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Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness

Viewing comments for Chapter 10031 "The Devil's Ooze"
A collection of dark poetry

42 total reviews 
Comment from Teri7
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Gert, This is a truly amazing poem you have penned. It is so full of the truth. You used such great descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words and the art work. Great job my friend. Hugs, Teri

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
    Thank you very much Teri
    So nice of you to honor me wit a six and nice review.

    Gert
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Gert,

You were able to write a dark poem because you know the light.
I was surprised, as most everything I read from you was uplifting,
but tis the season...You also left your reader with an important
message in the end.

"drains all shafts of light" and you use of 'sole' and 'soul' was very
good.

Linda

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
    Thank you Linda I appreciate your review and comments.

    Gert
Comment from krys123
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Gert;
-A very eerie and quite sinister piece of writing that is this really maleficent piece of writing.
-Picture you have chosen is superb and is very relative and complementary to your writing.
-Your rhyming words are contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making your rhythm to flow smoothly. I found your rhyming to be neither strained nor labored.
-Rhythmic cadence, timing and tempo while helpful in making your reading clear, and very easy.
-Imagery is very sinisterly expressive and vividly and monstrously descriptive Throughout the writing.
-Thank you for sharing imposing and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
    Thank you so much Alex
    Your thoughts about my dark poem are so appreciated

    Gert
reply by krys123 on 27-Oct-2015
    You're very welcome Gert.
    Alex
Comment from Jay Squires
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You have a thoughtful and kinda scary poem here, Gert. I only found one nit, below, but it's an important one, I think:

it oozes through the sole
of our shoes to steal our soul
["SHOES" is plural and therefore takes the plural "SOLES". I know you don't have an exacting rhyme with "soul" but I don't think it matters, compared to a reader that stops and makes a grammatical adjustment.

Good job, Gert.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Thank you Jay You have a good point . Will look into it.

    See you later

    Gert
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Oh m y!!!! This is a very dark poem, but very fitting for the season. It is Halloween week, after all. You did a very good job writing this poem. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Thank you very much Barb
    I appreciate your comments.

    Gert
Comment from Dean Kuch
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See? Now doesn't that feel liberating, getting those thoughts out of your head, Gert? Kind of like a great weight has been lifted off of your shuddering, shivering shoulders, is it not?

As long as there is good, there will be evil. As long as there is light, there too will be darkness. Much can be said for many different antonyms. The Devil is like a beast in the night, seeking those who are weak-minded whom he can devour.

The key is not to dwell so much on the negative, at least not in our personal lives. Writing is how I expel my own negative energies. And I'm really a pretty happy guy most times because of it.

Excellent, Gert. You even frightened me a little.

B-R-R-R-r-r-r-r-rrrrrrrrr

~Dean ;}

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Thank you Dean I have sent you my feelings of finally posting this poem in a PM.

    Gert
reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Oct-2015
    It was entirely my pleasure, Gert.

    ~Dean :}
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015

    Smiles Dean

    Gert
reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Oct-2015
    ""Smiling...""
Comment from LanceHill
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Nicely written. It is true Satan will not stop attacking, always trying to pull us further from God. Put on the full armor if God. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Thank you very much Lance Hill
Comment from MacMhuirich
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Yes, even the bad of the world never rest, a most timely warning considering how the world is going. If only more people realised they were being hoodwinked and stepping off the right path. Well written and a compelling read.
Bless you
John

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Thank you very much MacMhuirich
    What a great comment.

    Gert
Comment from c_lucas
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Satan will always try to deceive and to spoil one's plans. This is very well written with a warning that cannot be given too often. Your poem is very well written.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Thank you very much Charlie

    Gert
reply by c_lucas on 26-Oct-2015
    You're welcome, Charlie
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Ok, I hate the artwork which is perfect for your words. So, I can't be the measure of good/bad. Your poem flows well and makes use of alliteration well.

I would change the following:

shafts' does not need the apostrophe

His evil plan desire to overpower all; [maybe a comma or dash after plan Or His evil plan is a desire to . . .

Good job and thanks for sharing [I think--only kidding--you did a good job].




 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Thank you jannypan
    great advice


    Gert