Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Morning, Bev,

I enjoyed your free-verse musings this morning as I've enjoyed hot coffee on this 27 degree morning.

I admire the juxtaposition of things the narrator an do, "I can move your memory..." to the feelings that she cannot control, "...yet feelings spin me away...".

Ah yes, the feelings. They'll get to us every time, won't they?

An excellent poem, Bev. I enjoyed reading you again.

Ray

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016

Hi, Ray

Gosh, you've got about the same temperature we have up north here in Michigan! Will Spring ever really get here?

Thanks so much for taking time to read my poem and offer your insights. I appreciate both very much.

Good to hear from you! Hope all is well...

:) Bev

Comment from write hand blue

Excellent

An interesting and well written poem. Your picture gives me the impression of violence and when matched with a poem that seems unhappy. I sense a nightmare or bad dream of perhaps a lost lover and a sense of passing time.

Just my interpretation, could be wrong... ~Mel~

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

Thanks for your review, Mel. I appreciate you taking time to read my post!

:) Bev

Comment from Helen Bach

Excellent

I stayed with your poet a while, reading it over a few times wondering what it could mean and I got a sense it was about a person that you were once very attracted to that didn't treat you well. There is a sad acceptance that it time to move on and not wear rose coloured glasses when remembering this person. There is something about your poem that installs a feeling in the reader. I recognise a talent tat lies behind the pen x

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

Hi, Helen

Thank you for your very gracious review! Your insights are right on point. I reached the conclusion, after much soul-searching, that it was not meant to be. Yet, the situation still haunts, though my life is good now.

I appreciate your kind words and the time you took to read and review my post.

:) Bev

Comment from VaV-VOOM

Excellent

Great poem, and very interesting too. Makes a person think; my Favorite is the ending stanza, thank you so much for sharing. VaV-VOOM!

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

Thanks for the grand review, V. I appreciate the encouragement.

:) Bev

reply by VaV-VOOM on 05-Apr-2016

Your welcome, great poem. VaV-VOOM!

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

yes, this is good and great free verse on what's seems like and over whelming of sorts until it feels as though you are losing your mind. my take, Nice write.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

You're on target, William. Thank you very much for your most gracious review.

:) Bev

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

The poet in you touches that part of us that is vulnerable to the words and deeds of bullies and fate - with fate, perhaps being the biggest bully of all. I 'felt' your poem. It seemed to hold a great deal of sorrow.

I can let our promise
Haunt my demented dreams --
As if the contract was fulfilled
And we each moved on

Very powerful, emotive lines in this Free Verse. Did you really mean 'demented' dreams vs. 'tormented' dreams?

Rose

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

Hi, Rose

Thank you for this most encouraging and perceptive review. You know, I like tormented better, but since this is going off the listing today, I'll leave demented for now.

Much appreciated!

:) Bev

Comment from P1

Excellent

i really liked this piece
i know only the poet is
privileged to know what the
actually meaning of the words
are but i took a broken heart from
them and found them very sad.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

Thanks for your very gracious review, pw. It was, indeed, a very dark time in my life.

:) Bev

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A well-written emotional poem. Bullies are everywhere in society and they will do anything to make other people's lives as miserable as possible.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

Thank you very much, Sandra. I appreciate your gracious insights.

:) Bev

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello Writingfundimension, Thought-provoking feestyle. I think everyone struggles to "keep it together" from time to time. The world is currently an ugly place and is pulling man apart ~ making man doubt himself and everything that he once believed to be wholesome and true ~ sacred and holy.

Of special note:

Yet, feelings spin me away
And I want to lose my mind
Just now
Just you

(W, a pondering ending ... just now ... for me and you. Very good.)

Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

Thanks so much for your very kind and encouraging review. I appreciate the time you took to delve into this post.

Warm regards,

Bev

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

The arrangement of your poem is creative and the words are expressive. I so enjoyed this poem a lot. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. The art image perfectly compliments the poetic messages.

Wishing you well-
Bill

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2016

Hi, Bill

Thank you so much for your support and encouragement. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and appreciate your generous review.

:) Bev