Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Because"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and imagery to draw in a reader. Many will relate.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and imagery to draw in a reader. Many will relate.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I wish a small portion of your statements, be true, pleasing to ear, hearing how it touched you. Wow! Thanking you for these uplifting words: plus very generous rate.
Comment from Eleri
This poem portrays some obviously deeply held feelings, which are well expressed. However, you do seem to have the habit of leaving out words that would aid the flow such as definite and indefinite articles. For example, in line two at the end surely it should be 'by a king' or 'by the king'. Line five should also start with 'you are...' not 'you be..' and in line six what does 'touch ins feelings...' mean exactly. There are other instances in the poem but I think that you should really read your poems out loud to see how they flow as this may help you pick out where you are mis-phrased or missed a word out.
Eleri
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This poem portrays some obviously deeply held feelings, which are well expressed. However, you do seem to have the habit of leaving out words that would aid the flow such as definite and indefinite articles. For example, in line two at the end surely it should be 'by a king' or 'by the king'. Line five should also start with 'you are...' not 'you be..' and in line six what does 'touch ins feelings...' mean exactly. There are other instances in the poem but I think that you should really read your poems out loud to see how they flow as this may help you pick out where you are mis-phrased or missed a word out.
Eleri
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I do suffer from grammar, thank you for the shout, appreciating those sincere thoughts, definitely will consider actions. Plus your generous rate despite faults.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a touching and moving poem. Your verse flows along nicely and your descriptive words are perfect for your theme. It's very profound and thought provoking. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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This is a touching and moving poem. Your verse flows along nicely and your descriptive words are perfect for your theme. It's very profound and thought provoking. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Glad features in this write was found appealing. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting comments.
Comment from Artasylum
Hello TPAC: The image alone is a supernatural view. Very Stong. Your words are pitch perfect as are your fonts, just right... Well done and looking forward. yours, diana
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hello TPAC: The image alone is a supernatural view. Very Stong. Your words are pitch perfect as are your fonts, just right... Well done and looking forward. yours, diana
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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I'm tossed between perception about my writes. I think feeling my needs come first which is conveyance of views. Glad aspects of this write was found pleasing.Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought
Comment from meeshu
excellent poetry, TPAC. this offering reads like one long sentence.
that's a good thing it flows from line to line without pause'
well written......meeshu
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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excellent poetry, TPAC. this offering reads like one long sentence.
that's a good thing it flows from line to line without pause'
well written......meeshu
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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I'm struggling with my writes, mostly proper assessments of grammar in their definition. Glad aspects of this write was found appealing. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting views.
Comment from Rookette
Wow! Such a beautiful, heartfelt testament. It follows no rules and still flows beautifully. I envy anyone who can write like that. Absolutely beautiful! I look forward to reading more! xoLeslie
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Wow! Such a beautiful, heartfelt testament. It follows no rules and still flows beautifully. I envy anyone who can write like that. Absolutely beautiful! I look forward to reading more! xoLeslie
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Enjoy yourself, hope the others you find hold the same gleam stated by your interests. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from Beverly Botelho
You've managed to express what, I believe, many people believe but can't articulate. Congratulations on a well-done piece! Only one question - I'm not sure what the word 'because' in the last line means.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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You've managed to express what, I believe, many people believe but can't articulate. Congratulations on a well-done piece! Only one question - I'm not sure what the word 'because' in the last line means.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Anything but pure is the meaning behind because. Glad you enjoyed this write. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
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Thanks for clarification: now I understand.
Comment from thonnigford09
I really liked this poem. I believe it's a free form. Spiritually guiding. heart felt. Nicely done and I would recommend it.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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I really liked this poem. I believe it's a free form. Spiritually guiding. heart felt. Nicely done and I would recommend it.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Glad this work found interests. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
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Thanks!!!!!!!!
Comment from tfawcus
A poem full of thanks to the Lord for all of his help and guidance, culminating in the one enigmatic word, "Because" on the gravestone. I think, by the way, that this would be clearer if you put that word in inverted commas in your final line.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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A poem full of thanks to the Lord for all of his help and guidance, culminating in the one enigmatic word, "Because" on the gravestone. I think, by the way, that this would be clearer if you put that word in inverted commas in your final line.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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I will take into consideration your suggestion, glad work was easy in its appeal to you. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
