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Comment from schatzling
So sad
So loving
So true
Even though I had no words with my mother since December 2001, I had hoped we would have some kind of a closure.....I wanted her to admit what she had done to me. I wanted her to apologize to me. On her birthdays I cried. On my birthdays I cried. On Mother's Day I cried. I used to wrap gifts in German wrapping paper and address them to my sons pretending they were from their grandmother. I did that for many years pretending we were an okay family....but we weren't. When they were old enough to really understand, I quit the gifting and told them the truth. Their grandparents on their father's side passed on quite some time ago. My mother was all they had as a grandmother. How could I take that away from them. I sit here now crying because my mother is dead....the woman I called mom...the only one I really knew....the only one that used me to get what she wanted and then gave me what she thought I deserved and then tossed me away as if I were nothing.
Even though it was some time ago, I am truly sorry for your loss.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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So sad
So loving
So true
Even though I had no words with my mother since December 2001, I had hoped we would have some kind of a closure.....I wanted her to admit what she had done to me. I wanted her to apologize to me. On her birthdays I cried. On my birthdays I cried. On Mother's Day I cried. I used to wrap gifts in German wrapping paper and address them to my sons pretending they were from their grandmother. I did that for many years pretending we were an okay family....but we weren't. When they were old enough to really understand, I quit the gifting and told them the truth. Their grandparents on their father's side passed on quite some time ago. My mother was all they had as a grandmother. How could I take that away from them. I sit here now crying because my mother is dead....the woman I called mom...the only one I really knew....the only one that used me to get what she wanted and then gave me what she thought I deserved and then tossed me away as if I were nothing.
Even though it was some time ago, I am truly sorry for your loss.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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I hope you are saving all of these responses to my writing. Each time you seem to open up more and more about your life. Print them before you send them. Put them in a folder and read them the next day. Then start putting them together. Your writing is amazing.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Judy,
I am not a fan of free verse, being an old dinosaur, but, now and again, a poem like yours pops up and intrigues and delights me with the eloquence of its writing and the emotional impact of its content. "Call your Mom today" indeed is a phrase that creates enormous and pleasurable nostalgia.
Reg
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Dear Judy,
I am not a fan of free verse, being an old dinosaur, but, now and again, a poem like yours pops up and intrigues and delights me with the eloquence of its writing and the emotional impact of its content. "Call your Mom today" indeed is a phrase that creates enormous and pleasurable nostalgia.
Reg
Comment Written 18-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. That phone message was both a blessing and a heartbreak.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Ah tears swell up in my eyes as this Poem is so heartfelt and sad. Writer has creative approach to handling her grief and talking to mother. liberty justice
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Ah tears swell up in my eyes as this Poem is so heartfelt and sad. Writer has creative approach to handling her grief and talking to mother. liberty justice
Comment Written 18-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. That phone message was both a blessing and a heartbreak.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the splendid family picture. It must have been eerie to hear your Mom on voicemail. I am glad you seized the opportunity to engage her in conversation. Thank you for the reminder--as her grandson said, in "a place we really don't understand". Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Thank you for sharing the splendid family picture. It must have been eerie to hear your Mom on voicemail. I am glad you seized the opportunity to engage her in conversation. Thank you for the reminder--as her grandson said, in "a place we really don't understand". Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much . That phone call was both a blessing and a heart break.
Comment from Ulla
Jusylee, that must have been very difficult when you came across that message realising that it would be forever late to phone back. I can feel how you must have felt. This really touched me. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Jusylee, that must have been very difficult when you came across that message realising that it would be forever late to phone back. I can feel how you must have felt. This really touched me. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you. That phone message was a blessing and a heartache.
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Oh, I can imagine! Ulla:)))
Comment from Dustybones
A good point. Can't call and talk to them later. You can't help them later either. A very warm and thoughtful little heartfelt post. I think i will call right now. TY
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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A good point. Can't call and talk to them later. You can't help them later either. A very warm and thoughtful little heartfelt post. I think i will call right now. TY
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. That message was both a blessing and a heartbreak.
Comment from Pantygynt
That must be heart rending coming on something like that. Death and disaster always seems somehow more poignant when it happens on a celebration day like Christmas or, as with you, Independence Day. Nice piece of poignant free verse expressing somuch in understatement.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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That must be heart rending coming on something like that. Death and disaster always seems somehow more poignant when it happens on a celebration day like Christmas or, as with you, Independence Day. Nice piece of poignant free verse expressing somuch in understatement.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. That phone message was both a blessing and a heartbreak.
Comment from C.J. 16
An excellent free verse poem. What a nice tribute to your mom. The poem is very well written, and the last line is very effective. Nicely done. All the best.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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An excellent free verse poem. What a nice tribute to your mom. The poem is very well written, and the last line is very effective. Nicely done. All the best.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
This one was simply, poignantly touching. I am so sorry you have lost your mom. This was a lovely tribute. No wonder you miss her; your mom's legacy will be shared in the small moments...mothers, daughters, grandkids... quick calls just to touch bases and to hear an essential voice, proud sharing of photos and in poetry and eulogies that speak of that lasting love. -CtVR
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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This one was simply, poignantly touching. I am so sorry you have lost your mom. This was a lovely tribute. No wonder you miss her; your mom's legacy will be shared in the small moments...mothers, daughters, grandkids... quick calls just to touch bases and to hear an essential voice, proud sharing of photos and in poetry and eulogies that speak of that lasting love. -CtVR
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you , That phone message was both a blessing and a heartbreak .
Comment from Rubylou
This is one that I can really relate to. Every Sunday evening at 6: 00, I would call my mom.
At the end of the call we never said good-bye instead we said, "talk to you later."
When she passed 10 years ago this May 11, that is what I said before they closed her casket.
This poem touched me deeply. Thank-you for sharing.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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This is one that I can really relate to. Every Sunday evening at 6: 00, I would call my mom.
At the end of the call we never said good-bye instead we said, "talk to you later."
When she passed 10 years ago this May 11, that is what I said before they closed her casket.
This poem touched me deeply. Thank-you for sharing.
Rubylou
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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I love you sweet and touching story. That must have been both comforting and painful . You touched me too.
