Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 328 "Floral Fire"Small and Specialty Poems
10 total reviews
Comment from LoannaLois
This is the sonnet I was waiting for...the one that should be in an instructional booklet...the one that teaches, explains, and lets you FEEL what a sonnet truly is.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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This is the sonnet I was waiting for...the one that should be in an instructional booklet...the one that teaches, explains, and lets you FEEL what a sonnet truly is.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thank you LoannaLois. I delight in your enthusiasm and the recognition.
Comment from bard owl
This is such a beautiful observation of the fabulous season of autumn. Your poetic ability shines through when you comment on the beauty of the leaves reflecting sunlight. And you lament about the brevity of the season is felt by all of us who so admire fall's color. Perfect rhythm, rhyme and meter. Gorgeous imagery. Certainly deserving a six-star rating.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
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This is such a beautiful observation of the fabulous season of autumn. Your poetic ability shines through when you comment on the beauty of the leaves reflecting sunlight. And you lament about the brevity of the season is felt by all of us who so admire fall's color. Perfect rhythm, rhyme and meter. Gorgeous imagery. Certainly deserving a six-star rating.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Bard Owl. I am pleased and elated by you comments and rating.
Comment from Domino 2
I don't usually like poems written in 'oldy-worldy - 'thy/lo' etc), but your uasage is an excellent exception, IMO.
Excellent choice of powerful and apt words to describe autumn.
Vivid imagery.
Faultless iambic pentameter and rhymes, plus top enjambment to add to the flow.
Top sonnet that deserves to do well.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2015
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I don't usually like poems written in 'oldy-worldy - 'thy/lo' etc), but your uasage is an excellent exception, IMO.
Excellent choice of powerful and apt words to describe autumn.
Vivid imagery.
Faultless iambic pentameter and rhymes, plus top enjambment to add to the flow.
Top sonnet that deserves to do well.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Ray. I appreciate your enthusiasm and encouragement.
Comment from Nosha17
I like the imagery of the colours and barrenness of Autumn. Good descriptions and excellent rhyming and meter. Couple of things, verse 2, it is where'er (abbreviation of wherever), also, if you use ever or in its abbreviated form it might be better to say 'always' in place of ever. Verse 4, 3rd person of verb have in its old-fashioned form is hath (hast goes with you or thou). Good luck in the contest. faye
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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I like the imagery of the colours and barrenness of Autumn. Good descriptions and excellent rhyming and meter. Couple of things, verse 2, it is where'er (abbreviation of wherever), also, if you use ever or in its abbreviated form it might be better to say 'always' in place of ever. Verse 4, 3rd person of verb have in its old-fashioned form is hath (hast goes with you or thou). Good luck in the contest. faye
Comment Written 28-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you Faye. I'll look at that.
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Thank you, I did change it.
Comment from flamingstar
Well, it's a gorgeous piece of writing for sure. I think its rhyme scheme will disqualify you, however, as the English sonnet is abab, cdcd, etc. You might ask for clarification while there's still time to tweak it...
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Well, it's a gorgeous piece of writing for sure. I think its rhyme scheme will disqualify you, however, as the English sonnet is abab, cdcd, etc. You might ask for clarification while there's still time to tweak it...
Comment Written 28-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thanks for the heads up warning flaming star. I that's the case, I'm toast.
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Bless you, I changed it. Can't believe that I forgot that.
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Super!
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery Author, this is a really good entry for tis particular competition, It is by far the best that I've reviewed to date, it follows the true course of the Sonnet with great rhyming and an excellent turn on the ninth line, I really wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Hi Mystery Author, this is a really good entry for tis particular competition, It is by far the best that I've reviewed to date, it follows the true course of the Sonnet with great rhyming and an excellent turn on the ninth line, I really wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Eric.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your picture is gorgeous. Your sonnet is, too. I really enjoyed reading it. Good job with the format. I like the way you treated the season as per author notes. Good job with touches of alliteration.
I have a change to suggest. Is the word [nought] supposed to be [naught]?
Good job and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Your picture is gorgeous. Your sonnet is, too. I really enjoyed reading it. Good job with the format. I like the way you treated the season as per author notes. Good job with touches of alliteration.
I have a change to suggest. Is the word [nought] supposed to be [naught]?
Good job and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you jannypan. My Elizabethan dictionary shows it as nought. I thought the same myself.
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I was not sure. Perhaps you could make a note about the word in your author notes, so others will not ask the same thing.
Comment from OnyxSapphire78
Floral fire...what a wonderful way to describe this time! This is a lovely poem and artwork to boot. This time of year just breeds inspiration. Good luck and happy writing.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Floral fire...what a wonderful way to describe this time! This is a lovely poem and artwork to boot. This time of year just breeds inspiration. Good luck and happy writing.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you OnyxSapphire.
Comment from mvbrooks
The words seem to almost dance and create a positive image of fall. Appreciate the reminder at the end to enjoy fall because..."Winter lurks just 'round the barren bend." Gives a positive sense and clear images.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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The words seem to almost dance and create a positive image of fall. Appreciate the reminder at the end to enjoy fall because..."Winter lurks just 'round the barren bend." Gives a positive sense and clear images.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thank you MVbrooks.
Comment from royowen
The thing I adore about autumn is that nature in all it's wonder is gloriously declaring the death of of the summer's garment, the coming nakedness of winter and the dormant renewing that comes with winter. Excellent entry in this English sonnet comp.a wonderful entry in this contest. Descriptive, imaginative, even metered written in the way of the ancient, lyrical style of the English sonnet, Shakespeare would have been proud, well done, good luck. blessings,
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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The thing I adore about autumn is that nature in all it's wonder is gloriously declaring the death of of the summer's garment, the coming nakedness of winter and the dormant renewing that comes with winter. Excellent entry in this English sonnet comp.a wonderful entry in this contest. Descriptive, imaginative, even metered written in the way of the ancient, lyrical style of the English sonnet, Shakespeare would have been proud, well done, good luck. blessings,
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much royowen. I am pleased and energized by your comments.
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Most welcome
