Little Poems
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Comment from I am Cat
I do a form (sort of) like this... but I call it a.... "Loop Poem"
so it's almost the same, except you Have to use the last word as the first word of the next line... and we used to do it in a forum that I owned... (the funny f...arm cafe) and so, the next person in the thread would start off where you ended, so if you said,
Following the leader
Lead'er on home
Home runs
Runs for second
Seconds please
Please and thank you!
then the next person would start....
You condescending goat!
Goat tell to someone else!
Else' was a cow!
Cow'abunga rules!
Rules are made to be broken...
Broken windows don't keep out the cows
Cows are back?
Back in black!
see? (yeah, we were all about the jokes! ) But.... we did writes some really GREAT ones too... some poems that were awesome.
I love yours... really cool...
my favorites parts:
Closed now forever
Forever exposed
Forever with you
You are my sunshine
You have been true
True to our memory
True through and through
Through to the end
Through thick and thin
Thin as the ice
nice.
well done... I love this... seems like back in 2011, i might have started a thread in the forum such as this, but maybe it was the "Right Now" thread... can't remember. Occasionally i'll go and restart those old funny f...arm threads because they were such fun... i have tons and tons of posts from the early 2000's from that time of my life... limericks and ditties ... wow, what a blast we had! LOL
well done, Tom!
Cat
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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I do a form (sort of) like this... but I call it a.... "Loop Poem"
so it's almost the same, except you Have to use the last word as the first word of the next line... and we used to do it in a forum that I owned... (the funny f...arm cafe) and so, the next person in the thread would start off where you ended, so if you said,
Following the leader
Lead'er on home
Home runs
Runs for second
Seconds please
Please and thank you!
then the next person would start....
You condescending goat!
Goat tell to someone else!
Else' was a cow!
Cow'abunga rules!
Rules are made to be broken...
Broken windows don't keep out the cows
Cows are back?
Back in black!
see? (yeah, we were all about the jokes! ) But.... we did writes some really GREAT ones too... some poems that were awesome.
I love yours... really cool...
my favorites parts:
Closed now forever
Forever exposed
Forever with you
You are my sunshine
You have been true
True to our memory
True through and through
Through to the end
Through thick and thin
Thin as the ice
nice.
well done... I love this... seems like back in 2011, i might have started a thread in the forum such as this, but maybe it was the "Right Now" thread... can't remember. Occasionally i'll go and restart those old funny f...arm threads because they were such fun... i have tons and tons of posts from the early 2000's from that time of my life... limericks and ditties ... wow, what a blast we had! LOL
well done, Tom!
Cat
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Cat, that sounds like it would be lots of fun and laughs.
Comment from Joan E.
I'd forgotten about this form, which I actually tried a few years ago. I enjoyed your added rhymes and the poem's coming full circle. Although the picture is not one of yours, it is quite striking. I liked the way you wove in the old saws in a new and refreshing way. Here's to desiring "it all"! -Joan
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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I'd forgotten about this form, which I actually tried a few years ago. I enjoyed your added rhymes and the poem's coming full circle. Although the picture is not one of yours, it is quite striking. I liked the way you wove in the old saws in a new and refreshing way. Here's to desiring "it all"! -Joan
Comment Written 10-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much Joan. It definitely wants too pull your thoughts along.
Comment from Nosha17
There must have been many events between these two sides where people unnecessarily lost their lives. I liked the use of metaphors and the vivid imagery to convey your thoughts. It read really well and was effective in its poetic form, faye
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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There must have been many events between these two sides where people unnecessarily lost their lives. I liked the use of metaphors and the vivid imagery to convey your thoughts. It read really well and was effective in its poetic form, faye
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you Faye.
Comment from robyn corum
What a fun little poem! I liked this style very much - obviously due to your expert hand with it. I seem to recall - long ago - seeing one, (but obviously it was more than a bit forgettable!) This -- NOT SO!
So cute - I think I will KEEP IT! *smile*
Thank you!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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What a fun little poem! I liked this style very much - obviously due to your expert hand with it. I seem to recall - long ago - seeing one, (but obviously it was more than a bit forgettable!) This -- NOT SO!
So cute - I think I will KEEP IT! *smile*
Thank you!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thank you Robyn. Yes, please do, andd give one a try.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love this form - whatever it might be called. I've thought of writing one of these before.
great job with some nice imagery.
Teresa
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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I love this form - whatever it might be called. I've thought of writing one of these before.
great job with some nice imagery.
Teresa
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thank you Teresa.
Comment from rod007
This quite an extraordinary poetic form, but I enjoyed it. I read it three times and each reading brought a greater appreciation of the messages within it. This was very well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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This quite an extraordinary poetic form, but I enjoyed it. I read it three times and each reading brought a greater appreciation of the messages within it. This was very well done, Tom.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thank you Rod. Yeah, you have to dig hard on this one.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
An interesting poem form. It seems it can be fun to put something like this together. Will most definitely give it a try. Love the little bit of history in your notes. The image gives atmosphere to your work.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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An interesting poem form. It seems it can be fun to put something like this together. Will most definitely give it a try. Love the little bit of history in your notes. The image gives atmosphere to your work.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Pantygynt
The form is fascinating and reminded me, though the lines are much longer in the song, of "Where have all the Flowers Gone" with its linked repetition. It is one of those pieces where analysis of each word, each phrase even, is not particularly healpful in arriving at a meaning for it all. Certain phrases stand out and there is an overal feeling of chaos that is appropriate to a war poem.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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The form is fascinating and reminded me, though the lines are much longer in the song, of "Where have all the Flowers Gone" with its linked repetition. It is one of those pieces where analysis of each word, each phrase even, is not particularly healpful in arriving at a meaning for it all. Certain phrases stand out and there is an overal feeling of chaos that is appropriate to a war poem.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Definitely a stream of consciousness. I did have that song in mind.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Good pace and rapidity, tumbling down at very fast speed. Very well run of a story with details too. I love your consciousness in maintaining an unbroken link with your lines.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Good pace and rapidity, tumbling down at very fast speed. Very well run of a story with details too. I love your consciousness in maintaining an unbroken link with your lines.
ola thomas
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thank you Ola for a wonderful review.
Comment from w.j.debi
This is an interesting poetry form and certainly flows in rapid succession. It feels like it should be read by two people as they think of the first thing to come to mind from what the other person just said. Kind of like competitors trying to outdo each other.
From what you describe as the requirement, your did a marvelous job with this form. Thank your for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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This is an interesting poetry form and certainly flows in rapid succession. It feels like it should be read by two people as they think of the first thing to come to mind from what the other person just said. Kind of like competitors trying to outdo each other.
From what you describe as the requirement, your did a marvelous job with this form. Thank your for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thank you w.j.
