Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "The Jungle"Dawn of Chaos
26 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Montanino
Wow. Such a powerful description of the way of life among the animals in the jungle. Very passionate poem. Well done. If this is for a contest, good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Wow. Such a powerful description of the way of life among the animals in the jungle. Very passionate poem. Well done. If this is for a contest, good luck.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Yeah, vanishing flaws might help also with its read, thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Beri Bee
Such a profound and thoughtful piece that forces this readers mind from jungle to jungle, literal and metaphorical, in all it's raw and horrible, can't look-away yet never really look at all-ness. Once again... amazing!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Such a profound and thoughtful piece that forces this readers mind from jungle to jungle, literal and metaphorical, in all it's raw and horrible, can't look-away yet never really look at all-ness. Once again... amazing!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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I see you are a reader, given viewpoint more enchanted by your desires to read, loving the experience, treasuring books detailed events. You go, girl. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Marjorie Burghdoff-Banks
WOW!!! This is beautiful! "Life a cure told had, by action of murder, " I love this line, so much said with so little being said. I was in the jungle, looking up at that tree wondering what would happen next. Great, beautiful poem!!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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WOW!!! This is beautiful! "Life a cure told had, by action of murder, " I love this line, so much said with so little being said. I was in the jungle, looking up at that tree wondering what would happen next. Great, beautiful poem!!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Glad aspects in this write were captivating to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Maria Millsaps
This is an interesting piece. I found it to be tense and thought-provoking. I can't even imagine what it would be like to have to live in a jungle with so many predators lurking in the dark.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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This is an interesting piece. I found it to be tense and thought-provoking. I can't even imagine what it would be like to have to live in a jungle with so many predators lurking in the dark.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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The same as living with us, teaching them these bad habits, assured the lion will lay next to a sheep. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Cybertron1986
I enjoy reading perceptive analogies that challenge the state of both realism and society. You provide many good examples of the harshness that encompasses the jungle and the implication that it, in some ways, surrounds us in many forms.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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I enjoy reading perceptive analogies that challenge the state of both realism and society. You provide many good examples of the harshness that encompasses the jungle and the implication that it, in some ways, surrounds us in many forms.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Yes, it does, entangling us in uncertainties, covered in thr foilage limiting clear perception. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from His Grayness
very rare indeed with deep and powerful emotion well delivered expressing animals challenge in life! I enjoyed it very much and found it to be exceptionally well presented in all ways. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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very rare indeed with deep and powerful emotion well delivered expressing animals challenge in life! I enjoyed it very much and found it to be exceptionally well presented in all ways. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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You're the man. Feeling you are a very sincere person and honest. Glad aspects in this work were appealing to your interests.
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nice work thanks to YOU! vance
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my delight indeed ! Vance
Comment from Randa Dayle
Can't we all drive ourselves crazy with the things in our mind! Nice poem I am glad that you got it recognized. Keep on sharing your talents with us! :)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Can't we all drive ourselves crazy with the things in our mind! Nice poem I am glad that you got it recognized. Keep on sharing your talents with us! :)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Glad aspects in this write were captivating, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like your use of alliteration. This is my favorite figure of speech. Someone once asked if using alliteration made poetry whimsical and pointless. I said not if used by a good serious poet. You are one of those who I was referring to. I said alliteration increased the intensity of the subject. I like playing around with phrasing and this was fun. I find the meeting changes as does the perspective just as happens when we change positions peering at a landscape. It is a powerful metaphor. Well orchestrated. It is for the reader to connect the notes in this musical piece.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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I like your use of alliteration. This is my favorite figure of speech. Someone once asked if using alliteration made poetry whimsical and pointless. I said not if used by a good serious poet. You are one of those who I was referring to. I said alliteration increased the intensity of the subject. I like playing around with phrasing and this was fun. I find the meeting changes as does the perspective just as happens when we change positions peering at a landscape. It is a powerful metaphor. Well orchestrated. It is for the reader to connect the notes in this musical piece.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Your profound wisdom overwhelms me, capturing my feelings about my presented writes precise, thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this poem. There seems to be frequent randomness to the syntax here; I am not sure if this is an attempt to imitate the stream of consciousness of an animal or if this is not the poet's primary language. Much of this seems to be words haphazardly strung together into lines, as if by mathematical computation of a machine.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thank you for sharing this poem. There seems to be frequent randomness to the syntax here; I am not sure if this is an attempt to imitate the stream of consciousness of an animal or if this is not the poet's primary language. Much of this seems to be words haphazardly strung together into lines, as if by mathematical computation of a machine.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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I like your defining, detailing a systematic structuring like not human, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from mancub
you have an interesting piece here, nature ,events and mystery, I find this a bit difficult to follow as it can be challenging to interpret to some degree, I think this would be wonderful if expressed in a simplified form, you have a strong word choice and a very creative expression this is colorful and filled with emotion your creative mind shows, nicely done all in all, Thank you for sharing, Mancub
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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you have an interesting piece here, nature ,events and mystery, I find this a bit difficult to follow as it can be challenging to interpret to some degree, I think this would be wonderful if expressed in a simplified form, you have a strong word choice and a very creative expression this is colorful and filled with emotion your creative mind shows, nicely done all in all, Thank you for sharing, Mancub
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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I will consider your advice, attempting to enhance this write features. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
