To Cherish Thorns
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30 total reviews
Comment from ciliverde
Excellent poem, I meant to review all the poems entered in the contest but missed this one by mistake. Your words are compelling, fascinating and describe a slightly dangerous world.
Congrats on your second place finish (from the third place finisher :)
I like this, and I really don't care for all free verse poetry. Nice job! I wish I could write free verse like that!
-Carol
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Excellent poem, I meant to review all the poems entered in the contest but missed this one by mistake. Your words are compelling, fascinating and describe a slightly dangerous world.
Congrats on your second place finish (from the third place finisher :)
I like this, and I really don't care for all free verse poetry. Nice job! I wish I could write free verse like that!
-Carol
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. The bottle cap did not protect you. Oh well, this is another night and the next bottle cap might help. I doubt it though. Good poem.
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I love the picture. I love the poem. The bottle cap did not protect you. Oh well, this is another night and the next bottle cap might help. I doubt it though. Good poem.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
Comment from I am Cat
Yeah, not going to be my fault this time if you don't win with this free verse... I'm going to do my part...
This deserves a six,
As I've found all your work does. Alas, I needed to get my point in... BOOYA!
;)
Good luck Mikey!
May the force of Lennon be with you ð???
C
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
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Yeah, not going to be my fault this time if you don't win with this free verse... I'm going to do my part...
This deserves a six,
As I've found all your work does. Alas, I needed to get my point in... BOOYA!
;)
Good luck Mikey!
May the force of Lennon be with you ð???
C
Comment Written 03-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
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Thank you. I'm so truly pleased you like this. Now to convince the rest of Earth. :))
Hey, Lightning Man says we're in charge of free verse, no rules. Hahaha. You bring the matches and I'll bring the gas!!
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Yeah?
Awesome!
Comment from BOO ghost
Sure there ain't more than one bottle cap tucked beneath that sofa cushion. guess, i will look at a bottle cap in a different way for now on. The red on black background makes it reader friendly for these old eyes. Very amusing poem. Just by analyzing a simple bottle cap.
My favorite quatrain.
a peppermint schnapps top
but of course--I remember
it's that cap
from days of yore
before my core became sore
I was a fool with a bottle cap to blame
I give a six pack of bottle caps for originality, poise, creativity and grip factor. I'm sure there is a few more tucked in there Mr. Mikey. count your doubloon.
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Sure there ain't more than one bottle cap tucked beneath that sofa cushion. guess, i will look at a bottle cap in a different way for now on. The red on black background makes it reader friendly for these old eyes. Very amusing poem. Just by analyzing a simple bottle cap.
My favorite quatrain.
a peppermint schnapps top
but of course--I remember
it's that cap
from days of yore
before my core became sore
I was a fool with a bottle cap to blame
I give a six pack of bottle caps for originality, poise, creativity and grip factor. I'm sure there is a few more tucked in there Mr. Mikey. count your doubloon.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
Comment from GregoryCody
Oooooh. What an OPENER!
I recall it put up no resistence
when I slipped my fingers
gently round it
and began to twist
it wasn't long
before I cast it aside
Beautiful alliteration in the R but that CALL IT and PUT UP, just sounds strong together. Love Slipped my fingers
Wait this is my favorite stanza
a peppermint schnapps top
but of course--I remember
it's that cap
from days of yore
before my core became sore
I was a fool with a bottle cap to blame
What a description! And then that heavy assonance running to the end, to stop abruptly with "blame". Took us the other way. Sounds AWESOME read aloud.
So forgive me if I'm way off but is this the story of a recovering alcoholic. Hmm. There are a few ways to take this.
I miss chatting with you. Hope everyone under your care is well. You my friend, get my very last six star...well deserved.
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Oooooh. What an OPENER!
I recall it put up no resistence
when I slipped my fingers
gently round it
and began to twist
it wasn't long
before I cast it aside
Beautiful alliteration in the R but that CALL IT and PUT UP, just sounds strong together. Love Slipped my fingers
Wait this is my favorite stanza
a peppermint schnapps top
but of course--I remember
it's that cap
from days of yore
before my core became sore
I was a fool with a bottle cap to blame
What a description! And then that heavy assonance running to the end, to stop abruptly with "blame". Took us the other way. Sounds AWESOME read aloud.
So forgive me if I'm way off but is this the story of a recovering alcoholic. Hmm. There are a few ways to take this.
I miss chatting with you. Hope everyone under your care is well. You my friend, get my very last six star...well deserved.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
Comment from Sankey
Interesting verse, mate. have not read you for ages. Trying to get my book ready for that big REVIVE Certificate soon but in the mean time a couple more chapters inserted I think.
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Interesting verse, mate. have not read you for ages. Trying to get my book ready for that big REVIVE Certificate soon but in the mean time a couple more chapters inserted I think.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
Comment from Neonewman
Hey now! This is one extraordinary piece my friend. Brilliantly crafted with an easy six star rating. Now this is poetry at its finest.
God bless and you should certainly take this win.
Steve
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Hey now! This is one extraordinary piece my friend. Brilliantly crafted with an easy six star rating. Now this is poetry at its finest.
God bless and you should certainly take this win.
Steve
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
Comment from crzypnter
Bio mikey,
A Great free verse our a bottle cap and one man's journey with the bottle. Your font and color choice really enhanced the imagery of the Poem. As a fan I doubt that anyone would dare say that your not a poet. Great job my friend. God bless always
August
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Bio mikey,
A Great free verse our a bottle cap and one man's journey with the bottle. Your font and color choice really enhanced the imagery of the Poem. As a fan I doubt that anyone would dare say that your not a poet. Great job my friend. God bless always
August
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH wow a real poet.
Nicely done and such a cute yet profound way to tell about a bottle cap.
Great entry and my vote. Very well done dear friend
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OH wow a real poet.
Nicely done and such a cute yet profound way to tell about a bottle cap.
Great entry and my vote. Very well done dear friend
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from LIJ Red
Getting soused and grating yer hand popping tops and telling the bitter half where the hell to get off sounds like a classy subject for an excellent free verse. You did it justice.
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Getting soused and grating yer hand popping tops and telling the bitter half where the hell to get off sounds like a classy subject for an excellent free verse. You did it justice.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
