Creepy Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Fright Night"A touch of Fear
16 total reviews
Comment from rod007
This was an exceptional poem, bringing out all the devilish ghouls that infest the black night on Halloween. Monsters crave, demons rave and victims will not be saved, but costumes will deceive. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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This was an exceptional poem, bringing out all the devilish ghouls that infest the black night on Halloween. Monsters crave, demons rave and victims will not be saved, but costumes will deceive. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thank you Rod. A great review and a top award that I appreciate .
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Very well done.
Truly sounds like Halloween IS fright night.
The word imagery is effective and well suited to the poem.
I t truly sounds old world and spooky.
I t has not been such a big deal in Oz in the past although it does seem to be
getting more popular.
Good luck in the contest.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Very well done.
Truly sounds like Halloween IS fright night.
The word imagery is effective and well suited to the poem.
I t truly sounds old world and spooky.
I t has not been such a big deal in Oz in the past although it does seem to be
getting more popular.
Good luck in the contest.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Shirley.
Comment from I am Cat
Oh Tom,
The ending is perfection! LOL
Oh, Halloween, you wanton whore,
Bemoan the sound of nevermore!
But wait! What mischief do I see?
Is this a ruse? It cannot be!
Those specters that my mind assumes,
Are children wearing their costumes.
LOVE IT! This deserves the six I don't have... dammit!
Well played... and good luck in this contest. This is the best I've read so far!
Well done
Cat
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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Oh Tom,
The ending is perfection! LOL
Oh, Halloween, you wanton whore,
Bemoan the sound of nevermore!
But wait! What mischief do I see?
Is this a ruse? It cannot be!
Those specters that my mind assumes,
Are children wearing their costumes.
LOVE IT! This deserves the six I don't have... dammit!
Well played... and good luck in this contest. This is the best I've read so far!
Well done
Cat
Comment Written 09-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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Thank you Cat. I am blushing in the heat of your glowing words.
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I bet you're cute as a button. ;)
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This poem gives me goosebumps but I think that you are buying into the stereotype that ghosts are necessarily evil (ala not Casper)There is Excellent fresh poetic figurative language e.g. blood hewn moon for harvest moon. I was thrown in the third sestet where logically home should be plural although I can see the use of the singular for the rhyme which by the way is excellent as well as is the rhythm. All and all a superior work.
Your friend and colleague
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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Hi, Treischel,
This poem gives me goosebumps but I think that you are buying into the stereotype that ghosts are necessarily evil (ala not Casper)There is Excellent fresh poetic figurative language e.g. blood hewn moon for harvest moon. I was thrown in the third sestet where logically home should be plural although I can see the use of the singular for the rhyme which by the way is excellent as well as is the rhythm. All and all a superior work.
Your friend and colleague
Comment Written 09-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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A very detailed and concise review. Two 6 star ratings is a stellar day literally as well s figuratively. You clearly read and absorb the content, which more than the majority of reviewers here. Great to see you back. I look forward to more of your work.
Comment from Joan E.
I seem to have lost September and now we're skipping ahead to Halloween! I enjoyed your rhythmic sestets and wonderful rhymed couplets. Your appealing to our sense of smell, sight and sound is very effective and you final stanza is quite imaginative. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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I seem to have lost September and now we're skipping ahead to Halloween! I enjoyed your rhythmic sestets and wonderful rhymed couplets. Your appealing to our sense of smell, sight and sound is very effective and you final stanza is quite imaginative. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Joan, I agree, what happened to September? As always, a great review.
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September just seem to evaporate--I guess I was just too busy! -J
Comment from robyn corum
1.) It calls the Halloween spooks neigh,
-->I'm sure you know best, but this line seemed to be missing a beat
--> I recommend something LIKE - Calling the evening's spooks come neigh
2.) And (keep?) a pounding heart upset.
3.)
Favorite lines: (That I LOVED! *smile*)
They creep out from their moldy holes,
Those filthy God-forsaken souls
The witches flying past the moon
Will show their ugly faces soon,
Oh, Halloween, you wanton whore,
But wait! What mischief do I see?
A wonderful poem and a fabulous entry into this contest! (Too bad I'll have to whip your butt with mine! *smile*)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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1.) It calls the Halloween spooks neigh,
-->I'm sure you know best, but this line seemed to be missing a beat
--> I recommend something LIKE - Calling the evening's spooks come neigh
2.) And (keep?) a pounding heart upset.
3.)
Favorite lines: (That I LOVED! *smile*)
They creep out from their moldy holes,
Those filthy God-forsaken souls
The witches flying past the moon
Will show their ugly faces soon,
Oh, Halloween, you wanton whore,
But wait! What mischief do I see?
A wonderful poem and a fabulous entry into this contest! (Too bad I'll have to whip your butt with mine! *smile*)
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you Robyn. I wouldn't be surprised. I never win contests.
It CALLS the HALloWEEN spooks NEIGH. Nope no missing beat.
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The accent just seems to fall differently on that line.
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I did take suggestion 2
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oooOooo. I feel privileged! I am honored! (Seriously.)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent wirte, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this sextet poem about the dangers that roam on Halloween. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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this is an excellent wirte, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this sextet poem about the dangers that roam on Halloween. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you Sweetwoodjax.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Spooky and frightning. Lost souls that rise to cause fright. Witches flying past the moon and steal children from their happy homes. Vampires seeking blood to suck. A little relieve it's only children wearing costumes, or is it?
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Spooky and frightning. Lost souls that rise to cause fright. Witches flying past the moon and steal children from their happy homes. Vampires seeking blood to suck. A little relieve it's only children wearing costumes, or is it?
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you Dandra. Good question.
Comment from artemis53
beautifully done. I love handing out the candy to the children and love to compliment them on their costumes. They bloom from my comments.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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beautifully done. I love handing out the candy to the children and love to compliment them on their costumes. They bloom from my comments.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you Artemis. It is fun to see them all.
Comment from Unspoken94
What I especially like is that you put Halloween into perspective. What with all the ghoulishness and horror, it's still all about children and their costumes. I have read other poems for this contest, but yours is the only one that speaks to me. I will be voting. -Bill
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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What I especially like is that you put Halloween into perspective. What with all the ghoulishness and horror, it's still all about children and their costumes. I have read other poems for this contest, but yours is the only one that speaks to me. I will be voting. -Bill
Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you Bill.
