I would be ruled
A Kyrielle Sonnet23 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
Excellent flow and rhyme. Great sentiment. Not being a poet, this seemed like a difficult form to be-I got tired just reading the description of how to write it-ha. Great message and sweet picture. Excellent chance in the competition.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Excellent flow and rhyme. Great sentiment. Not being a poet, this seemed like a difficult form to be-I got tired just reading the description of how to write it-ha. Great message and sweet picture. Excellent chance in the competition.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thanks, frogbook, both for your kind review and the six stars. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from Spitfire
Okay, Tony, I hereby qualify myself to rule you. LOL
There's a message for politicians in this! Thought provoking as an great poem should be.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Okay, Tony, I hereby qualify myself to rule you. LOL
There's a message for politicians in this! Thought provoking as an great poem should be.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Many thanks, Shari. You might find me unruly!
Comment from Just2Write
I always smile when I see your name on my 'to read' list. I know I'm going to be in for a treat. This Kyrielle Sonnet was no exception. It's messasge is right on the money in my book too. The world needs all the advocates it can get these days.
Rose.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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I always smile when I see your name on my 'to read' list. I know I'm going to be in for a treat. This Kyrielle Sonnet was no exception. It's messasge is right on the money in my book too. The world needs all the advocates it can get these days.
Rose.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Rose. It is friends like you on FanStory that inspire me to keep writing.
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Aww... Thank you, my friend - and YES, do keep writing. :o)
Comment from IndianaIrish
Tony, is there any poetry format in which you don't excel in? This Kyrielle is so well written with all the requirements for this form, plus your lovely smiling photograph. I love your lines that our leaders need to understand what the bounties of this Earth is worth, and work as a priority to protect it and wonder at its magnificence like a little child. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Tony, is there any poetry format in which you don't excel in? This Kyrielle is so well written with all the requirements for this form, plus your lovely smiling photograph. I love your lines that our leaders need to understand what the bounties of this Earth is worth, and work as a priority to protect it and wonder at its magnificence like a little child. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Karyn. I wish the world was really that simple. At least we can make it so, for a moment, in our poetry.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and well written poem.
-You have all the requirements for the form.
-I like the message you have presented and how it connects effectively with the repeated lines.
-Each stanza is excellent, demonstrated by these opening lines:
"I would be ruled by those who smile"
"I fear when passion holds the rein"
"May all our leaders love this earth,
beguiled by what it's really worth."
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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-Nice image and well written poem.
-You have all the requirements for the form.
-I like the message you have presented and how it connects effectively with the repeated lines.
-Each stanza is excellent, demonstrated by these opening lines:
"I would be ruled by those who smile"
"I fear when passion holds the rein"
"May all our leaders love this earth,
beguiled by what it's really worth."
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Thanks so much for reviewing this poem, respa1. So glad that you enjoyed it. Tony
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Tony, it has to be the winning piece. Fantastic, everything, the idea, the rhythm, the iambic meter, the picture, the unforced refrains.
Some great lines:
I fear when passion holds the rein,
sustained by gods who feed on pain.
Such gods, if true, should surely heal
and concentrate on what is real.
Excellent work, should rate high in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Tony, it has to be the winning piece. Fantastic, everything, the idea, the rhythm, the iambic meter, the picture, the unforced refrains.
Some great lines:
I fear when passion holds the rein,
sustained by gods who feed on pain.
Such gods, if true, should surely heal
and concentrate on what is real.
Excellent work, should rate high in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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What a lovely review, Yelena! I always enjoy your contests. Many thanks for the stars!
Comment from pattipac
Excellent word-choice and rhyme-scheme (aabb) make your poem of who you would hope ruled the world radiates with truth. Young children are awed by all things in nature, and dream of what could be. Yet, accept reality with little fuss. Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
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Excellent word-choice and rhyme-scheme (aabb) make your poem of who you would hope ruled the world radiates with truth. Young children are awed by all things in nature, and dream of what could be. Yet, accept reality with little fuss. Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Pattipac. I've always enjoyed the dichotomy between a child's dreaming and studied realism.thanks, Tom, for your fine review and stars.
Comment from Treischel
A beautifully written Kyrielle Sonnet that reads with exquisite rhythmn and rhyme. A charming piece with a strong poll also message. Very appropriate in an election season. Would that all voters felt that way, and leaders took the lead.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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A beautifully written Kyrielle Sonnet that reads with exquisite rhythmn and rhyme. A charming piece with a strong poll also message. Very appropriate in an election season. Would that all voters felt that way, and leaders took the lead.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Tom, both for the review and for the stars. I didn't really have the election in mind when I wrote this, though I see that it does fit rather well!
Comment from Mark Valentine
A fantastic message superbly written. The meter and rhyme are impeccable. The message is partiuclarly timely for those of us in the U.S. as we listen to the politicians squabble and focus on everything except "what is real". I love the picture you chose to accompany your poem.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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A fantastic message superbly written. The meter and rhyme are impeccable. The message is partiuclarly timely for those of us in the U.S. as we listen to the politicians squabble and focus on everything except "what is real". I love the picture you chose to accompany your poem.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Mark, both for the review and for the stars. I didn't really have the election in mind when I wrote this, though I see that it does fit rather well!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, this is really VERY lovely! If only... I especially love the very gentle handling of a topic that so often is a cause for just the opposite. My mother always used to quote the old clich�© - "You catch more flies with honey than you do with vinegar." LOL. That closing couplet says it all, doesn't it? But the whole poem is so thought-provoking and flawless!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Oh, this is really VERY lovely! If only... I especially love the very gentle handling of a topic that so often is a cause for just the opposite. My mother always used to quote the old clich�© - "You catch more flies with honey than you do with vinegar." LOL. That closing couplet says it all, doesn't it? But the whole poem is so thought-provoking and flawless!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Many thanks for your lovely review and for the six stars, Dawn. That's a great saying of your mum's!
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Very much my pleasure!
