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Comment from I am Cat
Hello Tom,
This is an interesting form. I'm not sure about the rhyme thing, but that could be my dizziness. lol
Also, that skyway makes me dizzy... yeah, it might be time to take another break. :(
At any rate, you always do a great job, and so... I"m thinking this is another one. It's cool that they've created places for people to walk above the city. I like that idea. You must not get many earthquakes? ;)
Hugs
Cat
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hello Tom,
This is an interesting form. I'm not sure about the rhyme thing, but that could be my dizziness. lol
Also, that skyway makes me dizzy... yeah, it might be time to take another break. :(
At any rate, you always do a great job, and so... I"m thinking this is another one. It's cool that they've created places for people to walk above the city. I like that idea. You must not get many earthquakes? ;)
Hugs
Cat
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Thank you Cat. No earthquakes here, that I know of.
Comment from way2gokevs
Very well done Mate, wish we had skyways here in Tasmania when the bitterly cold winter westerly winds are blowing, no protection from these buggers they just go straight through you. Cheers Kev
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Very well done Mate, wish we had skyways here in Tasmania when the bitterly cold winter westerly winds are blowing, no protection from these buggers they just go straight through you. Cheers Kev
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Thank you Kev.
Comment from Joan E.
I'm not surprised that the skyways were developed in Minnesota and appreciated your sharing a modern one in your photograph. I enjoyed another new form and your addition of rhymes, as well as the rhythmic repeats. Cheers and stay warm- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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I'm not surprised that the skyways were developed in Minnesota and appreciated your sharing a modern one in your photograph. I enjoyed another new form and your addition of rhymes, as well as the rhythmic repeats. Cheers and stay warm- Joan
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
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Thank you Joan. It's in the 70s here today. Shorts and top down!
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Yeah--almost bathing suit weather! Enjoy springtime- Joan
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Terschel,
":Skyway" is a well crafted poem with good rhyme and rhythm. It follows the form of the tritina well with creative deviations that work. The message that environmental incentives can make exercise less work and more play is good.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Hi, Terschel,
":Skyway" is a well crafted poem with good rhyme and rhythm. It follows the form of the tritina well with creative deviations that work. The message that environmental incentives can make exercise less work and more play is good.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Goodness me, Tom, that sounds complicated, yet you have written a poem that is exactly how you tell is the Tritina is written. I haven't even heard of this style before, how do you find them all? You certainly did a good job with this one, and you had no excuse for going out, lol! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Goodness me, Tom, that sounds complicated, yet you have written a poem that is exactly how you tell is the Tritina is written. I haven't even heard of this style before, how do you find them all? You certainly did a good job with this one, and you had no excuse for going out, lol! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you Sandra. I just keep searching the internet sites for new forms. This one is actually a footnote in Wikipedia under Sestinas,
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How many different styles have you written now? It must be quite a few. x
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About 150 so far.
Comment from Just2Write
It's been awhile since I've seen a Tritina. I first came across it in 2013. Like it's older cousin, the Sestina - it can be a lot of fun, and your poem seems to be just that. It is a good way to get some exercise and see some sights without getting all bundled up. Just a quick dash from the car in the parking lot, and into the skyway that leads to all kinds of interesting things. I know many folks who tell me that their walking forays are through the malls where it's warm - and far less chance of a slip and fall that one would encounter in the bitter winter weather.
Rose.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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It's been awhile since I've seen a Tritina. I first came across it in 2013. Like it's older cousin, the Sestina - it can be a lot of fun, and your poem seems to be just that. It is a good way to get some exercise and see some sights without getting all bundled up. Just a quick dash from the car in the parking lot, and into the skyway that leads to all kinds of interesting things. I know many folks who tell me that their walking forays are through the malls where it's warm - and far less chance of a slip and fall that one would encounter in the bitter winter weather.
Rose.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you Rose. Yes, we do the halls too. But I like the outdoors the best.
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I get bored in the malls. I like the outdoors too, where the air is crisp and the communion with nature is rapturous.
Unfortunately, some folk just can do that anymore, so the mall is a safe warm place to stimulate one's heart. Mine needs a kick start every now and then.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is only the second of these tritinas that I have seen. They are fascinating things and I guess that like the sestina they depend on choosing the right words that work well together. These skyway things are something else we just don't have. We just get wet while "you can walk the pretties in the rain and never wet your feet" and you don't even have to travel to Kansas City to do it. Which musical was that from? I've got a feeling it was an extra for the film version of Oklahoma. I know it wasn't in the stage version, because my parents had the set of 78s from that show, which they saw just after the war ended in London.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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This is only the second of these tritinas that I have seen. They are fascinating things and I guess that like the sestina they depend on choosing the right words that work well together. These skyway things are something else we just don't have. We just get wet while "you can walk the pretties in the rain and never wet your feet" and you don't even have to travel to Kansas City to do it. Which musical was that from? I've got a feeling it was an extra for the film version of Oklahoma. I know it wasn't in the stage version, because my parents had the set of 78s from that show, which they saw just after the war ended in London.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt, it was definitely a western. Most likely Oaklahoma, but could have been from Paint Your Wagons, or Blazing Saddles.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Tom,
Each poem, each delightfully descriptive verse, opens another view into your enjoyment of your surroundings.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Dear Tom,
Each poem, each delightfully descriptive verse, opens another view into your enjoyment of your surroundings.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you Reg, that's my goal. I'm glad you enjoyed it,
Comment from lightink
Wow! You can actually go for longer walks in those? That's fascinating!
This poem makes me want to go and seek out some skyways! You made it sound so much fun! I've never lived in a town with a lot of skyways...
Tom, you can convey so much zest for life by showing the enjoyment of simple things! I like that about you a lot!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Wow! You can actually go for longer walks in those? That's fascinating!
This poem makes me want to go and seek out some skyways! You made it sound so much fun! I've never lived in a town with a lot of skyways...
Tom, you can convey so much zest for life by showing the enjoyment of simple things! I like that about you a lot!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you Jyoti. Many large cities have them now with shops and eating spots along the way.
Comment from ciliverde
How fun! The poem, and the skyway walk - what a neat idea. Nice place to stroll when the cold is overwhelming. Interesting form as well.
Carol
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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How fun! The poem, and the skyway walk - what a neat idea. Nice place to stroll when the cold is overwhelming. Interesting form as well.
Carol
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you Carol. They aren't the forest, but have their own appeal.
