Golgotha
Something to ponder15 total reviews
Comment from C.J. 16
An excellent poem Dawn of Tomorrow. Very well written with a smooth flow of words. You posted this before I joined FS. Glad I stopped by and read it. All the best.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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An excellent poem Dawn of Tomorrow. Very well written with a smooth flow of words. You posted this before I joined FS. Glad I stopped by and read it. All the best.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Well thank you so much for giving me that 15th review and the beautiful blue ribbon. Very much appreciated.
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You're very welcome.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from l.raven
HI Dawn, I hate to even think of that day...the pain Jesus was in...I know it had to be...but so grateful the day He arose from the dead...truly a poem for thought...I went and read a bit more on Golgotha...a very well written poem sweet girl...I need to stop reviewing...I am out of sixes...but I am so far behind again...****** you deserve one...love ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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HI Dawn, I hate to even think of that day...the pain Jesus was in...I know it had to be...but so grateful the day He arose from the dead...truly a poem for thought...I went and read a bit more on Golgotha...a very well written poem sweet girl...I need to stop reviewing...I am out of sixes...but I am so far behind again...****** you deserve one...love ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
aww you are so sweet. Hope you got caught up.
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still working on it...LOL...love Linda xxoo
Comment from foxangie123
This is in a state and I can't remember where it was remade as a reminder to what happened. I think maybe Kentucky. Wow, you have a genuinely truthful and lovely piece that can carry the reader into historical events if they allow it to do such... Nice...
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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This is in a state and I can't remember where it was remade as a reminder to what happened. I think maybe Kentucky. Wow, you have a genuinely truthful and lovely piece that can carry the reader into historical events if they allow it to do such... Nice...
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I didn't know that, I'll have to seek that out.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Dawn
thank you for posting this very captivating poem. Some spiritual poems can be very mundane and repetitive but this one had me reading and wanting to read more,
Great
Brenda
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Hi Dawn
thank you for posting this very captivating poem. Some spiritual poems can be very mundane and repetitive but this one had me reading and wanting to read more,
Great
Brenda
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Deniz22
Beautifully awesome! I love it because it is God's truth to a sinful world the Christ defeated sin and death for even the weakest believer. "He could have called ten thousand angels, but He died alone, on Calvary's hill." Thank you dear sister in Christ for this wonderful ode to our Savior.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Beautifully awesome! I love it because it is God's truth to a sinful world the Christ defeated sin and death for even the weakest believer. "He could have called ten thousand angels, but He died alone, on Calvary's hill." Thank you dear sister in Christ for this wonderful ode to our Savior.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Oh and thank you for all those stars and the wonderful words of review.
Comment from Mark Schardine
Red can mean bloodshed, but also warm-heartedness and deep love. Love means sacrifice, and only those who give of themselves are capable of it. Our Lord gives us the best example.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Red can mean bloodshed, but also warm-heartedness and deep love. Love means sacrifice, and only those who give of themselves are capable of it. Our Lord gives us the best example.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow, Dawn Of Tomorrow!
This is such an outstanding poem. The rhyming, cadence, and overall flow are spectacular, and the message conveyed is one of hope, salvation, sacrifice, and Agape love.
Your a,a,b,b rhyme scheme worked extremely well for this particular piece. It kept the read at fast-paced, very smooth and even tempo.
I wish I had something constructive to offer you in the way of improvements. The fact of the matter is, I can find nothing I'd change in the slightest.
Excellent work!
Dean~~>
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Wow, Dawn Of Tomorrow!
This is such an outstanding poem. The rhyming, cadence, and overall flow are spectacular, and the message conveyed is one of hope, salvation, sacrifice, and Agape love.
Your a,a,b,b rhyme scheme worked extremely well for this particular piece. It kept the read at fast-paced, very smooth and even tempo.
I wish I had something constructive to offer you in the way of improvements. The fact of the matter is, I can find nothing I'd change in the slightest.
Excellent work!
Dean~~>
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Well if you could find nothing to fix I did a good job. I rarely use that rhyme scheme, kind of surprised myself with that one. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review. Really appreciated.
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You are more than welcome. The pleasure was entirely mine.
~Dean :}
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You are more than welcome. The pleasure was entirely mine.
~Dean :}
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Dawn of Tomorrow
Yes your spiritual not only makes one ponder it makes a person reflect the real reason why Jesus died for us
to forgive our sins.
What I like is how you keep your rhyming pattern and so cleverly continued your thought EX.
Young David placed it on that hill,
to wait the day our sin would kill
our Savior. Now, His blood would seep
Gert
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Hello Dawn of Tomorrow
Yes your spiritual not only makes one ponder it makes a person reflect the real reason why Jesus died for us
to forgive our sins.
What I like is how you keep your rhyming pattern and so cleverly continued your thought EX.
Young David placed it on that hill,
to wait the day our sin would kill
our Savior. Now, His blood would seep
Gert
Comment Written 15-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Thank you for understanding the enjambment. A lot of people can get confused reading that, they don't always follow the meter, so I'm so glad you actually mentioned that. Thanks for the great review.
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You are welcome Dawn
Gert
Comment from Gloria ....
Wonderfully elegant and eloquent poem, Dawn. So much of the spiritual poetry is trite and repetitive so it's most pleasant to read one written with depth which gives the reader something to consider.
I absolutely love the phrase, His love runs red. That's superior writing.
Great job and thank you for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Wonderfully elegant and eloquent poem, Dawn. So much of the spiritual poetry is trite and repetitive so it's most pleasant to read one written with depth which gives the reader something to consider.
I absolutely love the phrase, His love runs red. That's superior writing.
Great job and thank you for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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You've heard that song by Chris Tomlin where he says 'Your love ran red, your love ran red'. That is what really got me going on this. Thanks so much for the lovely review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Dawn. I am so glad to see you posting so much of late. You are such a wonderful poetess.
I love this inspiring poem, especially these lines:
"our Savior. Now, His blood would seep
into that ground where death would keep
the "Seed of Satan" , some would say.
When Christ was killed he held at bay."
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Hi, Dawn. I am so glad to see you posting so much of late. You are such a wonderful poetess.
I love this inspiring poem, especially these lines:
"our Savior. Now, His blood would seep
into that ground where death would keep
the "Seed of Satan" , some would say.
When Christ was killed he held at bay."
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 15-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Awww thank you so much. You know I did look to see if I still had you on my fanlist and I do. Have you not written anything for a bit?
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I just finished a my second detecive novel Triple Crossed in December, but had to disable it because my publisher says it being posted on FS means it has been published (really?) LOL...I am posting chapter one of a new novel....a family saga on Sunday. Hope to see you then...Bob
