Smart Religion?
Earthly thinking can never understand the Bible.31 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent wirte, deniz, you did an excellent job writing this letter about the way people don't understand the love God has for all people, not those just deemed normal by society. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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this is an excellent wirte, deniz, you did an excellent job writing this letter about the way people don't understand the love God has for all people, not those just deemed normal by society. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from Jay Squires
An intriguing approach to explain this man Jesus to Judas. To decry Jesus as being careless in his words and his business practices, is being convinced that his kingdom was to be here on earth.
Very well- written and well-edited, which made it a joy to follow.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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An intriguing approach to explain this man Jesus to Judas. To decry Jesus as being careless in his words and his business practices, is being convinced that his kingdom was to be here on earth.
Very well- written and well-edited, which made it a joy to follow.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from barkingdog
Your letter is extremely creative. The thought of a public relations firm turning down the populist movement as a client because their leader (Jesus) has questionable friends and behavior is brilliant.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Your letter is extremely creative. The thought of a public relations firm turning down the populist movement as a client because their leader (Jesus) has questionable friends and behavior is brilliant.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Ellen, for your kind review. Welcome back, Dennis
Comment from Dean Kuch
"Don't lose your reputation as a shrewd man and get hung out to dry."-----------Ha-ha..."HUNG" out to dry? Judas?!? Nah, it could never happen, Dennis, lol...
WWJD? IF Jesus were walking the Earth today in the physical sense, I could see several organizations sending his 12 disciples letters similar to this. He'd be called everything from a hippie wannabe anarchist to a cult leader--the next coming of Charles Manson.
Yes, in business, image IS everything, what we have and don't have in a material sense. Contrarily, in Christ, all of that means very little to Him.
Nice letter, Dennis. Very clever and it gets the point across quite well.
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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"Don't lose your reputation as a shrewd man and get hung out to dry."-----------Ha-ha..."HUNG" out to dry? Judas?!? Nah, it could never happen, Dennis, lol...
WWJD? IF Jesus were walking the Earth today in the physical sense, I could see several organizations sending his 12 disciples letters similar to this. He'd be called everything from a hippie wannabe anarchist to a cult leader--the next coming of Charles Manson.
Yes, in business, image IS everything, what we have and don't have in a material sense. Contrarily, in Christ, all of that means very little to Him.
Nice letter, Dennis. Very clever and it gets the point across quite well.
~Dean
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thanks Dean....much appreciated! Dennis
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Don't mention it. :}
Comment from patcelaw
Jesus made the way of salvation so plain and simple the educated Pharisees missed the point completely and crucified Jesus much to their shame. I led a PHd to the Lord and she said, it was because I had made the gospel message so plain that even a PHd could understand it.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Jesus made the way of salvation so plain and simple the educated Pharisees missed the point completely and crucified Jesus much to their shame. I led a PHd to the Lord and she said, it was because I had made the gospel message so plain that even a PHd could understand it.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Good for you! And what a great message we have to give out to all! Thanks for reading and commenting, Dennis
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a wonderful story that I truly enjoyed reading. Since Judas betrayed Jesus and then took his own life we know what he chose. That letter could have been written to anyone without a good solid foundation of faith. Thanks for sharing. Shirley
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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What a wonderful story that I truly enjoyed reading. Since Judas betrayed Jesus and then took his own life we know what he chose. That letter could have been written to anyone without a good solid foundation of faith. Thanks for sharing. Shirley
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thank you too, Okiegal AKA Shirley! God bless you, Dennis
Comment from mvbrooks
I enjoyed your letter to Judas and your "veiled references" to Jesus. The tongue-in-cheek was a positive vehicle for sharing Jesus' message.
Suggestion: To make this "parody" a business letter more closely, but more stingy with the explanation points. In business--unless it's a sales letter--the policy is to use few, if any, exclamation points. Let the words--rather than the abundance of (!) carry your ideas.
There are some punctuation errors that interrupt your letter's flow:
Editing note, in par 1:
leader, "difficult", to say the least.
--commas always go inside quotation marks (so do periods. Colons and semicolons always go outside.)
--omit the comma after "leader"
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"He continues to either ignore our comments entirely, or go directly against them."
--for parallelism/balance, you need to add "to" in front of "go"
He continues:
-- to either ignore...
--go directly against...
Need to be
to either ignore ...or to go directly...
