Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Watch"A collection of dark poetry
69 total reviews
Comment from Jacq77
I found this poem both powerful and poignant, and it left me feeling so sad. Sad for the beautiful bird who watched over his master's final resting place. Such a strong bond between them, that even death could not break it. This was beautifully descriptive and well written, and the photograph enhanced your words. Very well done to evoke such emotion from the reader.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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I found this poem both powerful and poignant, and it left me feeling so sad. Sad for the beautiful bird who watched over his master's final resting place. Such a strong bond between them, that even death could not break it. This was beautifully descriptive and well written, and the photograph enhanced your words. Very well done to evoke such emotion from the reader.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Jacq, for the splendid review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. It is sad, but also peaceful. I appreciate yourwarm and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from papa55mike
What a beautiful poem and picture. My wife and I both love predator birds and I'm amazed he got that close to him. I'm sure he visit there often. I wish I had a six. Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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What a beautiful poem and picture. My wife and I both love predator birds and I'm amazed he got that close to him. I'm sure he visit there often. I wish I had a six. Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Mike, for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-The photographs are excellent.
-Thank you for the author notes.
-Excellent poem with vivid imagery and a story about this devoted hawk.
-It is dedicated because "His master lies below in solemn peace."
-Good use of that repeated line that links the beginning of the poem to the end.
-Good beginning:
"On guard upon the obelisk ... he waits."
-A few other lines I like:
"His eyes are sharp; he cannot be deceived--
His master taught him well. He stands alert."
"Ten days and nights he perches on the tomb;
No fiend or foul can lure him from his task."
-Very good addition to the book.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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-The photographs are excellent.
-Thank you for the author notes.
-Excellent poem with vivid imagery and a story about this devoted hawk.
-It is dedicated because "His master lies below in solemn peace."
-Good use of that repeated line that links the beginning of the poem to the end.
-Good beginning:
"On guard upon the obelisk ... he waits."
-A few other lines I like:
"His eyes are sharp; he cannot be deceived--
His master taught him well. He stands alert."
"Ten days and nights he perches on the tomb;
No fiend or foul can lure him from his task."
-Very good addition to the book.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Respa, for the splendid and detailed review and the exceptional rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. You highlighted some of my favorite passages. I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments and the wonderful six stars very much. Thank you. :)
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You are very welcome for the review and stars. Thank you for your comments, as well.
Comment from Poetofheart2013
A very powerful poem about a very beautiful and graceful bird.
I really like how you worded it mad e the bird come alive and I see
bird as I read it. Keep the good work.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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A very powerful poem about a very beautiful and graceful bird.
I really like how you worded it mad e the bird come alive and I see
bird as I read it. Keep the good work.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Poetofheart, for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from alvina224224
A very emotional, yet inspirational poem, rspoet. Stories of similar events have always fascinated me, so this one has really hit the target. My cousin, a one-time carer at a nursing home, has often related to gatherings of friends or family, about the Persian cat that lived in the home. She apparently rested all night on the doormat always, outside the room of a patient who had, or was about to die. How do they know?
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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A very emotional, yet inspirational poem, rspoet. Stories of similar events have always fascinated me, so this one has really hit the target. My cousin, a one-time carer at a nursing home, has often related to gatherings of friends or family, about the Persian cat that lived in the home. She apparently rested all night on the doormat always, outside the room of a patient who had, or was about to die. How do they know?
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you, alvina, for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I think it is instinct or a sense that something is wrong. I appreciate your warm and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Both eerie and comforting. To think of anyone standing guard over a tomb is touching, to imagine a bird, it is inspiring.
Thanks, great presentation and depth to this poem.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Both eerie and comforting. To think of anyone standing guard over a tomb is touching, to imagine a bird, it is inspiring.
Thanks, great presentation and depth to this poem.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Spiritual Echo, for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Very well written poetry. An interesting subject which is not usually written about in poetry. It is also interesting to know that a hawk will protect his master's last resting place.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Very well written poetry. An interesting subject which is not usually written about in poetry. It is also interesting to know that a hawk will protect his master's last resting place.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Sandra, for the excellent review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the hawk and its vigil.
It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your warm and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a well-metered blank verse that certainly presents a stoic and proud guardian. The ideas of the demons, ghouls, and harpies coming for us makes me want a falcon of my own. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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This is a well-metered blank verse that certainly presents a stoic and proud guardian. The ideas of the demons, ghouls, and harpies coming for us makes me want a falcon of my own. Nice poem.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Hello Bill. Thank you for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the hawk and its vigil.
It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I advice getting one! I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a great read. I have always be fascinated by the falconers as they work with their birds.
May you have you way with the bird on your dinner table on Thanksgiving. Patricia :-)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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This is a great read. I have always be fascinated by the falconers as they work with their birds.
May you have you way with the bird on your dinner table on Thanksgiving. Patricia :-)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Patricia, for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the hawk and its vigil.
It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your warm and encouraging comments very much.
Thanksgiving greetings to you. :)
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are descriptive, creative and interesting.
The reader found the poem to flow and connect well. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem well.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are descriptive, creative and interesting.
The reader found the poem to flow and connect well. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem well.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you, harmony, for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments very much.
