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Comment from Selina Stambi
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Those days of Summer sun,
now are gone,
where twilight stretched 'til nine o'clock ... ah, and how this heart of mine sorrows still!

I learned the names of two new poetic forms today. You have certainly contributed to my education, Tom. Bless you. Please say hello to the dear missis.

Sonali

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
    Thank you Sonali, I will.
Comment from Joan E.
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My, my--another new form. I liked the minimalist style (I think I'd eliminate all punctuation) and regular stanzas with "jagged lines". Your photograph established the wintry mood well. I particualarly enjoyed your intriguing rhymes in "gloom/womb" and "o'clock/interlock," use of "truncated" and "shrouds" metaphor. Well done- Joan

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
    Thank you Joan. I could go either way with the punctuation.
reply by Joan E. on 08-Dec-2015
    When in doubt, leave it out! That's my guide, but I respect your choice. Cheers- Joan
Comment from robyn corum
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People who suffer yearly from this lament are also said to have 'S.A.D.' or Seasonal Affective Disorder. It's not a fun issue -- and unfortunately, one I understand all too well. Did you know some people recommend using a common 'gro-light' (as used for indoor flowers) for help? You're supposed to sit under it for at least 15 minutes per day. Hmmm...

Thanks for another cool poem form! I enjoyed!

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
    Thank you Robyn. I've heard that light treatment helps.
Comment from Pantygynt
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This coincides precisely with my mood and the SAD syndrome sets in. The only consolation is there are only another fourteen days to the solstice and the day's will start drawing out again, even if the worst of the cold is still to come.

The form is another new one to me. It has a attractive shape and certainly encourages succinct expression.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
    Thank you Pantygynt. I liked the form, so I'll likely write more.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
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Yes, indeed! Where has summer gone? It's still a good memory.

"They test the soul with endless gloom,
as shortened sunshine broods
angst awry,
when captured within Winter's womb."

Your summation of winter is perfect. One bright spot? Candlelight is prettier in the dark. LOL Chin up, Tom!

How is your wife coming along with her new knee?



 Comment Written 07-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
    Thank you. I don't really mind winter, I just hate the shorter cloudy days. My wife is doing well. She is off a walker and on a cane now, but walks freely about the house without one.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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Well written poetry bringing out the emotions of the dreary winter days that become shorter and miserable weather conditions make it worse. Great photo.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
    Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Neonewman
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The Winter blues may infect the moods of most, but I love this time of the year!
Of course here in Texas, Winter is a little gentler. Wonderfully crafted piece my friend.
God bless!
STeve

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
    Thank you Steve.
reply by Neonewman on 06-Dec-2015
    My pleasure!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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I totally agree Winter is a drag. You've got that tri-fall style down. Well done. The rhymes are clever, and the poem flows easy and is enjoyable to read. Thanks for sharing your Winter blues with me.

Peace, Jesse James

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
    Thank you Jesse.
reply by Jesse James Doty on 06-Dec-2015
    It was my pleasure.
Comment from Sambangi
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Very interesting format of the poem. You have maintained rhyming well. There are some good alliterations too. It is true winter nights are longer curtailing fun and joy. Very well written

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
    Thank you Sambangi. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from scd41
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Though your poem is on a gloomy theme of winter, I liked the informative author notes as much as the realistic depiction in the poem. Writer's Blues is one thing new to learn. I knew only Writer's block which finds mention occasionally in FS posts or prompts. I have noted the beauty of Tri-fall genre of poem.


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
    Ethan's you scd41.