And We All Fall Down
Freestyle72 total reviews
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Bev,
I enjoyed your free-verse musings this morning as I've enjoyed hot coffee on this 27 degree morning.
I admire the juxtaposition of things the narrator an do, "I can move your memory..." to the feelings that she cannot control, "...yet feelings spin me away...".
Ah yes, the feelings. They'll get to us every time, won't they?
An excellent poem, Bev. I enjoyed reading you again.
Ray
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
Good Morning, Bev,
I enjoyed your free-verse musings this morning as I've enjoyed hot coffee on this 27 degree morning.
I admire the juxtaposition of things the narrator an do, "I can move your memory..." to the feelings that she cannot control, "...yet feelings spin me away...".
Ah yes, the feelings. They'll get to us every time, won't they?
An excellent poem, Bev. I enjoyed reading you again.
Ray
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Hi, Ray
Gosh, you've got about the same temperature we have up north here in Michigan! Will Spring ever really get here?
Thanks so much for taking time to read my poem and offer your insights. I appreciate both very much.
Good to hear from you! Hope all is well...
:) Bev
Comment from write hand blue
An interesting and well written poem. Your picture gives me the impression of violence and when matched with a poem that seems unhappy. I sense a nightmare or bad dream of perhaps a lost lover and a sense of passing time.
Just my interpretation, could be wrong... ~Mel~
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
An interesting and well written poem. Your picture gives me the impression of violence and when matched with a poem that seems unhappy. I sense a nightmare or bad dream of perhaps a lost lover and a sense of passing time.
Just my interpretation, could be wrong... ~Mel~
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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Thanks for your review, Mel. I appreciate you taking time to read my post!
:) Bev
Comment from Helen Bach
I stayed with your poet a while, reading it over a few times wondering what it could mean and I got a sense it was about a person that you were once very attracted to that didn't treat you well. There is a sad acceptance that it time to move on and not wear rose coloured glasses when remembering this person. There is something about your poem that installs a feeling in the reader. I recognise a talent tat lies behind the pen x
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
I stayed with your poet a while, reading it over a few times wondering what it could mean and I got a sense it was about a person that you were once very attracted to that didn't treat you well. There is a sad acceptance that it time to move on and not wear rose coloured glasses when remembering this person. There is something about your poem that installs a feeling in the reader. I recognise a talent tat lies behind the pen x
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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Hi, Helen
Thank you for your very gracious review! Your insights are right on point. I reached the conclusion, after much soul-searching, that it was not meant to be. Yet, the situation still haunts, though my life is good now.
I appreciate your kind words and the time you took to read and review my post.
:) Bev
Comment from VaV-VOOM
Great poem, and very interesting too. Makes a person think; my Favorite is the ending stanza, thank you so much for sharing. VaV-VOOM!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
Great poem, and very interesting too. Makes a person think; my Favorite is the ending stanza, thank you so much for sharing. VaV-VOOM!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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Thanks for the grand review, V. I appreciate the encouragement.
:) Bev
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Your welcome, great poem. VaV-VOOM!
Comment from William Ross
yes, this is good and great free verse on what's seems like and over whelming of sorts until it feels as though you are losing your mind. my take, Nice write.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
yes, this is good and great free verse on what's seems like and over whelming of sorts until it feels as though you are losing your mind. my take, Nice write.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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You're on target, William. Thank you very much for your most gracious review.
:) Bev
Comment from Just2Write
The poet in you touches that part of us that is vulnerable to the words and deeds of bullies and fate - with fate, perhaps being the biggest bully of all. I 'felt' your poem. It seemed to hold a great deal of sorrow.
I can let our promise
Haunt my demented dreams --
As if the contract was fulfilled
And we each moved on
Very powerful, emotive lines in this Free Verse. Did you really mean 'demented' dreams vs. 'tormented' dreams?
Rose
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
The poet in you touches that part of us that is vulnerable to the words and deeds of bullies and fate - with fate, perhaps being the biggest bully of all. I 'felt' your poem. It seemed to hold a great deal of sorrow.
I can let our promise
Haunt my demented dreams --
As if the contract was fulfilled
And we each moved on
Very powerful, emotive lines in this Free Verse. Did you really mean 'demented' dreams vs. 'tormented' dreams?
Rose
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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Hi, Rose
Thank you for this most encouraging and perceptive review. You know, I like tormented better, but since this is going off the listing today, I'll leave demented for now.
Much appreciated!
:) Bev
Comment from P1
i really liked this piece
i know only the poet is
privileged to know what the
actually meaning of the words
are but i took a broken heart from
them and found them very sad.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
i really liked this piece
i know only the poet is
privileged to know what the
actually meaning of the words
are but i took a broken heart from
them and found them very sad.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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Thanks for your very gracious review, pw. It was, indeed, a very dark time in my life.
:) Bev
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A well-written emotional poem. Bullies are everywhere in society and they will do anything to make other people's lives as miserable as possible.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
A well-written emotional poem. Bullies are everywhere in society and they will do anything to make other people's lives as miserable as possible.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much, Sandra. I appreciate your gracious insights.
:) Bev
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Writingfundimension, Thought-provoking feestyle. I think everyone struggles to "keep it together" from time to time. The world is currently an ugly place and is pulling man apart ~ making man doubt himself and everything that he once believed to be wholesome and true ~ sacred and holy.
Of special note:
Yet, feelings spin me away
And I want to lose my mind
Just now
Just you
(W, a pondering ending ... just now ... for me and you. Very good.)
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
Hello Writingfundimension, Thought-provoking feestyle. I think everyone struggles to "keep it together" from time to time. The world is currently an ugly place and is pulling man apart ~ making man doubt himself and everything that he once believed to be wholesome and true ~ sacred and holy.
Of special note:
Yet, feelings spin me away
And I want to lose my mind
Just now
Just you
(W, a pondering ending ... just now ... for me and you. Very good.)
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much for your very kind and encouraging review. I appreciate the time you took to delve into this post.
Warm regards,
Bev
Comment from Bill O'Bier
The arrangement of your poem is creative and the words are expressive. I so enjoyed this poem a lot. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. The art image perfectly compliments the poetic messages.
Wishing you well-
Bill
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
The arrangement of your poem is creative and the words are expressive. I so enjoyed this poem a lot. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. The art image perfectly compliments the poetic messages.
Wishing you well-
Bill
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016
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Hi, Bill
Thank you so much for your support and encouragement. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and appreciate your generous review.
:) Bev