Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Me And The Greyhound"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
44 total reviews
Comment from mbagby23
I use to take the bus every summer to go somewhere. Barely they were ever on time. I meet some nice people during my trips. This is a sweet story that you tell. Great picture too.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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I use to take the bus every summer to go somewhere. Barely they were ever on time. I meet some nice people during my trips. This is a sweet story that you tell. Great picture too.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Chellybelle
Such a great way to tell a story like this. I love poems that rhyme, call me simple minded, but I find they it gives something extra that really helps me connect with the story. What a read!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Such a great way to tell a story like this. I love poems that rhyme, call me simple minded, but I find they it gives something extra that really helps me connect with the story. What a read!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Jean Lutz
It was Trailways with me! One thing about wheels they do keep on rolling. Well penned. Brings back memories of the Nashville music sound.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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It was Trailways with me! One thing about wheels they do keep on rolling. Well penned. Brings back memories of the Nashville music sound.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Good, because this is a Country lyric. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from jmdg1954
For truth, I'd be curious to know how many people board a Greyhound to leave a life behind and start one new?
Nicely done, BMW, X John
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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For truth, I'd be curious to know how many people board a Greyhound to leave a life behind and start one new?
Nicely done, BMW, X John
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little poem.
Comment from ProSongwriter
HI Brett ...
Yep, has Country Music written all over it! As you might know, I'm a professional songwriter and there's the makings of a good lyric here for a song. Would need some touch-up and some minor changes, but has all the basic elements. Would need to write a bridge or chorus for it, though.
Enjoyed the story of breakup and indecision! Nicely done! Thanks for putting my musical muse on notice!!
Best to you ...
Alan
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015
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HI Brett ...
Yep, has Country Music written all over it! As you might know, I'm a professional songwriter and there's the makings of a good lyric here for a song. Would need some touch-up and some minor changes, but has all the basic elements. Would need to write a bridge or chorus for it, though.
Enjoyed the story of breakup and indecision! Nicely done! Thanks for putting my musical muse on notice!!
Best to you ...
Alan
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015
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The last verse is the chorus I wrote for these lyrics. Glad you enjoyed this one.
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I did enjoy it. And your welcome. I'll go back and taker another look ... from a lyrical POV. Nicely done!
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Would appreciate your insights.
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Will get back to you in a day or two with my thoughts. I have a submission cut-off date for 2 songs I'm working on right now. But, will give you my thoughts as quickly as I can.
Comment from Gloria ....
This has all the markings of a terrific country and western somebody done somebody wrong song.
All the elements are there, the bus, the wheels rolling, the forlorn misery with no place to call home.
It's about time somebody beat up the Greyhound bus.
Well done Brett. I can hear it.
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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This has all the markings of a terrific country and western somebody done somebody wrong song.
All the elements are there, the bus, the wheels rolling, the forlorn misery with no place to call home.
It's about time somebody beat up the Greyhound bus.
Well done Brett. I can hear it.
Gloria
Comment Written 31-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these Country lyrics. Almost all of my poems are actually lyrics.
Comment from Michaelk
Great poem. It sounded almost musical. All you needed was a bridge and chorus.
The poem seems to change as it goes along. It started out with you accepting that she was leaving because of you, but then it switched around to being greyhound's fault.
Great rhythm an rhyme.
Great poem.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Great poem. It sounded almost musical. All you needed was a bridge and chorus.
The poem seems to change as it goes along. It started out with you accepting that she was leaving because of you, but then it switched around to being greyhound's fault.
Great rhythm an rhyme.
Great poem.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this.
Comment from dmt1967
Is this a poem about a dog or a human? Is the poet morning their dog? If so I am sorry for your loss. The poem confused me. It sounds like a lovers break up and the greyhound is all the guys got left. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Is this a poem about a dog or a human? Is the poet morning their dog? If so I am sorry for your loss. The poem confused me. It sounds like a lovers break up and the greyhound is all the guys got left. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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A Greyhound is a bus.
Comment from Taffspride
I enjoyed the rather sad, ballad like quality to this. Free style format it might be, but I enjoyed the rhythm and the way it rhymed.
Good job. Thanks for sharing.
iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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I enjoyed the rather sad, ballad like quality to this. Free style format it might be, but I enjoyed the rhythm and the way it rhymed.
Good job. Thanks for sharing.
iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 31-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this.
Comment from TAB_that's me
This would make a great song Brett as well as the poem - a country song I am thinking. Good rhyming couplets and meter.
teresa
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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This would make a great song Brett as well as the poem - a country song I am thinking. Good rhyming couplets and meter.
teresa
Comment Written 31-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. As you know, since you have read many of my poems, most of them are indeed Country lyrics.
