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Comment from schatzling
A new story
illustrated in shades of life
What a powerful 8 words.
This poem stopped me in my tracks.
I sit here completely still going back in time that is so similar to yours.
Sometimes I wonder myself why DOES it take that long to actually get up and leave....Those that never experienced what we had, will never truly understand. They can merely say things like,"You could have left at any time; why didn't you? Instead you stayed and took more of it." But we both know it is NOT that simple; not that cut and dry. Don't we??? OH YES WE DO.
This poem says so much. It is so very deep. It is the story of your once lived life. You can be proud to have found the colors of your rainbow. So many live in an all black and white world.
If I may, I went through my box of "quotables" and found some more that I would like to share with you especially since you liked them so much last time I shared some with you.....
This first one....because you are a teacher (smile)....
DEAR TEACHER,
I TALK TO EVERYONE,
SO MOVING MY SEAT WON'T HELP.
MENstruation
MENopause
MENtal breakdowns
Notice how all
WOMEN'S PROBLEMS begin with MEN!!!!
CANCEL MY SUBSCRIPTION
BECAUSE I AM DONE WITH YOUR ISSUES!!!!
THE REASON MOST PEOPLE GIVE UP
IS BECAUSE THEY TEND TO LOOK AT
HOW FAR THEY STILL HAVE TO GO,
INSTEAD OF HOW FAR THEY HAVE COME.
GIVING UP ON YOUR GOAL
BECAUSE OF ONE SET BACK
IS LIKE SLASHING
YOUR OTHER THREE TIRES
BECAUSE YOU GOT ONE FLAT.
A RIVER CUTS THROUGH A ROCK
NOT BECAUSE OF ITS POWER
BUT ITS PERSISTENCE.
and this one is especially for you because you dance in the RAIN.....
LIFE IS NOT ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS,
IT IS ABOUT LEARNING TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
WORK FOR A CAUSE,
NOT FOR APPLAUSE.
LIVE LIFE TO EXPRESS,
NOT TO IMPRESS.
GO THE EXTRA MILE,
IT IS NEVER CROWDED.
INHALE
THE FUTURE
EXHALE
THE PAST
SOMETIMES THE SMALLEST STEP
IN THE RIGHT DIRECTION
ENDS UP BEING THE BIGGEST STEP
OF YOUR LIFE.
THE FIRST STEP TOWARDS GETTING SOMEWHERE
IS TO DECIDE THAT YOU ARE NOT GOING TO STAY WHERE YOU ARE.
GROWTH IS PAINFUL.
CHANGE IS PAINFUL.
BUT NOTHING IS AS PAINFUL
AS STAYING STUCK SOMEWHERE
YOU DO NOT BELONG.
and just one more, CAUSE I DO REALLY LIKE THIS ONE,
this go round before I close this Review....
THE THINGS YOU TAKE FOR GRANTED
SOMEONE ELSE IS PRAYING FOR.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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A new story
illustrated in shades of life
What a powerful 8 words.
This poem stopped me in my tracks.
I sit here completely still going back in time that is so similar to yours.
Sometimes I wonder myself why DOES it take that long to actually get up and leave....Those that never experienced what we had, will never truly understand. They can merely say things like,"You could have left at any time; why didn't you? Instead you stayed and took more of it." But we both know it is NOT that simple; not that cut and dry. Don't we??? OH YES WE DO.
This poem says so much. It is so very deep. It is the story of your once lived life. You can be proud to have found the colors of your rainbow. So many live in an all black and white world.
If I may, I went through my box of "quotables" and found some more that I would like to share with you especially since you liked them so much last time I shared some with you.....
This first one....because you are a teacher (smile)....
DEAR TEACHER,
I TALK TO EVERYONE,
SO MOVING MY SEAT WON'T HELP.
MENstruation
MENopause
MENtal breakdowns
Notice how all
WOMEN'S PROBLEMS begin with MEN!!!!
CANCEL MY SUBSCRIPTION
BECAUSE I AM DONE WITH YOUR ISSUES!!!!
THE REASON MOST PEOPLE GIVE UP
IS BECAUSE THEY TEND TO LOOK AT
HOW FAR THEY STILL HAVE TO GO,
INSTEAD OF HOW FAR THEY HAVE COME.
GIVING UP ON YOUR GOAL
BECAUSE OF ONE SET BACK
IS LIKE SLASHING
YOUR OTHER THREE TIRES
BECAUSE YOU GOT ONE FLAT.
A RIVER CUTS THROUGH A ROCK
NOT BECAUSE OF ITS POWER
BUT ITS PERSISTENCE.
and this one is especially for you because you dance in the RAIN.....
LIFE IS NOT ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS,
IT IS ABOUT LEARNING TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
WORK FOR A CAUSE,
NOT FOR APPLAUSE.
LIVE LIFE TO EXPRESS,
NOT TO IMPRESS.
GO THE EXTRA MILE,
IT IS NEVER CROWDED.
INHALE
THE FUTURE
EXHALE
THE PAST
SOMETIMES THE SMALLEST STEP
IN THE RIGHT DIRECTION
ENDS UP BEING THE BIGGEST STEP
OF YOUR LIFE.
THE FIRST STEP TOWARDS GETTING SOMEWHERE
IS TO DECIDE THAT YOU ARE NOT GOING TO STAY WHERE YOU ARE.
GROWTH IS PAINFUL.
