Act of Endurance
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Comment from rjuselius
this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear tpac! Your write is rather elegant although it carries a doomsday feel to it. i think everyone should stop complaining and take,action to their beliefs. well, not racists or homophobic people.
thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear tpac! Your write is rather elegant although it carries a doomsday feel to it. i think everyone should stop complaining and take,action to their beliefs. well, not racists or homophobic people.
thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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It is gothic not mine the Holy Text, glad its message was partially heard, touching by your comments. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The spokesperson speaks the right order of moral state of action to combat the evil and root out cruelty and ensuring humanity for peaceful living; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Keep Inspiring -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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The spokesperson speaks the right order of moral state of action to combat the evil and root out cruelty and ensuring humanity for peaceful living; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Keep Inspiring -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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I again must give my praise to you, encouraging not faults comments, making me to at least try. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Earl Corp
A poem about the end of days? I recognize some of the Book of Revelations within the words. Does Faith found from Satan's law a reference to Aetheism or being a Satanist?
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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A poem about the end of days? I recognize some of the Book of Revelations within the words. Does Faith found from Satan's law a reference to Aetheism or being a Satanist?
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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The reference is outside of world's interests, believing we all are eternals. Think about it, we once knew God and the angels: what happened? Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Miranda Langston
this is a really well-written religious poem. i absolutely love your choice of artwork to accompany this, as well. booklotto is an amazing artist, i think :)
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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this is a really well-written religious poem. i absolutely love your choice of artwork to accompany this, as well. booklotto is an amazing artist, i think :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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Just luck following FS suggestion to allow your words illustrate a minh picture not sight. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Arloue
Grammatical errors. Awkward flow. Ideas aren't conveyed properly. Rhyming is inconsistent. Try to develop your story to be more consistent. Explicit wording isn't bad if used correctly. Much better than maintaining implicit meaning at all times because it becomes confusing and too abstract.
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Grammatical errors. Awkward flow. Ideas aren't conveyed properly. Rhyming is inconsistent. Try to develop your story to be more consistent. Explicit wording isn't bad if used correctly. Much better than maintaining implicit meaning at all times because it becomes confusing and too abstract.
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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I like your comment, feeling many flaws I define as pits in my writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Gracenoteme
You have an interesting way of putting words together. I wonder if English is your native language. It sounds to me like you have a faith in God and His Holy Word. Immediately your focus shifts to Satan, and it looks like you are into fighting hell. Then you go on to speak of all sorts of terrors, including war, abuse, and horrors. I think I get the picture of where you are coming from in this poem. I wonder if you could incorporate something about God's love or grace, as many would say that God is love. Warnings are important, but I don't think that uttered warnings, even by God, get anyone anywhere unless the one hearing them feels that God cares about their well-being, not just justice. I don't think saying God is love would hurt your poetic style. I have only read this one poem by you. It is interesting to think that science can prove all of what you say in here, but where is the love? Can we look for proof of that in science?
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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You have an interesting way of putting words together. I wonder if English is your native language. It sounds to me like you have a faith in God and His Holy Word. Immediately your focus shifts to Satan, and it looks like you are into fighting hell. Then you go on to speak of all sorts of terrors, including war, abuse, and horrors. I think I get the picture of where you are coming from in this poem. I wonder if you could incorporate something about God's love or grace, as many would say that God is love. Warnings are important, but I don't think that uttered warnings, even by God, get anyone anywhere unless the one hearing them feels that God cares about their well-being, not just justice. I don't think saying God is love would hurt your poetic style. I have only read this one poem by you. It is interesting to think that science can prove all of what you say in here, but where is the love? Can we look for proof of that in science?
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Wow, you have strong faith in science, suffering myself trust in brethren whatever field, wishing you the best in your path. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
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I trust Christian scientists more than I trust science. I am sorry to hear you are going through a rough time. I will pray for you if you like.
Comment from Cmelton
Many though provoking ideas in your piece her. I think the world would be far better off pondering over some of your ideas. I think this is a very well written and thought provoking piece. I would be interested in seeing more some time.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Many though provoking ideas in your piece her. I think the world would be far better off pondering over some of your ideas. I think this is a very well written and thought provoking piece. I would be interested in seeing more some time.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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If your statements hold truth I would also, fighting what seems a losing battle, but with remarks such as yours I hold hope. Thanking you for your encouraging thoughts and generous rate.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. My favorite phrase "Abuse of the poor will stop." I often feel that Christ focused so much on the poor and that seems to be the least priority. Those of religious minds would rather weaponize words of Scripture to cast judgment on others.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you for sharing. My favorite phrase "Abuse of the poor will stop." I often feel that Christ focused so much on the poor and that seems to be the least priority. Those of religious minds would rather weaponize words of Scripture to cast judgment on others.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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In my consideration the text was given to remind us we are prisoners, placed in a cell called heaven, away from our true family. Text relates we will remember. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from His Grayness
This work approaches a highly complex and often argued subject, but with simple reason and a reasonable, light approach. I enjoyed the reading and the challenge of thought offered therein. I have on suggestion to improve this work. HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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This work approaches a highly complex and often argued subject, but with simple reason and a reasonable, light approach. I enjoyed the reading and the challenge of thought offered therein. I have on suggestion to improve this work. HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts about this write.
Comment from busses
well written. I do believe however that there is nothing to say for all is known. I do think we will become one at the very end of existence. whether it will be in time? well, only time will tell. I chose to enjoy what I have and still strive for what I lack as long as I'm here. Nice piece!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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well written. I do believe however that there is nothing to say for all is known. I do think we will become one at the very end of existence. whether it will be in time? well, only time will tell. I chose to enjoy what I have and still strive for what I lack as long as I'm here. Nice piece!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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I see this work opens doors in considering, pleasing me with the reflections given back to me. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
