Anthony
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Comment from Curly Girly
Okay, so this is the start of a new book. It reads well, and I spotted no spag. I am looking forward to reading the next instalment. I'll be heading there soon as I can get there ...
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Okay, so this is the start of a new book. It reads well, and I spotted no spag. I am looking forward to reading the next instalment. I'll be heading there soon as I can get there ...
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Many thanks for your review and apologies for taking so long to get back to you, Nicole. I had hardly any internet during my last few days in France, and I've been working flat out since I got back! Alexis xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis. I hope all is going well for you over there mate. I'm back in Australia, sadly. So we are in the seedy world of the gamblers, it's a tough gig my friend. I have some catching up to do I think on this one, I'll get there. Very well written. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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G'day Alexis. I hope all is going well for you over there mate. I'm back in Australia, sadly. So we are in the seedy world of the gamblers, it's a tough gig my friend. I have some catching up to do I think on this one, I'll get there. Very well written. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 28-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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We've both got some catching up to do, Fez, because I haven't had a moment to spare since I got back from France on Sunday night! Alexis xxx
Comment from light
The plot of this story looks Intetesting. There seems to be some suspicion aboutt this poker game.
I don't know anything about poker and I don't really like gambling, but this is
intrigueing so far.
Elaine
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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The plot of this story looks Intetesting. There seems to be some suspicion aboutt this poker game.
I don't know anything about poker and I don't really like gambling, but this is
intrigueing so far.
Elaine
Comment Written 28-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and my sincere thanks for your review. Alexis x
Comment from royowen
I think I might have missed a couple of connecting episodes, having been n holiday, in fact still am, will be home on Sunday, just managed to do a few now and then! Here's wishing Michael all the best, you must have sunk some research into this Alexis, is the game legit or not, good episode, my friend, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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I think I might have missed a couple of connecting episodes, having been n holiday, in fact still am, will be home on Sunday, just managed to do a few now and then! Here's wishing Michael all the best, you must have sunk some research into this Alexis, is the game legit or not, good episode, my friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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You and I both got back on Sunday, and, as you can see, I'm still catching up! I started writing this because a pal, who made a fortune playing poker all over the world keeps asking me to write his story. So far, the good looks, ex-wife, the yacht and his poker playing are the only things I've used! Alexis xxx
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You're a diligent and gifted writer, Alexis, well done, Roy.
Comment from Ric Myworld
For those of us who are always willing to play a few hands with just about anyone, there are more traps set for suckers than in all the wilderness of Alaska. Thanks for another great chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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For those of us who are always willing to play a few hands with just about anyone, there are more traps set for suckers than in all the wilderness of Alaska. Thanks for another great chapter. :-)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Many thanks for your review, Ric. It will be a few days before I get the time to post the next chapter, but I hope it will be worth the wait! Alexis xxx
Comment from wordsfromsue
Oh dear.... warning bells, telling glances, methinks someone is about to be in a boatload of trouble!!! I'm not a gambler, just READING about it makes me queasy!!!
But I wish Michael well. Why do I think my wishes aren't going to help much??
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Oh dear.... warning bells, telling glances, methinks someone is about to be in a boatload of trouble!!! I'm not a gambler, just READING about it makes me queasy!!!
But I wish Michael well. Why do I think my wishes aren't going to help much??
Comment Written 26-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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I'm still undecided as to what will happen next, but ideas are beginning to form in this old head! I go back on Sunday, so at least I'll have proper internet again! As always, the six has made my day. Thank you! Alexis xxx
Comment from Ulla
This is a good read Alexis, as always. It is very well written and I am beginning to wonder whether this Michael is bad news and maybe Alisha as well. Not so sure about how to categorize her yet. Looking forward to reading on. Ulla xxx
Ps. Are you still in France?
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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This is a good read Alexis, as always. It is very well written and I am beginning to wonder whether this Michael is bad news and maybe Alisha as well. Not so sure about how to categorize her yet. Looking forward to reading on. Ulla xxx
Ps. Are you still in France?
