Little Poems
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Comment from rod007
We can learn a lot from animals, Tom. This beautiful piece reflects that peace. I'm afraid my love of bananas, nuts and my long arms means I'll only get peace from monkeys. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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We can learn a lot from animals, Tom. This beautiful piece reflects that peace. I'm afraid my love of bananas, nuts and my long arms means I'll only get peace from monkeys. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you rod. Hah, good one!
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for teaching us about another sonnet form and including the endearing photo of the geese family. I enjoyed the echoes in your title and your rhymes plus the uniquely placed volta. Cheers- Joan, from Norway's fjords
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you for teaching us about another sonnet form and including the endearing photo of the geese family. I enjoyed the echoes in your title and your rhymes plus the uniquely placed volta. Cheers- Joan, from Norway's fjords
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Joan. And Skoal!
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Skoal back at ya! -Joan
Comment from Pantygynt
Another interesting sonnet form. We are definitely journeying through another day another sonnet phase here. Yes the centra trametric couplet does stand out. You don't have to play hunt the volta here. Steps right out of the hexameter and slaps you round the face. The final hexametric quatrai is a far more subtle extension of the volta, viewing the lives of the geese in pleasant comparison with our own.
It is a pleasant form and yes, I do prefer my sonnets to keep to fourteen lines!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Another interesting sonnet form. We are definitely journeying through another day another sonnet phase here. Yes the centra trametric couplet does stand out. You don't have to play hunt the volta here. Steps right out of the hexameter and slaps you round the face. The final hexametric quatrai is a far more subtle extension of the volta, viewing the lives of the geese in pleasant comparison with our own.
It is a pleasant form and yes, I do prefer my sonnets to keep to fourteen lines!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Love the description: centra trametric couplet. Gotta remember that one.
Comment from robina1978
Yet an other form I never heard of. Lovely photo that complements your poem perfectly. Thanks for pointing out that the Couplet is the volta. You wrote about geese and happiness. An original subject and you stuck to the requirements.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Yet an other form I never heard of. Lovely photo that complements your poem perfectly. Thanks for pointing out that the Couplet is the volta. You wrote about geese and happiness. An original subject and you stuck to the requirements.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much, Ine. Yes, you captured the essence.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
An interesting sonnet form.
Love the description of the lazy summer day, where this feathered family of geese graze. Peaceful with no rush the little ones follow the parents. What will we give to have such a peaceful gathering with our families, with no cell phone and internet interfetences.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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An interesting sonnet form.
Love the description of the lazy summer day, where this feathered family of geese graze. Peaceful with no rush the little ones follow the parents. What will we give to have such a peaceful gathering with our families, with no cell phone and internet interfetences.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Sandra. Very good observation and question.
Comment from flamingstar
what an interesting rhythm. had to read it a couple of times but I really enjoyed it - except for the couplet that really interrupted the flow, IMO. I've often watched animals and wished my life could be as uncomplicated as theirs!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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what an interesting rhythm. had to read it a couple of times but I really enjoyed it - except for the couplet that really interrupted the flow, IMO. I've often watched animals and wished my life could be as uncomplicated as theirs!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Flamingstar . Yup, me too.
Comment from Jackreese
I really liked this poem. I think that the piece went along extremely well with the picture. The imagery was beautiful. I truly think the last line is perfect and so true.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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I really liked this poem. I think that the piece went along extremely well with the picture. The imagery was beautiful. I truly think the last line is perfect and so true.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Jack. We both agree.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love this lazy feel poem. I love seeing the baby ducks and geese when I ride my bike through the park by the duck pond. I worried about them though when the park flooded as they didn't have their feathers yet. They seem to have survived though.
Teresa
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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I love this lazy feel poem. I love seeing the baby ducks and geese when I ride my bike through the park by the duck pond. I worried about them though when the park flooded as they didn't have their feathers yet. They seem to have survived though.
Teresa
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Teresa, ypthe are cute to watch.
Comment from TPAC
Writer sound a great statement in poetic structuring, sound out of awareness to us, for us to compare animals and our reality in world, how without government they, these beheld animals, still look back in peace -in my view
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Writer sound a great statement in poetic structuring, sound out of awareness to us, for us to compare animals and our reality in world, how without government they, these beheld animals, still look back in peace -in my view
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you TPAC, well said.
Comment from trimple
Hello there, Tom
You never cease to amaze me with your ability to write so very many styles of poetry.
A 'Tory Hexatet Sonnet' no less!
I have never heard of this style and glancing t the rules below, I see that you have studies the form well.
Bravo! In reminding us all of how the simple things in life can bring peace in our lives.
Your geese family certainly look happy scampering baout the grasses.
Lovely :)
Kind regards
trimple
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Hello there, Tom
You never cease to amaze me with your ability to write so very many styles of poetry.
A 'Tory Hexatet Sonnet' no less!
I have never heard of this style and glancing t the rules below, I see that you have studies the form well.
Bravo! In reminding us all of how the simple things in life can bring peace in our lives.
Your geese family certainly look happy scampering baout the grasses.
Lovely :)
Kind regards
trimple
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Trimple. If life could only be so simple. Maybe it would help if we had wings to fly with.