CHANGE IS PAINFUL.
BUT NOTHING IS AS PAINFUL
AS STAYING STUCK SOMEWHERE
YOU DO NOT BELONG.
and just one more, CAUSE I DO REALLY LIKE THIS ONE,
this go round before I close this Review....
THE THINGS YOU TAKE FOR GRANTED
SOMEONE ELSE IS PRAYING FOR.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Love this so much Thank you . That is actually my favorite poem of everything that I have written. I also appreciate the quotes I use quotes often in my class. Now I have some new ones to choose from.
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it is definitely book publishing material.
Comment from winnona
Well written. Your words flow together and convey the story to the reader well. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. Good luck in the contest. Well written.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Well written. Your words flow together and convey the story to the reader well. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. Good luck in the contest. Well written.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. Life is wonderful now
Comment from MariMc
Such pain and redemption are best expressed through exactly this kind of poem. It's beautifully simple in the stark details of an earlier time when life was bleak and stormy, and then it changed--we're not told how or why other than 'we left,' and the reader doesn't need to know--and color appeared again. Listing the colors and what each represented paints a wonderful picture of the change, and ending with the real gold shows that it's really a beginning. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Such pain and redemption are best expressed through exactly this kind of poem. It's beautifully simple in the stark details of an earlier time when life was bleak and stormy, and then it changed--we're not told how or why other than 'we left,' and the reader doesn't need to know--and color appeared again. Listing the colors and what each represented paints a wonderful picture of the change, and ending with the real gold shows that it's really a beginning. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I needed to write it . It was healing. Life is wonderful now.
Comment from cupa tea
I am sorry for your loss. I understand how difficult it must be...the poem was well written and interesting to read. I wish you luck in the contest.....
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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I am sorry for your loss. I understand how difficult it must be...the poem was well written and interesting to read. I wish you luck in the contest.....
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. Life is wonderful now.
Comment from GeraldS
This is a different take on this prompt that I never expected. It shows your creativity and provides a pleasant, thought provoking read for your reviewers. The color imagery was a nice touch.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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This is a different take on this prompt that I never expected. It shows your creativity and provides a pleasant, thought provoking read for your reviewers. The color imagery was a nice touch.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you , life is wonderful now.
Comment from kiwisteveh
This is a very touching poem, obviously arising out of a time of great difficulty in your life, but then rescued, in a sense, by the letter and poem you received from your son.
I especially liked the end of the poem where you describe the colours of the rainbow and how you associated them with recovery from the dark times.
Probably six-worthy, but alas, I don't have one left this week.
Steve
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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This is a very touching poem, obviously arising out of a time of great difficulty in your life, but then rescued, in a sense, by the letter and poem you received from your son.
I especially liked the end of the poem where you describe the colours of the rainbow and how you associated them with recovery from the dark times.
Probably six-worthy, but alas, I don't have one left this week.
Steve
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I appreciate the heartfelt star no matter what. That means that you believe what I write. There can be no other brighter Star. Thank you.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a heartfelt poetic story of love conquering hardship and a stormy relationship. Forgiveness is the pearl that binds us together for a serene new life that promises so much.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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This is a heartfelt poetic story of love conquering hardship and a stormy relationship. Forgiveness is the pearl that binds us together for a serene new life that promises so much.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. It actually hurt to write it but life is wonderful now.
Comment from Sandisan
A heartfelt poem, I can feel the pain that was lived through. And also
the joy of breaking out of its chains. I can't see anything to change
it was written from the heart and is very good.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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A heartfelt poem, I can feel the pain that was lived through. And also
the joy of breaking out of its chains. I can't see anything to change
it was written from the heart and is very good.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I always treasure your thoughts.
Comment from CEO2020
I like the title...then the poem took over...a son witnessing domestic abuse, experiencing poverty, and then challenging a bully. This reflects the life many live every day that continues in silence.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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I like the title...then the poem took over...a son witnessing domestic abuse, experiencing poverty, and then challenging a bully. This reflects the life many live every day that continues in silence.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Yes, those were hard times. My son's letter was in the form of a poem I wish I could share, it is raw with emotion. They are his words those. I am trying to get him to join this site.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Although I think you could tighten up you poem in some places, just keep working with it, I know it is worth 6 stars. The concept is quite profound. The story you tell is universal, unfortunately. I envy you for receiving the understanding letter with a poem from your son. My daughter is still holding too, too much psychic pain. She blames her father, but nevertheless allows me to carry your problems. I find it hard to let her go. (Sorry, no more of my personal problem)
At least you understand why I give you 6 stars, and of course, they are GOLD.
Over the rainbows of our painful pasts, there is a golden light, a gold pathway of hope and peace.
You have found your and your son has as well.
Good work on the poem.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Although I think you could tighten up you poem in some places, just keep working with it, I know it is worth 6 stars. The concept is quite profound. The story you tell is universal, unfortunately. I envy you for receiving the understanding letter with a poem from your son. My daughter is still holding too, too much psychic pain. She blames her father, but nevertheless allows me to carry your problems. I find it hard to let her go. (Sorry, no more of my personal problem)
At least you understand why I give you 6 stars, and of course, they are GOLD.
Over the rainbows of our painful pasts, there is a golden light, a gold pathway of hope and peace.
You have found your and your son has as well.
Good work on the poem.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I hope she comes around. All three of my children have and it has truly changed my world. We are all successful now.
