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Comment from schatzling
Who are you? That my friend I do not know if I will ever know. Once I was listening to a conversation not meant for me to hear. Someone making a comment something like "I doubt it if we will ever know the real Katharina" I always had to hide my feelings. I always had to be what someone made me be. Over forty years of being all the Katharina's everyone expected or demanded me to be, how can I ever be sure what or who I really am. I just found out within the last 8 to 10 years that my favorite color is BURNT ORANGE and the metal coppers. For some reason it was in bedded in me that my favorite color was blue. I had blue dishes, blue curtains grayish furniture blending with the blues surrounding it. Then slowly I started drifting away from the blues. I still have the dishes....they were expensive...but no more gray and blues. I have painted a burnt orange wall in my living room. My furniture became earth tones filled with coppers and greens. My kitchen is brighter and more cheerful filled with burnt orange greens and yellows. Curtains are burnt orange....lots of things have been transitioning from the blues in my world to my new outlook on life of burnt orange and the greens and yellows.....and the coppers
Interesting, don;t you agree? I still cannot get to the beginning of MY FAVORITE COLOR IS BLUE. When, Why How may remain unanswered. Funny how it took me over forty years to find out without really realizing what I was finding out....that my favorite color is burnt orange. In stores I was always drawn to those colors. Fall....the leaves, the decor....it excited me. Things I bought even clothes became burnt orange instead of the blues. Soon I found myself converting....selling, giving away things that were blue and filling those empty spots with burnt orange; copper. Things that make you go HMMMM
By the way....from other reviews and comments between us....YOU ARE 62? Wow. I thought perhaps you were 42. May I ask why JUSILEE72? The JU is for Judy. What does the rest stand for? I always thought 72 is when you were born? Or is it the year you left him? Just curious. If you don't want to share, that is okay. But I really would like to know. Thanks.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Who are you? That my friend I do not know if I will ever know. Once I was listening to a conversation not meant for me to hear. Someone making a comment something like "I doubt it if we will ever know the real Katharina" I always had to hide my feelings. I always had to be what someone made me be. Over forty years of being all the Katharina's everyone expected or demanded me to be, how can I ever be sure what or who I really am. I just found out within the last 8 to 10 years that my favorite color is BURNT ORANGE and the metal coppers. For some reason it was in bedded in me that my favorite color was blue. I had blue dishes, blue curtains grayish furniture blending with the blues surrounding it. Then slowly I started drifting away from the blues. I still have the dishes....they were expensive...but no more gray and blues. I have painted a burnt orange wall in my living room. My furniture became earth tones filled with coppers and greens. My kitchen is brighter and more cheerful filled with burnt orange greens and yellows. Curtains are burnt orange....lots of things have been transitioning from the blues in my world to my new outlook on life of burnt orange and the greens and yellows.....and the coppers
Interesting, don;t you agree? I still cannot get to the beginning of MY FAVORITE COLOR IS BLUE. When, Why How may remain unanswered. Funny how it took me over forty years to find out without really realizing what I was finding out....that my favorite color is burnt orange. In stores I was always drawn to those colors. Fall....the leaves, the decor....it excited me. Things I bought even clothes became burnt orange instead of the blues. Soon I found myself converting....selling, giving away things that were blue and filling those empty spots with burnt orange; copper. Things that make you go HMMMM
By the way....from other reviews and comments between us....YOU ARE 62? Wow. I thought perhaps you were 42. May I ask why JUSILEE72? The JU is for Judy. What does the rest stand for? I always thought 72 is when you were born? Or is it the year you left him? Just curious. If you don't want to share, that is okay. But I really would like to know. Thanks.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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I just accidentally typed an s instead of a d one day when I was a little girl. the seventy two is the year I graduated from high school. My name is Judy lee I have been meaning to change this signature because just like your blue it is not my favorite. Once again I am memorized by your writing. I picture a woman who thought it was safe to love blue. When the truth is burnt orange is so much more alive and vivid. I love this. Here again . You should put this writing in to your portfolio. I think many others would also like this an identify with it. I know I do.
Comment from foxangie123
This us beautiful and one I read before that I so very much loved. You have amazing ink and are a pleasure to read and be friends with. Thank you for the great writing and testament you provide to all who read. Sending you hugs dear.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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This us beautiful and one I read before that I so very much loved. You have amazing ink and are a pleasure to read and be friends with. Thank you for the great writing and testament you provide to all who read. Sending you hugs dear.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Ok, we are going to have to be penpals some day.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Serene peaceful lovely photo. I can just stare abd reflect on it for hours. Something r
therapeutic about it. Where did you find it moving like that? Writer was bien with a purpose to
write and change the world for better. Visit my portfolio also. thanks liberty justice
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Serene peaceful lovely photo. I can just stare abd reflect on it for hours. Something r
therapeutic about it. Where did you find it moving like that? Writer was bien with a purpose to
write and change the world for better. Visit my portfolio also. thanks liberty justice
Comment Written 18-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Thank you, I aprreciate it.
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How did you make photo
move?
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It was like that on the Fan Art site. I just clicked on it.
