Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

Tom,
A lovely etheree... very well done,
you've managed to get some internal and end
rhymes... perfect and near ones, alike.
Well done... AND you've managed to
make a life statement in there... Ha!
you go guy! ;)
Good luck in the contest
Cat

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016

Thank you Cat, I have high hopes and fingers crossed for this one.

reply by I am Cat on 13-Jan-2016

It's very good... (I try never to get high hopes in a committee contest.... I've never won one yet!) LOL ;) But good luck! I'm sending positive energy your way!

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

At last someone, your good self, has demonstrated the point of an etheree. It is to create a poem in the shape of a ship's wake. Of course, in this instance it is appropriate, reflecting an element of the subject of the poem. Actually there is some sound homespun philosophy in this as well.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016

Thank you Pantygynt. Indeed, the form is everything. Glad the philosophy came through. Not to mention that every line rhymes somewhere. I must admit that I get annoyed when Nonets and Etherees are written with sloppy jagged profiles, especially when the committee awards them first place prizes. To me there is a definite point for the syllable count, and untrimmed results are just lazy poetry. But that's me.

reply by Pantygynt on 13-Jan-2016

Absolutely. I remember telling people to flush their lunes left for the same reason. Lol.

Comment from Jeffers63

Excellent

Such a nice use of words in your poetry it conveys a lovely and honest picture of life itself. I was taken on a ride. Thank you for this lovely piece.

Regards
Jeffers63

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016

Stank you Jeffers

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I'm glad you made the deadline for the Etheree contest with this philosophical post. I admired your "journey" metaphor along with the "ripples in our wake" plus your photograph to emphasis the point, along with your rhymes. Best wishes in the competition- Joan

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016

Thank you Joan. Smiles and hugs.

Comment from arelby

Excellent

It is a real accomplishment to confine a poem to a specific physical shape and still give it rhythm and rhyme. You are a craftsman.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016

Thank you are you. I appreciate the compliment.

Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow

Excellent

So right you are. Life flies by with or without us paying attention. Enjoyed your Etheree, but since I myself entered the contest I don't wish you as much luck as I wish myself. LOL Great job.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016

Thank you Dawn. I understand. I feel the same.

Comment from MacMhuirich

Excellent

I love to see an etheree centred with good shape, this is a wonderful example. I enjoyed reading the well worded content. The presentation with the photo is excellent. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016

Thank you John, yes, I too think the shape matters. Thought I'd throw in some rhyme too.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A beautiful Etheree with a valuable life lesson and a warning not to let life pass us without noticing. Live everyday as if it is your last day and thank God if He grants you another day.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016

Thank you Sandra. Amen.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I like it very much and admire your rhyming as well as the syllable count. Best of luck in the contest. The powers that be will be the deciders. Blessings, Patricia

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016

Shank you Patricia. Yes, there are some excellent entries.

Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

I love the format of this poem. I've always admired your ability to write a well constructed poem in any meter or format. Your gift. Wonderful write Treischel and it's good to see you are still writing. Miss you!

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 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016

Thank you NicviFaye. Yes, I Haven't heard from you in a very long time. Where've you been? I hope all is going well.

reply by NicciFaye on 12-Jan-2016

I've been in school. I've been down and I've been up. I've been lost and now am found...lol Life can take its toil BUT I had a friend who redirected me back to Fanstory...my first love...Thank you Treischel for your concern and care. It is appreciated. I am doing well....now