Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "A Bridge That Just Won't Burn"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from benoenose
Decision taking within lust filled love is quite unnatural. But there are options to quiet and say good bye. Then within love the lust that remain unchanged and leads to more pleasure, the auto notes.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015
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Decision taking within lust filled love is quite unnatural. But there are options to quiet and say good bye. Then within love the lust that remain unchanged and leads to more pleasure, the auto notes.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015
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Comment from Halfree
Come on Bret, I started to give this a three because it appears that many of the lines of the poem were lifted from popular songs
"Dawns early light"....National Anthem
"crossing over the bridge" song.. Cross Over The Bridge
"Now I lay me down to sleep".....child"s prayer
"Chi sled out of stone..." song "Hearts Made of Stone."
Then again, this might be a parody, a tongue in cheek thing,,, old Bret just having fun...This one Just didn't grab me.
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015
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Come on Bret, I started to give this a three because it appears that many of the lines of the poem were lifted from popular songs
"Dawns early light"....National Anthem
"crossing over the bridge" song.. Cross Over The Bridge
"Now I lay me down to sleep".....child"s prayer
"Chi sled out of stone..." song "Hearts Made of Stone."
Then again, this might be a parody, a tongue in cheek thing,,, old Bret just having fun...This one Just didn't grab me.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015
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Thanks for your comments. Each of these are in what is called Public Domain. Glad you didn't enjoy this one. "Dawns early light" came from "Independence Day" by Martina McBride, "Chiseled In Stone" came from Vern Gosdin's song of the same name. Granted, you probably do not know who these people are. Definitely no parody. Oh well. Can't win them all. However, I still try.
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Enjoy your work. Just crazy enough to be enjoyable ...hell I ain't sane. Hope I never get well enough to be considered mainstream. When that happens,if ever, I am out of here.
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That makes two of us. Sanity is for other people. I prefer my own world. Much more comfortable there.
Comment from vigournet
Thanks for your poem. I walked through the painful experiences of break-up with you.
I think "I'm a page you can not turn" should read "cannot", and "You won't be back no more" should be "You will be back no more" or its a double negative.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Thanks for your poem. I walked through the painful experiences of break-up with you.
I think "I'm a page you can not turn" should read "cannot", and "You won't be back no more" should be "You will be back no more" or its a double negative.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Comment from papa55mike
That's awesome and yes the picture is a perfect fit. I love to write free verse also. I'm not that talented though. I wish I had a six.
Have a great day and God bless, mike.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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That's awesome and yes the picture is a perfect fit. I love to write free verse also. I'm not that talented though. I wish I had a six.
Have a great day and God bless, mike.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Comment from RGstar
I really liked this, thre was a sense of reality here and you played out the scenarios brilliantly. If I may make a couple of suggestions.; make 'can not' one word for there are no emphasis on either whee you have written them...also...at the start, perhaps change ''promise that you're leaving,'' to ''promised you were leaving'' works better with your second line. Didn't feel right ther. Having said that, it was a joy to read this.
Bravo.
Have a great day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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I really liked this, thre was a sense of reality here and you played out the scenarios brilliantly. If I may make a couple of suggestions.; make 'can not' one word for there are no emphasis on either whee you have written them...also...at the start, perhaps change ''promise that you're leaving,'' to ''promised you were leaving'' works better with your second line. Didn't feel right ther. Having said that, it was a joy to read this.
Bravo.
Have a great day.
RGstar
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match.
I can relate to your words.
I thought love was not suppose to hurt.
Cookie
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match.
I can relate to your words.
I thought love was not suppose to hurt.
Cookie
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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You're very welcome, it was my pleasure.
Cookie
Comment from royowen
A rather great poem, pertaining to a love that just won't go away,although it's more likely to be called an obsession. In spite of the repeated cuckolding the longing just remains, well done, with this one Brett, the language is expressive and elegant, strongly delivered. Written in even meter in abcb rhyming, well done, my friend, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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A rather great poem, pertaining to a love that just won't go away,although it's more likely to be called an obsession. In spite of the repeated cuckolding the longing just remains, well done, with this one Brett, the language is expressive and elegant, strongly delivered. Written in even meter in abcb rhyming, well done, my friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Most welcome
Comment from c_lucas
A love affair gone wrong is no reason to end your life. You might find that perfect someone and begin life anew. This is very well written with very good imagery.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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A love affair gone wrong is no reason to end your life. You might find that perfect someone and begin life anew. This is very well written with very good imagery.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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You're welcome, Brett. Charlie
Comment from prettybluebirds
Beautiful. I loved this poem. It is simple to read and understand. Your artwork is remarkable and unique. I truly enjoyed reading this work. Good job
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Beautiful. I loved this poem. It is simple to read and understand. Your artwork is remarkable and unique. I truly enjoyed reading this work. Good job
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Comment from dmt1967
This is a nice song but very sad. All songs are nowadays about a love affair that ends in hurt and mistrust. I like the beat and the rhythm as well. Very well written and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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This is a nice song but very sad. All songs are nowadays about a love affair that ends in hurt and mistrust. I like the beat and the rhythm as well. Very well written and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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