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Comment from Green Lake Girl
Sounds like a fun cruise, Tom. It's been a beautiful autumn in Michigan and seems the same is true in your neck of the woods.
I enjoyed this poem a great deal. Super rhyming and great rhythm. It's fun to read out loud. Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Sounds like a fun cruise, Tom. It's been a beautiful autumn in Michigan and seems the same is true in your neck of the woods.
I enjoyed this poem a great deal. Super rhyming and great rhythm. It's fun to read out loud. Well done!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
You have brilliantly resurrected another French medieval poem. It is apparent why this form has stood the test of time with its magnetic rhythm and short emphatic lines. Your rhyme and rhyme scheme are excellent. Your figurative language is colorful (nature's tapestry) Thanks for the read,
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Hi, Treischel,
You have brilliantly resurrected another French medieval poem. It is apparent why this form has stood the test of time with its magnetic rhythm and short emphatic lines. Your rhyme and rhyme scheme are excellent. Your figurative language is colorful (nature's tapestry) Thanks for the read,
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Preston. I actually sang it to my wife, and it worked. I am very pleased that you liked it as well.
Comment from Pantygynt
The way the rhyme carries over from one stanza to the next gives poem a hypnotic quality as if it could roll on forever - a bit like the river really.
This is superlative matching of form to content. And is worth a virtual six but mine have gone early this week.
I'm sorry the autumn colours didn't work for you but this must compensate.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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The way the rhyme carries over from one stanza to the next gives poem a hypnotic quality as if it could roll on forever - a bit like the river really.
This is superlative matching of form to content. And is worth a virtual six but mine have gone early this week.
I'm sorry the autumn colours didn't work for you but this must compensate.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Glad you liked the firm. The boat ride and meal were worth it..
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Good poetry and a very awesome experience to ride on the boat. It is definitely a poetic theme and you did it well. Awesome photo of an awesome boat.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Good poetry and a very awesome experience to ride on the boat. It is definitely a poetic theme and you did it well. Awesome photo of an awesome boat.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from I am Cat
Tom,
I really like this form!
It's fun to read like a lilting free verse!
wow!
I might try one one of these days.
well done.
Looks like fun!
Cat
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Tom,
I really like this form!
It's fun to read like a lilting free verse!
wow!
I might try one one of these days.
well done.
Looks like fun!
Cat
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Stank you Carpt. By all means, go for it.
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Stank you Carpt? LOLOL... cute. I like that. ;)
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Dang computer. Gotta watch it all the time. Worse than a kid.
Comment from artemis53
Very well done. I will admit that I am not one to be on a boat but the river must have been amazing. I am sure you will keep those moments.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Very well done. I will admit that I am not one to be on a boat but the river must have been amazing. I am sure you will keep those moments.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you Artemis. I will.
Comment from Joan E.
Hey--you were reading my mind--I wanted to know more about the Mississippi River cruise! To wander "lazily" and enjoy "Nature's tapestry sounds very appealing. I enjoyed the long and short lines and your rhymes. More cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Hey--you were reading my mind--I wanted to know more about the Mississippi River cruise! To wander "lazily" and enjoy "Nature's tapestry sounds very appealing. I enjoyed the long and short lines and your rhymes. More cheers- Joan
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you Joan. I'm sure you been on many.
Comment from patcelaw
Treischel, to take a luncheon river cruise can be so wonderful. A friend and I too on the Cumberland River and the entertainment was wonderful. The evening before we had taken the dinner cruise and the difference between the daylight and the night time cruise was striking.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Treischel, to take a luncheon river cruise can be so wonderful. A friend and I too on the Cumberland River and the entertainment was wonderful. The evening before we had taken the dinner cruise and the difference between the daylight and the night time cruise was striking.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you Patricia. Yes, very different moods on the water.
