF YOU NEVER LET GO OF THE WRONG ONE
THERE ARE 6,775,235,842 PEOPLE IN THE WORLD
WHY ARE YOU LETTING ONE OF THEM RUIN YOUR LIFE?
BE YOURSELF; BECAUSE AN ORIGINAL IS WORTH MORE THAN A COPY.
And just one more....please excuse me if any are duplicates.
YOU HAVE TO ACCEPT THAT SOME CHAPTERS IN OUR LIVES
HAVE TO CLOSE WITHOUT CLOSURE.
THERE IS NO POINT IN LOSING YOURSELF BY
TRYING TO FIX WHAT IS MEANT TO STAY BROKEN
I think I went overboard.....I am so sorry....but since I typed it, I am leaving it here for you to read anyway.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2016
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Pretending we do not hurt is just pretend, cause we do. some of us just play it off a lot better than others can.
Thanks for sharing.....and now to make you feel somewhat.....at least I hope....better, even if just a little bit.....
some more of my quotables
ALL THE THINGS
THAT HURT YOU,
ACTUALLY
TEACH YOU
BE THANKFUL FOR
ALL THE TROUBLES
THAT YOU DO NOT
HAVE.
ISN'T IT FUNNY
HOW DAY BY DAY
NOTHING CHANGES
BUT WHEN YOU
LOOK BACK
EVERYTHING IS
DIFFERENT.
ROCK BOTTOM
BECAME THE
SOLID FOUNDATION
ON WHICH I
REBUILT MY LIFE.
IT IS NOT THE LOAD
THAT BREAKS YOU
DOWN, IT IS THE
WAY YOU CARRY IT.
DRESS SHABBILY
AND THEY
REMEMBER THE DRESS;
DRESS IMPECCABLY
AND THEY REMEMBER
THE WOMAN.
THE FIRST STEP
TOWARDS GETTING
SOMEWHERE IS TO
DECIDE THAT YOU ARE
NOT GOING TO STAY
WHERE YOU ARE.
GROWTH IS PAINFUL.
CHANGE IS PAINFUL.
BUT NOTHING IS AS
PAINFUL AS STAYING
STUCK SOMEWHERE
YOU DO NOT BELONG.
SOME DAY SOMEONE IS GOING TO HUG YOU SO TIGHT
THAT ALL OF YOUR BROKEN PIECES FIT BACK TOGETHER.
WHEN YOU ARE HAPPY YOU ENJOY THE MUSIC.
WHEN YOU ARE SAD YOU UNDERSTAND THE LYRICS.
LIVE IN SUCH A WAY THAT IF SOMEONE SPOKE BADLY OF YOU
NO ONE WOULD BELIEVE IT
WHY WISH UPON A STAR?
WHEN YOU CAN PRAY TO THE ONE
WHO CREATED IT.
MAYBE THE JOURNEY ISN'T SO MUCH ABOUT BECOMING ANYTHING.
MAYBE IT IS ABOUT UNBECOMING EVERYTHING THAT IS NOT REALLY YOU,
SO YOU CAN BE WHO YOU WERE MEANT TO BE IN THE FIRST PLACE.
IT IS NOT ABOUT BEING THE BEST.
IT IS ABOUT BEING BETTER THAN YOU WERE YESTERDAY.
SOMETIMES WHEN THINGS ARE FALLING APART
THEY MAY ACTUALLY BE FALLING INTO PLACE.
DIE WITH MEMORIES, NOT DREAMS.
WHEN THINKING ABOUT LIFE, REMEMBER THIS:
NO AMOUNT OF GUILT CAN SOLVE THE PAST
AND NO AMOUNT OF ANXIETY CAN CHANGE THE FUTURE.
AFTER TUESDAY, EVEN THE CALENDAR GOES W T F
ISN'T FUNNY HOW RED, WHITE, AND BLUE REPRESENT FREEDOM.....
UNTIL THEY ARE FLASHING BEHIND YOU.
FINDING SOMEONE WORTH WAKING UP TO
IS BETTER THAN FINDING SOMEONE TO SLEEP WITH.
SOMETIMES WHAT YOU ARE MOST AFRAID OF DOING
IS THE VERY THING THAT WILL SET YOU FREE.
YOU WILL NEVER FIND THE RIGHT PERSON
IF YOU NEVER LET GO OF THE WRONG ONE
THERE ARE 6,775,235,842 PEOPLE IN THE WORLD
WHY ARE YOU LETTING ONE OF THEM RUIN YOUR LIFE?
BE YOURSELF; BECAUSE AN ORIGINAL IS WORTH MORE THAN A COPY.
And just one more....please excuse me if any are duplicates.
YOU HAVE TO ACCEPT THAT SOME CHAPTERS IN OUR LIVES
HAVE TO CLOSE WITHOUT CLOSURE.
