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Comment from Caressa_08
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I had trouble understanding this. Hence, being the title, photo,.and the video seem to somewhat catch my attention and your poetry to rack my brain, I like better than if it was clear cut... at times...Wisdom, from your poem or trying to grasp it, might of been better if author notes were added to give us some insight in more detail...Right now its written in your code, and we here the reviewers, need some de-coding..

God Bless...Caressa_08

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
    the magi were "wise men" in Biblical reality.
    what I "tried" to express was the life of man circles Himself.
    in that God our Creator...lets us prove Him, by trying to dis.
    -smile-...ah I'm not about perfect understanding Maam....I'm not God. love Michael
Comment from Nika2016
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Well..I think I understand it.
El tiempo cura todos la heridas. This one is soulful and contrary to popular opinion one can go back. She..has been forgiven. He asks for forgiveness.Does she hear his echo? ...

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
    hm....-smile- well...honestly...I'm not sure I understand your review. I dont speak Spanish except a couple cuss words tossed at me enough times to pick up over the years. I dont think there was any "her" in here...but hell I been wrong since birth...I'm supposed to be a Rockafella...go figur....love Michael
reply by Nika2016 on 07-Mar-2016
    The song...silly. Cold play..He is talking toher. The poem always goes with the song. There you go again..refusing your own design, but hey...what do I know? Its your poem. Writing from phone. Mistakes
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
    ah but the song does go...if you're directing the lyrics toward heaven.....and that is why I used it...that and its title.
reply by Nika2016 on 07-Mar-2016
    Translate the poem. You wrote it. It is only fair. Why this song? And what does it have to do with God's wisdom..? The song is an explicit request to a woman, not God, or man. So explain that....if you can....and don't say..."I just liked the song." Some people may let you off the hook for poetry as stream of consciousness..not me...unless we are saying...to each his own interpretation. Inkblot..again.
reply by Nika2016 on 07-Mar-2016
    Give me a break....(eye roll)..Moving on...
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
    ah I missed this ah error-d thinking...or I would have responded sooner.
reply by Nika2016 on 07-Mar-2016
    ????? Peace...no prob. Enjoy your music.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
    this song Dear Lady...as well as probably all others...means differently or triggers different emotion from each individual life experience.....and I dont care if you dont believe that...just take my word for it....I'm smarter than you...-wink-.....I did give you a break but ran in to some new friends...but i feel sure were going there again.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
    this poem says MY WAY!....the wisdom of men adds up to God in the end. Now you can read that ...or not....i dont care....that clear...?
reply by Nika2016 on 07-Mar-2016
    Yes..your way. Apology. I am really bad at interpreting this kind of poetry. I shall refrain from trying. The music is great, as always.
Comment from royowen
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We all come from God and will one day go back to Him, and while we live we need that hiding place to be hidden in Christ. Beautifully written Michael, the longer I read free verse the more I get it I think, nicely written my friend, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
    well I thought I was doing one of you guy's structured forms....this 5-7-5's Roy...every single one of em' -headnod-...what da ya think about that ah...? lol ...ah thank you Sir. Amen...no getting around it He is I AM. love Michael
reply by royowen on 07-Mar-2016
    I see you have been busy
Comment from BruceMiller
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I see this poem as a collection of 5-7-5 stanzas. After that, I understand nothing about it. Some of the phrasing make no sense to me; is it used just for proper syllable count? Perhaps if you had added some comments indicating your intent would help to eliminate the confusion.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
    confusion eliminated...-wink-
Comment from NancyTobin
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I always read poems three times. This one I had to read four times to follow what the intent was. And I'm still not sure I understand what you're trying to say. You have an unusual style and I'd like to read more of your poems.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
    well good luck with that...-smile-
Comment from Gloria ....
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I think you've done a wonderful job in drawing together your bookends, Michael.

From whence it began to dust to dust from whence it began.

So true that honours honest confession,
for all else is vanity.

I really enjoyed reading this, so thank you for sharing.

Gloria

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
    hm...well thank you.
    I just wrote the first one...and then remembered I'm reconciled....so I tweaked it...-smile-
    thank you Beautiful. love Michael
Comment from tango494
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From start to finish this was an awesome read. This was truly a very well thought out submission. I loved the religious imagery and the tone of the work itself. Nice work!!!!

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
    Well hey Tango...-smile-
    appreciate you saying so. Have a great night. love Michael
Comment from l.raven
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HI Michael, God knows...no one ever said anything about life is ever being easy...I don't think there is any going back...only forward......smile baby...they are all great 5-7-5 poems...and I love the song...very well written...so glad to you write this form...I think you would be great at it...it's not as easy as you think it is...you did great on all of them...love it ...and love you as well...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
    ah I wrote the first one...figured i'd better add some meat with dinner...haha...appreciate your beauty. love you michael
reply by l.raven on 06-Mar-2016
    love you too...xxoo Linda