Comment from schatzling

Excellent

You truly amaze me. Your writings.....all of them. One better than the next. You ARE a writer.
I admire you.
This is the most wonderful intoxicating, if you will, poem. Truly amazing how your mind works. I love it.

Thanks for sharing.

BRAVO....WOW

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016

thank you i haven't looked at that poem in a long time . Now I am going back to read it.

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

Simply awesome piece of poetry here. Loved it beginning to end. Nothing not to like about it. Great rhythm and rhyme throughout and didn't miss a beat in meter! Great job. I will be voting for this piece in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thank you so much. Unfortunately when I tried to edit I made a mistake and deleted it from the contest. But at least I have a heart vote. Wait, I went and look. IT is in the contest. I thought it wasn't lol

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

A very great entry and or stand alone poem you have here. I love the picture too. You did an excellent job and thanks so very much for entering my contest. It is you and one more in my book that tied so I will flip a coin.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016

Actually, I got confused in the picture and I think my poem was rejected.

Comment from VaV-VOOM

Excellent

Beautiful poem my friend... my favorite is the third and forth stanzas. Great read, thank you for sharing, and good luck! Write On! VaV-VOOM!

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016

thank you, with the help of people like you I am learning to write.

reply by VaV-VOOM on 21-Apr-2016

I have been working hard, at teaching myself as much as I can about, a simple words importance in writing, and in life. I loved it, Write On! VaV-VOOM!

Comment from bob cullen

Excellent

This is very good. Your poem evokes strong images and the rhyme is good. The meter is also nicely balanced.
This is the type of poetry I enjoy reading

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Thank you. I wanted more to the story but the prompt said 24 lines. I so appreciate your response.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

You're doing well if you can spot a lion, a bird and a frog in that artwork!

This is quite a clever and imaginative interpretation of the picture - both 'lake of silent tears' and 'the creature rocks' are evocative titles. The 8/6/8/6 rhythm works well. I wonder if 'their stories' might be better than 'the stories.'

A couple of small fixes with apostrophes. Remove the one from 'its' (not needed unless it means 'it is') and put it in 'lion's' in the previous line.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

I so need your type of review. I am learning daily that I need to study the rules of punctuation. I wanted to write a longer poem that would have explained these images but I was limited to 24. I especially like that you told me about the title.