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A Captive Heart Will Flee

ABC Poem

23 total reviews 
Comment from watergirl
Exceptional
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I love this poem it knows of pain and the healing as the blossoms bloom.
The elements of content (meaning), sounding, (the way it reads) and shape are all here in quality measure. Usurping sense and branding me a fool is an insightful line. The reader relates to this; your knowledge of this experience of pain is evident and keenly put.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
    I so love this in depth review. I'm pleased you're pointing out elements that I hoped would have an impact. Wow. And a sky full of stars too. I haven't been able to spend much time here lately so this will sustain me for a while. Thank you so much! mikey
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Congrats on your win. It is well deserving. The presentation is great--the color scheme, the artwork, and the choice of the ABC word beginnings. Good job on the rhyme and flow.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
    Thank you so much for stopping by and the great review. Placing in a site contest is always a huge shock! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. mikey
Comment from Lovinia
Exceptional
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Hi Mikey

Whatever the meter, it sounds good to me. :)) Such a poignant tale of jealously and possessiveness. Black romance for sure. Beautifully written, is it sonnet-like? Perhaps you've just invented a new form? Presentation is exquisite. A great theme and clever using the extended last line to first of next. Narcissism at it's worst.

Excellent rhyme, alliteration, assonance and consonance all embellished with the rhythm of your chosen meter. A fine entry for this contest, and a strong contender for high placement I'm sure. Wishing you the best of luck. You score my first six. Hugs - Lovi xoxo

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
    So delighted you enjoyed this. I finished it and thought, hey this is pretty good! :)
    You were right. I got second place. Wow, that is always such a shock to place in a real contest. Thanks for all the stars, I haven't been around much so they light up my room. mikey
reply by Lovinia on 03-Sep-2015
    I'm sure I've seen your name up in lights more than once. Yes, this was excellent and a worthy winner, especially up against so many and selected by the experts. I was pleased I popped by with stars in my pocket. :))) Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment from nelliesellie
Exceptional
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I love the picture. I love the poem. You are so right. Jealous and possessive feelings can kill a love. You need to lose your pride and say you are sorry a lot . But people also need to get rid of these possessive feelings. True love stays freely. Great work.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
    Hi. Thank you so much. Always love your insights. Right on the money as usual. Delighted you enjoyed this. Love these stars. Sorry to be so late with my response. mikey
Comment from Sankey
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Hey mate. Can see some sort of form in here. I am no expert on forms hehe. Well done I got the message. have known enough of the possessive types. Fortunately not too close around here.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
    It's a blessing having ones with their heads on straight!!!
    I think this is resembling some kind of form. I just borrowed a bit from here and there. Glad you liked it. Sorry it took me so long to respond. mikey
reply by Sankey on 03-Sep-2015
    Ok bro getting everything ready for big book review in October
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Excellent entry to the contest.
Very well written and such a tear jerker at the same time.
I love the way you used the last line to start the next.
Rhyme and rhythm are excellent

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
    Hi. Thank you so much. I think this resembles some kind of form. Ha! But I don't know which one. So pleased you enjoyed. Sorry for the late response. mikey
Comment from Linda Engel
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Well expressed and I like the flow having the last line being the first of the next verse. Oh so true the words you write. Remember "I know now why the canary sings". Possession and abuse, unwarranted suspensions, makes a sad and shallow relationship. Might be cute the first day but soon drains the life out of you. Well done Mike, sounds like your marriage is healthy.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
    Yes, I'm lucky. I've been in more than one jealous relationships though and you describe it achingly to a tee. I borrowed the moving line from one of the forms I saw here. Glad you liked it, I did too. :)
    Thanks so much, mikey (a little late, yes?)
Comment from Gloria ....
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Aw, Mikey this is a terrific ABC poem. Very creative how you've written it in three stanzas excellent meter, rhyme. Overall I'd say you've risen to the occasion quite nicely.

Great to know too that it's all fiction because you and your lovely wife don't do the jealousy thang.

One nit:

How did such blossums (blossoms) bloom within this tomb?

Best wishes to you in the contest, my friend.

Gloria

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
    Fixed the blossoms. I always spell it with a "u" for some reason that ... um ... I can't quite put my finger on. :)
    I'm too ego driven to be jealous. I figure anyone who doesn't chose me is insane. Hahaha.
    Oh, I'm a little behind. mikey
Comment from Ideasaregems-Dawn
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Mikey, this is marvelous!!! I have one teeny, tiny suggestion that has nothing to do with the fabulous writing - it's your presentation. Simply colouring the appropriate letters to make the ABC aspect of the form stand out will make a big difference to the reader (and the judges).

LOVED it!!!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
    Hi. Wow. I'm catching up. Only two weeks behind. Ha!
    Actually, it's months ... I'm going backwards. Glad you liked this. Thank you so much. It did well. mikey
reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 07-Sep-2015
    Congratulations! It DESERVED to do well! :0))
Comment from sandramitchell
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This is really well written, Mikey, I didn't even realise it was an ABC until I read the bottom where it said contest entry, then I had to go back and check it out. jealousy is an illness, buy I would think it would be really hard to live with someone who suffers from jealousy. Excellent contest entry, my friend, good luck! xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
    Thank you. I'm pleased you didn't notice the ABC aspect, that's the goal. :)
    Well, way behind as you can see. I'm so pleased you enjoyed. Your luck comes with results!! mikey