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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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I often forget that wild fires are still a huge issue in your country as the droughts there can be devastating. This is a very well penned account of not only the fire, but the flood of emotions such disasters as these cause. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
    Thanks Monica for having a read and sending this review yes we have many fires and flood in Aus and I thought once again it worthy of acknowledgement through a poem to share. Many thanks my friend and Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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And as I sit and type away, to tell you of these tales
My thoughts and prayers go to Yarloop and those in New South Wales.
But our Aussie spirit's so alive, will come now to the fore
And help soon give, best wishes send, for these we'll not ignore.

Chrissy, you've driven home how these poor folks are suffering, losing their homes and livelihoods - (here we have floods) - and my heart and prayers go out to them.

the words, and both rhythm and rhyme flow smoothly throughout - all in all most impressive.

Margaret

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
    Hi Margaret. I am really pleased you enjoyed my poem and it is so sad at times for these people and takes years to re build and them sometimes it all happens again . I thought I might put someting in print as a tribute especially the firefighters and emergency workers they so a great job. Thanks so much for your review Cheers Christine😀
Comment from MAMGALAM
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A good poetic description of flood and fire.
You've touched most of the areas and section that has suffered
destruction and you've extended mental support to them .
Good venture .
Congrats..!

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
    Hi MAMGALAM, nice to meet you and thanks for your review of my fire/flood poem I tried to do them justice and it always makes me sad to hear of these tragedies. the emergency service do a great job in both circumstances. A big Cheers for your feedback christine😃
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Hi Christine - well I thought we were having it bad in UK with all the floods. But Australia is having both flood and fire. It sounds almost biblical. Extreme weather described well in this poem, in good aabb rhyme form. I thought it was to be in heptameter but lines vary a bit. However, the story is well written and an interesting read, albeit an unhappy situation for so many people. Your author notes to into detail and it really is dreadful. What is going on with the planet? well done. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
    Hi Dorothy Thanks for your detailed review and yes Australia has some pretty awful fires and floods usually at this time of the year and often no rain through the year in some places and hence the dry tinder perfect for fires, Most are caused by lightning but we do have arsonists as well Grrrrr. The other extreme is flooding and often same places each year. particularly in New South Wales and Queensland. My style is my own I like aabb rhyme but some times do abab as well and try to keep the syllables as even as I can so Thanks for reading and have a great 2016 Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I have seen this disaster on the evening news. Your poem records it well. Your lines flow smoothly and the rhyme is super. The picture is good [if a fire picture can be good]. I like the hope at the end of rebuilding with help from others in Australia.

Good job and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
    Hi jannypan .Thanks very much for reading my poem of the flood and fires in Australia . I tried keep it factual and and from how I see it also. I am mostly an old fashioned rhymer and I like poems to flow when reading them so thanks for that Glad to share and appreciate your reading my work Cheers Christine😃
Comment from brenda bickers
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Hi Christine,
What a wonderful poem, I love the rhythm and rhyme so catching and delightful to read. A very sad situation for anybody to be in. My thoughts are with them all.
Brenda

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
    Hi Brenda and thanks for reading and giving my poem a lovely review. I am an old fashioned rhymer and I like flow so Your comments make me happy . yes this is sad for many poeple and I hope we dont have any more fires/ floods this year, but Australia being what it is I won't hold my breath. Thanks for your thoughts Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Walu Feral
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G'day Christine. Darn it mate, no sixes. This is superb story poetry my friend! So beautifully rhymed and flowing that I wish I'd written it. Also, a great education for those readers overseas who may not know much about this country.

Australia in my opinion is one of the harshest place on earth for natural disasters. Your notes are a great short story on their own

Splendid stuff.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
    Hi Fez, and so great to hear from you and thanks heaps for your review and great words. Yes Australian is a harsh country but also so rich in so many things for us to write about.I hope there are no more floods / fires Yes maybe it is up to us to enlighten our international friends on Australia I am so luck to live here though As always best woshes and Cheers Christine 😃
Comment from c_lucas
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Nature has its own way to fight back and claim its own. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting, but tragic read.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
    hi c lucas I thank your for reading my poem and for your lovely review . And glad you found it read smoothly . yes these are tragedies for our country folk affected bitcthey will come through Cheers to you Christine😃
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello, Christine :)

I am sad to hear there is a fire out of control in Australia. I have a friend that lives there, maybe you know him-Fez, he is a poet that writes here in FS I'm sure you know him too. I like your poem, it's well written and very informative. Good job!
Cheers :)
Gypsy

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
    Hi Gypsy Thanks again for your lovely support and I am glad you found it informative and well written. Yes I also follow Fez he is terrific and I enjoy his stories and poems also . The bush fires and floods are Australias worst nightmares and they happen somewhere every year. We also have many drought stricken areas as well. Cheers again Christine😀

Comment from Douglas Paul
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a very good commentary on these disasters, I think. I really like the tempe and cadence you used, but I wonder if this line needs one more syllable

A flood was first, some days ago, from torrential rain,

I enjoyed this. I am new here, so please feel free to ignore this minor critique if I have overstepped my bounds. Have a great night

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
    Hi DouglasPaul, Welcome to this site and by all means, please feel free to make any comments and or suggestions on any of my poems. I thank you for your feedback.
    This stanza is made up of 8 and 9 syllable lines and that one is an 8 syllable to fit in with tempo of this verse I hop,e ( but I did repeat this particular line over and over in my head and finger count to make sure it sounded right, so I can understand your comment I think the word 'torrential' is the issue and sometimes it depends on how one pronounces it and I will run it through a syllable counter anyway)
    You will enjoy being here and I am relatively new also since May2015 but I have had such fun and have enjoyed reading, reviewing and writing poetry submitted here and am learning all the time.
    I will keep an eye out for your work also Many thanks again and Cheers Christine
reply by Douglas Paul on 08-Jan-2016
    Thanks for the detailed reply and I would be honored if you could take some time to review my stuff