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"leading Rabbi, and a friend to many influential members of the Jewish ruling class."
--omit the comma after "leading Rabbi" When you use a comma with a conjunction (and) you need to have a full sentence before the comma and conjunction AND a full sentence after. In this case, you only have one full sentence.
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"Yet was it really necessary..."
--need a comma after "Yet,"
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Your writing appears to be trying to mirror a professional business letter. Need to omit the second question mark in this sentence:
-- moment by threatening child molesters with eternal punishment??
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" Makes one question; exactly WHAT is he trying to accomplish?"
--remove the semicolon after "question" A semicolon here signals that you have two full sentences:
--Makes one question. (not a complete sentence)
---Exactly what is he trying to accomplish
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"Get what you can while you can, and get out. "
--again, omit the comma before "and" because it signals that "and get out" is a full sentence. When a clause or phrase follows the full sentence (independent clause)--no comma is needed.
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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I enjoyed your letter to Judas and your "veiled references" to Jesus. The tongue-in-cheek was a positive vehicle for sharing Jesus' message.
Suggestion: To make this "parody" a business letter more closely, but more stingy with the explanation points. In business--unless it's a sales letter--the policy is to use few, if any, exclamation points. Let the words--rather than the abundance of (!) carry your ideas.
There are some punctuation errors that interrupt your letter's flow:
Editing note, in par 1:
leader, "difficult", to say the least.
--commas always go inside quotation marks (so do periods. Colons and semicolons always go outside.)
--omit the comma after "leader"
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"He continues to either ignore our comments entirely, or go directly against them."
--for parallelism/balance, you need to add "to" in front of "go"
He continues:
-- to either ignore...
--go directly against...
Need to be
to either ignore ...or to go directly...
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"leading Rabbi, and a friend to many influential members of the Jewish ruling class."
--omit the comma after "leading Rabbi" When you use a comma with a conjunction (and) you need to have a full sentence before the comma and conjunction AND a full sentence after. In this case, you only have one full sentence.
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"Yet was it really necessary..."
--need a comma after "Yet,"
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Your writing appears to be trying to mirror a professional business letter. Need to omit the second question mark in this sentence:
-- moment by threatening child molesters with eternal punishment??
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" Makes one question; exactly WHAT is he trying to accomplish?"
--remove the semicolon after "question" A semicolon here signals that you have two full sentences:
--Makes one question. (not a complete sentence)
---Exactly what is he trying to accomplish
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"Get what you can while you can, and get out. "
--again, omit the comma before "and" because it signals that "and get out" is a full sentence. When a clause or phrase follows the full sentence (independent clause)--no comma is needed.
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thanks....
Comment from Serendipity!
I guess you got your point, or was it I. B. Sowise (Isaak ben Sowsie's (?) point across so well that I felt an instant dislike or disapproval of him. What do you really believe?
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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I guess you got your point, or was it I. B. Sowise (Isaak ben Sowsie's (?) point across so well that I felt an instant dislike or disapproval of him. What do you really believe?
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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I'll work on being plainer. :) Thanks1
Comment from writeapoem
What a marvelous piece of literature to derive such a story from Holy Scripture. Your vocabulary is truly inspirational, not sensational. I have experienced that change and new birth. I have been more than have my life rearranged and my soul rinsed I have been cleansed in that atoning royal blood that flows in my new creature and I know God is real by His Holy Spirit I can feel as a made alive new creature. Again from a simple man you choosed your words wisely
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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What a marvelous piece of literature to derive such a story from Holy Scripture. Your vocabulary is truly inspirational, not sensational. I have experienced that change and new birth. I have been more than have my life rearranged and my soul rinsed I have been cleansed in that atoning royal blood that flows in my new creature and I know God is real by His Holy Spirit I can feel as a made alive new creature. Again from a simple man you choosed your words wisely
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thank you, never lose that viewpoint...a new creature in Christ...keep on being cleansed by the water of the word and drink deeply of the wine of the Spirit. God bless you and thanks for reading and commenting so nicely. Dennis
Comment from kittykatnoel
Interesting story. It took me a couple of paragraphs to understand the situation and the direction of the story line. I like your different take on an old classic. Well done.
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Interesting story. It took me a couple of paragraphs to understand the situation and the direction of the story line. I like your different take on an old classic. Well done.
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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It usually takes me some time of reading to figure out the story line too, so I know what you mean. Thanks for reading and commenting!
