Little Poems
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19 total reviews
Comment from rod007
This is the back door to a private haven and paradise, well captured in this poem. How about a back door that leads into a forest and another world? That would be fantastic. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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This is the back door to a private haven and paradise, well captured in this poem. How about a back door that leads into a forest and another world? That would be fantastic. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Ethan's you Rod.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Another impressive format which you seem to have readily mastered.
It is amazing how the common sights around us can be blended into a poem.
Life seems to be filled with duality as you cleverly show.
Well done.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Another impressive format which you seem to have readily mastered.
It is amazing how the common sights around us can be blended into a poem.
Life seems to be filled with duality as you cleverly show.
Well done.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 18-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Thank you Shirkey. Very true.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello Sonnet Man :)
I love the great variety of poems you write. This Puente Poem is beautiful and it reminds me of my home, when my children were little. Good job!
~gypsy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Hello Sonnet Man :)
I love the great variety of poems you write. This Puente Poem is beautiful and it reminds me of my home, when my children were little. Good job!
~gypsy
Comment Written 18-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much Gypsy Blue Rose. Glad it brought you some fond memories.
Comment from Joan E.
Your brother's backdoor is very inviting. I was intrigued by the "bridge" format, rather like the pivot in a tanka and the connecting tildes. Your rhymes and the echo of the "ay" sound in the second stanza are effective as well. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Your brother's backdoor is very inviting. I was intrigued by the "bridge" format, rather like the pivot in a tanka and the connecting tildes. Your rhymes and the echo of the "ay" sound in the second stanza are effective as well. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Thank you Joan.
Comment from ellie6
A unique little poem, who ever thought a back door would be the subject for a poem This shows a flash of inspiration. The sentiment expressed is very true, the back door is the private area where only trusted friends may go.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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A unique little poem, who ever thought a back door would be the subject for a poem This shows a flash of inspiration. The sentiment expressed is very true, the back door is the private area where only trusted friends may go.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Thank you Ellie for your review and comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
What is particularly clever about this particular rendition of the form is the way your rhyme scheme echoes the construction: (Upper case for feminine rhyme)
aBcBa ~c~ deced
Each stanza is encased within a rhyme a & d here and the c is the central line not only of the whole poem but of each separate stanza so the two halves are bridged and connected by the c rhyme. If I had a six it would be yours. I love it.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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What is particularly clever about this particular rendition of the form is the way your rhyme scheme echoes the construction: (Upper case for feminine rhyme)
aBcBa ~c~ deced
Each stanza is encased within a rhyme a & d here and the c is the central line not only of the whole poem but of each separate stanza so the two halves are bridged and connected by the c rhyme. If I had a six it would be yours. I love it.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yeh, I think this form has possibilities for more prospects. Your learned eye picked up much more than others do. I respect that greatly.
Comment from ravenblack
You are right- there is a difference between the front and back door of a house and it is more than just appearance. The front is a gate through which one must pass. The back- not guarded- a portal to relaxation.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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You are right- there is a difference between the front and back door of a house and it is more than just appearance. The front is a gate through which one must pass. The back- not guarded- a portal to relaxation.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Thank you ravenblack. Yup, that 's it!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love your description of the back door, I now look at mine in a new light! You wrote a lovely poem, Tom, and I love this Puente style, it certainly comes over as a bridge too. Beautiful garden your brother has, I hope he liked your poem that pays a lovely tribute to it. :) Sandra xsx
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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I love your description of the back door, I now look at mine in a new light! You wrote a lovely poem, Tom, and I love this Puente style, it certainly comes over as a bridge too. Beautiful garden your brother has, I hope he liked your poem that pays a lovely tribute to it. :) Sandra xsx
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Thank you Sandra. I let him know.
Comment from robina1978
Yet an other form I've never seen before but I liked it very much. The photo of your brothers backdoor complements your poem perfectly. In the back garden where the family and pets play. You could have a barbecue there. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Yet an other form I've never seen before but I liked it very much. The photo of your brothers backdoor complements your poem perfectly. In the back garden where the family and pets play. You could have a barbecue there. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Thank you Ine. Have a good rest of the week.
Comment from robyn corum
It consists of two larger stanzas (separated) by a single line
This - as usual - was a lovely poem about nature. Showing off again, are we?? hahahahahaha
And now we're showing off our pretty landscaping and flowers - then bragging about the BBQs that the rest of us can't ATTEND! huuumph!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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It consists of two larger stanzas (separated) by a single line
This - as usual - was a lovely poem about nature. Showing off again, are we?? hahahahahaha
And now we're showing off our pretty landscaping and flowers - then bragging about the BBQs that the rest of us can't ATTEND! huuumph!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Thank you Robyn. I'll take my bows now and light up the grill. LOL.
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you know God is watching, right?
AND Santa.
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Oops, forgot!
