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off the chart genuis

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Comment from TPAC
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Poetic in its structuring and appealing in its presentation, writer expressed thoughts are captivating to its read -I found interesting.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
    yea its been a carnival that's for sure...thank you man. love Michael
Comment from amada
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Hi dear friend. Congratulations for this poem being selected one of the best of the month. Such a joy for me. I follow you whenever i can. Not too active in FS these days but I think of you wishing you joy and success. Always!

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
    Hello Beautiful....-smile-....ah thank you. your so special...and you have no idea how it makes me feel to hear you say that. the best of this place is found in the people I met, it...they will always be unique and very special....love you Michael
Comment from GregoryCody
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You gotta help me with the close. I've been going over it. This poem screams to be read aloud. Your combo of words! Wow man, it's absolutely incredible.

sure as every details watchful eyes witness
Great alliteration

zeros equivalence except radiance blinds
WOW

I wish I had a six. No doubt AT ALL that this deserves a six. Great piece, again, wow

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
    this is ahh Dorothy I guess after finding the Wizard Oz...just a scared frail man....owning no secrets or divine power....but along the way on a yellow bricked road paved in human poetry ...she met her soul face to face in the eyes of honesty, and found new reason to breathe...is that clear...? lol...ahh I think its me and my experience here...-wink-...thanks Bro.....love Michael
reply by GregoryCody on 22-Jul-2015
    Wowww. Perfect. Man you nailed this one. Keep it up! Lol.

    The man!
Comment from amanda98653
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An exceptional, brilliant poem.

My favorite verses:

"risk changing everything
moistened lips smiling a whispers scream
love says you're worthy"

The power of love
Changes everything :)

Hugs

Amanda

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2015
    Why Hello Delicate..-smile- wondering where you were. yes indeed love sings for all its worth even when no ones thought listening...because hope knows something better. Bear squeeze back at ya....love Michael
Comment from Jumbo J
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Hey Michael,
man, can that dude make his instrument sing!
Love what you composed here as well... with your own wondrous instrument, that mind that keeps giving... had that real country-blues cross over happening within the tale of it... suppose when stale booze is concerned... someone is always on the other side of the train wreck... so just float the memories and wishes and leave the heavy where it belongs.

... and to tell you the truth my Brother, there's not a time I can think of when your work doesn't inflict it's brilliance upon my reflection... your words are all you... Mr original... when authenticity was handed out, you were front and centre Brother... always a true pleasure!

With our thoughts we create,
the rhyme to the reason,
James.

******Stars!!!!!!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
    Hey James...-smile- ah I think this me and my experience here...-wink- thank you Bro....this community is changing...I remember you from my beginning...-smile-...love michael
Comment from Pili Pubul
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In your inimitable surreal way much is express with powerful metaphors,
can feel your coping with life mechanisms, and me too let distant memories alive, your paper airplanes surround me ... Love u

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
    I'm going to send you an e-mail tomorrow...I'm sorry I've been so busy. love you Pili....talk tomorrow...noni noni Michael-
Comment from lucy marie
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Hi there sir ... You never disappoint !

Your words pull me back to sip at your wishing well time and time again ... And each and every time I'm satisfied ... Your amazing !! ( but you already know this )

Six stars for perfection

Lucy Marie x

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
    and there you are....as answered prayer...-bigsmile- how are you your Majesty...is perfectly Lucy Marie....you make me very happy whenever you Mary Poppins my world. love you Lady....michael
reply by lucy marie on 18-Jul-2015
    i'm good now I've heard your voice ... ;-) love you too babe x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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okay, Michael, I read this three times now and my mind just will not process what you are trying to say here. i'm sorry, you wrote it well but my mind just won't work

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
    there's a decoder ring in the bottom of the box...you may have to dig for it. Pam I'm trying to say what I said...quite simply. I went through the same process with this one as all the rest...yes I'm afraid the problem must lie with you. I would suggest you read it a fourth time...focused young Lady...focused. -wink-...love Michael
Comment from Joan E.
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What a surreal picture you added to your post! It foreshadowed the line, "paper airplanes explain elephants in rooms"--quite worth the repeat. Here's to "Aerodynamics"! Cheers and happy weekend- Joan

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
    Ah Joan thank God...your words are that of a seditive after my last experience....the rodeo's getting harder to tame Highway, I may have to start taking medication...-frown-....haha....thank you Friend....love Michael
reply by Joan E. on 18-Jul-2015
    Better luck with the next episode of the "rodeo". I'll always be ready with more sedatives, but I hope they won't be needed! Smiles- Joan
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Aerodynamics, is a complex poem that I just don't get. What is it all about? I understand aerodynamics but I get a feeling this is about something else. What?

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 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
    Yes of course its about something else, even more complex as whether 'ed" should follow this "X"...ta-duh...don't be ridiculous. You know as well as I what your inner ear hears Gypsy...but your angry. -smile-...also correct on instinctual assumption. but I'd be crazy to let you hold my baby after egging her buggy wouldn't I...-headtilt-...you better ask ask somebody else. love Michael