Comment from Chris Walker
Wonderful outlook for life and a terrific message to all. Well written free verse that flows with great pauses and imagery throughout. Well done. Thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest. Chris
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Wonderful outlook for life and a terrific message to all. Well written free verse that flows with great pauses and imagery throughout. Well done. Thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest. Chris
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I truly think life is wonderful and I have been on both sides of it.
Comment from AnnaLinda
jusylee72,
This is a fantastic free verse poem and entry.
Your important point is creatively and poetically conveyed.
Your question in the end is very effective in instilling
your message.
Your other questions are also thought provoking
and I especially like this one:
"Which day were you actually you
not hidden
not edited
but
You"
Best wishes in the contest,
Linda
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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jusylee72,
This is a fantastic free verse poem and entry.
Your important point is creatively and poetically conveyed.
Your question in the end is very effective in instilling
your message.
Your other questions are also thought provoking
and I especially like this one:
"Which day were you actually you
not hidden
not edited
but
You"
Best wishes in the contest,
Linda
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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than you so much. Sweetlinda, so you are a poet and an artist? Wow, Renaissance woman. I am amazed.
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Welcome and thank you!
Comment from NJK62
This is a fine poem with a strong message. I thought its force came from the intelligent use of line division. I thought it particularly worked in the following lines:
You are wonderful
different
exceptional
certainly not the norm
something unique
The double spacing before 'something unique' helps emphasise that most important quality. Furthermore, the language is direct and straightforward and this adds to the power of the poem. It also gives it an intimacy: it is as if the speaker in the poem is speaking directly to the reader. Having said that when you do use language figuratively, it works. I thought the image of being 'edited' was resonant: it suggests both the effect that others have upon us and the pressure to conform.
Well done. I wish you well in the competition. Nigel.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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This is a fine poem with a strong message. I thought its force came from the intelligent use of line division. I thought it particularly worked in the following lines:
You are wonderful
different
exceptional
certainly not the norm
something unique
The double spacing before 'something unique' helps emphasise that most important quality. Furthermore, the language is direct and straightforward and this adds to the power of the poem. It also gives it an intimacy: it is as if the speaker in the poem is speaking directly to the reader. Having said that when you do use language figuratively, it works. I thought the image of being 'edited' was resonant: it suggests both the effect that others have upon us and the pressure to conform.
Well done. I wish you well in the competition. Nigel.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I have grown so much since being on Fanstory. It is because people like you are telling me the things I need to know.
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Pleasure. N.
Comment from dennis0530
A good post for all soul-searching individuals. Although it is said that all humans are born equal and unique, many people try to ape others in the hope of looking good and gaining some popularity. It is no longer "Mirror, mirror on the wall..."
Rather, "my mirror, do I look as good as him? Many people desire acceptance and will do almost anything to achieve this. No value to "you are" or "I am." It is just "Do I look good?"
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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A good post for all soul-searching individuals. Although it is said that all humans are born equal and unique, many people try to ape others in the hope of looking good and gaining some popularity. It is no longer "Mirror, mirror on the wall..."
Rather, "my mirror, do I look as good as him? Many people desire acceptance and will do almost anything to achieve this. No value to "you are" or "I am." It is just "Do I look good?"
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Mirrors can be deceiving. Cameras are mirrors. I am not photogenic. I never have been but people tell me I'm pretty in real life.
So that's what i say to myself when I hate a picture.
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Mirrors never make you look any better. Distortions in the glass can make one look worse. A pool of calm water would give a truer reflection of you. Even being photogenic can be a liability. Gorgeous in photos but not deserving a second look in reality.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A very good piece of soul searching poetry you have crafted here for the free verse competition. I wonder how many people truly look at themselves devoid of the masks we seem to be required to wear.
GMG
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi there,
A very good piece of soul searching poetry you have crafted here for the free verse competition. I wonder how many people truly look at themselves devoid of the masks we seem to be required to wear.
GMG
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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I so agree. Cameras are mirrors. I am not photogenic. I never have been but people tell me I'm pretty in real life.
So that's what i say to myself when I hate a picture.
Comment from William Ross
A good free verse write on you are, we are all just as beautiful and wondrous as the day we were born. good write and good luck on this
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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A good free verse write on you are, we are all just as beautiful and wondrous as the day we were born. good write and good luck on this
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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thank you, we need to realize we are wonderful. My students tell me I am, but I have the stupid body image problem
Comment from ddmaewriting
I love this! We have to accept and love ourselves first before we can accept and love others. It entails humility to truly look at ourselves and accept everything about us including our imperfections. Remembering that we were born for a reason and special children of God. Isn't this wonderful? Should we not find contentment and happiness knowing that we are very special? This is what I feel after I read your poem. Thanks!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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I love this! We have to accept and love ourselves first before we can accept and love others. It entails humility to truly look at ourselves and accept everything about us including our imperfections. Remembering that we were born for a reason and special children of God. Isn't this wonderful? Should we not find contentment and happiness knowing that we are very special? This is what I feel after I read your poem. Thanks!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for the six star surprise. I so appreciate it. Yes, we must see ourselves better in life to grow in life. You are wonderful Thank you
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You are wonderful, too.
Take care.