Comment Written 26-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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That makes two of us, Ulla! I'm thinking on my feet with this one. Yes, I'm still in France with intermittent internet connection because I'm using a dongle, but I'm back to 'civilisation' on Sunday. Now the weather has broken I don't mind! Alexis xxx
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Oh, I recognise that. I am doing excacly the same with The Misjudgement. I started the whole thing with a contest entry but it's a challenge. I don't know where it's going at all. You are doing a very good job though, and I am looking forward to read on. Ullaxxx
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I like the characters- particularly Anthony - and the conversation flows so naturally - but then you never disappoint, Alexis.
A couple of things you might want to take a look at:
'Of course... Are you going too, Alisha?(') Anthony asked.
The stakes were never high enough for serious players under those kind of circumstances[,](;) well at least not as far as he was concerned. - semi-colon
'You're sure it's a legitimate game?(') he asked.
Margaret
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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I like the characters- particularly Anthony - and the conversation flows so naturally - but then you never disappoint, Alexis.
A couple of things you might want to take a look at:
'Of course... Are you going too, Alisha?(') Anthony asked.
The stakes were never high enough for serious players under those kind of circumstances[,](;) well at least not as far as he was concerned. - semi-colon
'You're sure it's a legitimate game?(') he asked.
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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All great suggestions, Margaret, all of which are now corrected thanks to your eagle eye. This is going to be a short one compared to the others, but it's been a great distraction after cutting the grass! Alexis xxx
Comment from jpduck
I know almost nothing about poker, and gambling in general. Nor are stories describing high society manners and their associated chit-chat really my bag. So far, there has been quite a bit of this, but, knowing you, I suspect we will be getting some action soon.
The foregoing is, of course, not a criticism of your writing, Alexis; just a description of my peculiar prejudices.
I seriously want to suggest that you put a total ban on 'Truth be known' in your writing. It is, certainly for you, a cliche, and actually, it is also one in general terms. However, feel free to tell me to bugger off. (!!)
'Anthony held the bottle over Michael's glass [in the same way as he'd done with Alisha]' (The bracketed section really isn't needed).
With best wishes,
Adrian
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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I know almost nothing about poker, and gambling in general. Nor are stories describing high society manners and their associated chit-chat really my bag. So far, there has been quite a bit of this, but, knowing you, I suspect we will be getting some action soon.
The foregoing is, of course, not a criticism of your writing, Alexis; just a description of my peculiar prejudices.
I seriously want to suggest that you put a total ban on 'Truth be known' in your writing. It is, certainly for you, a cliche, and actually, it is also one in general terms. However, feel free to tell me to bugger off. (!!)
'Anthony held the bottle over Michael's glass [in the same way as he'd done with Alisha]' (The bracketed section really isn't needed).
With best wishes,
Adrian
Comment Written 26-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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All great suggestions, Adrian. I used to know a few of these guys when I lived in the Isle of Man, and although many of them were pretty boring (the wives especially) some of the millionaires were really interesting. It's a world I happily left behind, but it left me with some great material! I will be starting 'Between The Books' after this short one (about 10,000 words) so that I can reminisce a bit. I think you might enjoy some of the boarding school bits! Alexis xxx
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Oh yes, I look forward to that.
Adrian
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Alisha and Michael have got themselves accommodation on board Anthony's yacht, but something does not smell right,
Anthony is wary, as his friends behaviour seems a little strange. Perhaps the pair are going to set him up for something.
This looks to be an intriguing story, Alexis.
cheers
Annette
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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Alisha and Michael have got themselves accommodation on board Anthony's yacht, but something does not smell right,
Anthony is wary, as his friends behaviour seems a little strange. Perhaps the pair are going to set him up for something.
This looks to be an intriguing story, Alexis.
cheers
Annette
Comment Written 26-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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This is the 'calm' before the storm! Part Two tells us that Anthony's yacht can stay at sea for months at end... Alexis xxx