THERE IS NO POINT IN LOSING YOURSELF BY
TRYING TO FIX WHAT IS MEANT TO STAY BROKEN
I think I went overboard.....I am so sorry....but since I typed it, I am leaving it here for you to read anyway.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2016
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Schatzling, this Sunday my National debut as one of the worst bakers in america is showing at 9 central time on the food network. I have some friends coming over to watch it with me. If I could I would pick you to also watch it with me. I so love your connection with the world. I so hate your shyness and disbelief in yourself that keeps you holding back and not writing your story. I may just have to come visit you this next summer and we will write together. I believe in every inch of you. the day you believe in yourself , I will celebrate.
Comment from Natalie Walker
This is a truly heartfelt poem that sets a scene and says so much in such few words. At first, I thought it was just going to be a hollow list about not caring what people think, but the end really brought it home, making it personal and honest. I see no errors. Nice work.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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This is a truly heartfelt poem that sets a scene and says so much in such few words. At first, I thought it was just going to be a hollow list about not caring what people think, but the end really brought it home, making it personal and honest. I see no errors. Nice work.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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when I was young I remember feeling this way. Now , I would never want to be with someone who didn't want to be with me. We do get wiser with age.
Comment from Stephanie Kastner
You've created a nice poem, using the jealousy prompt. I think learning to not be jealous only helps us to appreciate what we have instead of living with envy of what someone else has. There is someone for everyone. I truly believe that. And each of us has our strengths. When others notice us for our strengths, it attracts them to us. So don't ever be afraid to by you!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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You've created a nice poem, using the jealousy prompt. I think learning to not be jealous only helps us to appreciate what we have instead of living with envy of what someone else has. There is someone for everyone. I truly believe that. And each of us has our strengths. When others notice us for our strengths, it attracts them to us. So don't ever be afraid to by you!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I remember how this felt when I was young. Now, I would never want to be with someone who didn't want to be with me. We do get wiser with age.
Comment from justjo66
Easily a winner. Jealousy, such a mean and hurtful condition. You have
written a realistic piece for this pain.
Job well done. Deserving of six stars.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Easily a winner. Jealousy, such a mean and hurtful condition. You have
written a realistic piece for this pain.
Job well done. Deserving of six stars.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I remember how this felt when I was young. Now, I would never want to be with someone who didn't want to be with me. We do get wiser with age.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
You have voiced the inner feeling of a lot of us. Why cant I be happy like that and yet he/she is allowed?
Very nicely done and absolutely well said.
Flow and rhyme are spot on
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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You have voiced the inner feeling of a lot of us. Why cant I be happy like that and yet he/she is allowed?
Very nicely done and absolutely well said.
Flow and rhyme are spot on
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I remember feeling this way when I was young. Now, I would never want to be with someone who didn't want to be with me.
We do get wiser with age.
Comment from MissMerri
Excellent response to this prompt... I think you've described perfectly what it feels like to feel jealous, even though we try not to acknowledge or give in to those feelings. Rather than rhymes, you seem to have gone for slant rhymes or assonance, which makes this really very pleasant to read aloud. There are a few perfect rhymes, of course, but not too many. I did enjoy this poem very much. MM
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Excellent response to this prompt... I think you've described perfectly what it feels like to feel jealous, even though we try not to acknowledge or give in to those feelings. Rather than rhymes, you seem to have gone for slant rhymes or assonance, which makes this really very pleasant to read aloud. There are a few perfect rhymes, of course, but not too many. I did enjoy this poem very much. MM
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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When I was young, I remember feeling this way, Now, I would never want to be with some one who didn't
want to be with me. We do get older with age.
Comment from Leineco
Nice extrapolation on the word jealousy - and how we deny it.
Convincing ourselves we're over it, then crawling off into a
corner to express it.
I can see why this won :-)
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Nice extrapolation on the word jealousy - and how we deny it.
Convincing ourselves we're over it, then crawling off into a
corner to express it.
I can see why this won :-)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I remember feeling this way when I was young. Now, I would never want anyone who didn't want me. We do get wiser with age.
Comment from tfawcus
Yes - always easier said than done! No matter how we rationalise, that gut reaction is hard to quell! Your poem treads the dividing line beautifully. I'm not surprised that it was declared the contest winner... just jealous! LOL
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Yes - always easier said than done! No matter how we rationalise, that gut reaction is hard to quell! Your poem treads the dividing line beautifully. I'm not surprised that it was declared the contest winner... just jealous! LOL
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I remember feeling this way when I was young. Now, I would never want anyone who didn't want me. We do get wiser with age.
Comment from Oatmeal
jusylee72,
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you. The theme was good. The flow was very nice. Your feelings are expressed well.
The artwork complemented your poem.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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jusylee72,
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you. The theme was good. The flow was very nice. Your feelings are expressed well.
The artwork complemented your poem.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I remember feeling this way when I was young. Now, I would never want anyone who didn't want me. We do get wiser with age.
Comment from P1
a worthy winner of this contest and
congrats. we have all been there and
you said it very well. a pleasure to
read and review your words and thank
you for sharing
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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a worthy winner of this contest and
congrats. we have all been there and
you said it very well. a pleasure to
read and review your words and thank
you for sharing
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I remember how this felt when I was young. Now, I would never want to be with someone who didn't want to be with me. We do get wiser with age.
