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Comment from schatzling
You say when.
I say if.
(HEY THAT COULD BE A GOOD TITLE FOR ANOTHER POEM, huh???)
That is the only difference between you and me.
You are one step ahead of me but much younger than I, I believe.....I could be wrong. What year were you born? While you are at it, just share with me your birthday, if you please. Thanks.
You Say When and I Say If
From you to me: When you start writing, you will have so many stories to tell.
From me to you: If I start writing, I will have so many stories to tell.
From you to me: When you start selling your Art you will have entire new stories to tell and venture into. The paths are open and you get to choose which one.
From me to you: If I ever start selling my Art, I wonder if I will have any stories to share or will it all end there? Will it be a dead end for me and silence...no more stories?
This antonym you have written is earth shattering, if you will... Since English is my second language, I still find myself looking up new words I come across. In these few lines I had to look up both epitome and apex. And then when I looked them up I had to look up the word antithesis on top of that. Overall, in your 19 words I learned 3 new ones. I think that is a first for me (smile)
very powerful and pungent what you have written....it beats my first and only antonym I have ever written,,,I like yours a lot, Excellent job. I commend you
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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You say when.
I say if.
(HEY THAT COULD BE A GOOD TITLE FOR ANOTHER POEM, huh???)
That is the only difference between you and me.
You are one step ahead of me but much younger than I, I believe.....I could be wrong. What year were you born? While you are at it, just share with me your birthday, if you please. Thanks.
You Say When and I Say If
From you to me: When you start writing, you will have so many stories to tell.
From me to you: If I start writing, I will have so many stories to tell.
From you to me: When you start selling your Art you will have entire new stories to tell and venture into. The paths are open and you get to choose which one.
From me to you: If I ever start selling my Art, I wonder if I will have any stories to share or will it all end there? Will it be a dead end for me and silence...no more stories?
This antonym you have written is earth shattering, if you will... Since English is my second language, I still find myself looking up new words I come across. In these few lines I had to look up both epitome and apex. And then when I looked them up I had to look up the word antithesis on top of that. Overall, in your 19 words I learned 3 new ones. I think that is a first for me (smile)
very powerful and pungent what you have written....it beats my first and only antonym I have ever written,,,I like yours a lot, Excellent job. I commend you
Comment Written 05-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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thank you so much. I haven't read that one in a long time either. it will do me good to go back and review it and see where i have come from into writing where i am now.
Comment from Pyrrho
I hate to rain on your parade, JUSTLEE72, but there have been over 15 wars going on simultaneously throughout the world for the past 80 years. It will not change. Man will destroy humankind in the near (100 years) future and the world will be a better place for it.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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I hate to rain on your parade, JUSTLEE72, but there have been over 15 wars going on simultaneously throughout the world for the past 80 years. It will not change. Man will destroy humankind in the near (100 years) future and the world will be a better place for it.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Accurate and true, and coming from a military family I know that if threatened I will fight. But I truly believe in mankind and my parade will go on despite the rain. I do see a different outcome than you but the world needs all opinions.
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As Castro made his toast, so do I: "To Che."
Comment from CivilChick
This is a powerful message in a so few lines. You chose antonyms that are as single words are powerful and you connected them expertly. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2016
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This is a powerful message in a so few lines. You chose antonyms that are as single words are powerful and you connected them expertly. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2016
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I love the challenge in these formatted poems. It is so interesting to stretch you mind and still limit it to so few words.
