Comment from schatzling

Excellent

This is cute and oh so real for all of us at one point or another. I really like it. I have many such cutsie poems I wrote when I was much younger.
I like how it flows and you can just continue reading along without any hiccups EXCEPT for one spot....

Then you must listen to me know
as I say

I do not understand what you say. Is it perhaps that the word "know" really should be "now" or am I just reading wrong somehow?

THANKS for sharing and letting me drift back in time 40 years give or take (heehee)

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016

this is a song also. I think it says that because the music changes there. If I could figure out a way to record on here I would let you listen. My freshmen girls love this one too.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Well done. You depict puppy love very well here. It is nicely presented and the rhyme and rhythm are good. You describe ME in high school... I had a crush on my handsome young English teacher,

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016

This poem probably doesn't fit in the Laughter contest, because it is a quiet laugh that women understand more than men. We have all been there.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

How interesting that you have this entered in a Laughter prompt poem. It seems very serious and heartfelt, albeit a song written by a young person, just testing his or her wings.

When I finished reading the song I wanted to check out the profile of the poet to see if the age was given. But of course this is anonymous.

I really can't comment on this as Laughter poetry. I think you erred in posting it as such.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016

I totally agree. Thank you.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

this is a laughter writing prompt and it was very wonderfully written even though I couldn't see anything really good laugh about it seems like a serious vacation between two young people trying to find love and then finally finding it it in the end I don't know whether it was based on together so nah cuz it seems like she was seen with somebody else I don't know but anyhow I was a little bit confusing but wonderfully written Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016

Thank you and you are right, it is not an all out funny laugh, for women it is that inside laugh of knowing that we did change the way we walked to Math to be seen by our crush. Thank you so much .