Little Poems
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Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are colorful, descriptive and created a vision of the scene. The author's notes are informative with a clear definition of the style of this poem. The artwork is exceptional and compliments this poem well.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are colorful, descriptive and created a vision of the scene. The author's notes are informative with a clear definition of the style of this poem. The artwork is exceptional and compliments this poem well.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much Harmony.
Comment from lightink
This is a pretty amazing for and a captivating poem! You created an absolutely beautiful ripple effect with these lines. Your poem is just as graceful as the flower described. My favorite image is " the petal's open like a mother's arms". (One of these days I'll have to try this form if I dare.) Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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This is a pretty amazing for and a captivating poem! You created an absolutely beautiful ripple effect with these lines. Your poem is just as graceful as the flower described. My favorite image is " the petal's open like a mother's arms". (One of these days I'll have to try this form if I dare.) Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thank you lightink, yes, please do give one a try.
Comment from Glasstruth
A wonderfully flowing sonnet. Reads smoothly as a flowing stream. Great rhyming. The first verse is really super and my favorite:
"These lilies grace the hedge in luscious pink.
Their petals open like a mother's arms.
Inviting butterflies to take a drink
Of nectar, adding to their floral charms."
Superb. Les
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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A wonderfully flowing sonnet. Reads smoothly as a flowing stream. Great rhyming. The first verse is really super and my favorite:
"These lilies grace the hedge in luscious pink.
Their petals open like a mother's arms.
Inviting butterflies to take a drink
Of nectar, adding to their floral charms."
Superb. Les
Comment Written 24-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thank you Very much Les.
Comment from rod007
A beautiful poem, full of vivid imagery of the lilies in luscious pink, and the butterflies voraciously drinking their sweet nectar with the cool green grass adorning this heavenly place. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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A beautiful poem, full of vivid imagery of the lilies in luscious pink, and the butterflies voraciously drinking their sweet nectar with the cool green grass adorning this heavenly place. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you rod.
Comment from artemis53
Extremely lovely and so well crafted. Yes. I can see them as 'pink ladies' with all of their charms if I go back to my childhood mind when fairies lived in gardens (and still do) !!!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Extremely lovely and so well crafted. Yes. I can see them as 'pink ladies' with all of their charms if I go back to my childhood mind when fairies lived in gardens (and still do) !!!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thank you Diane. That is a wonderful thing.
Comment from Pantygynt
I was most taken with this form when I came across debi's posting of one the other day. I intend to try my hand at one sometime soon. In any amalgam of two verse styles there is likely to be a casualty particularly ifthe style of one conflicts in any way with that of the other. In this amalgam the loser is the volta. I must be almost impossible to include a classic volta in the third stanza given the requirements for repeated lines. It might be fun to try to include one, beginning line 10 with "but" or even line 12 as these are original lines that will never be repeated.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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I was most taken with this form when I came across debi's posting of one the other day. I intend to try my hand at one sometime soon. In any amalgam of two verse styles there is likely to be a casualty particularly ifthe style of one conflicts in any way with that of the other. In this amalgam the loser is the volta. I must be almost impossible to include a classic volta in the third stanza given the requirements for repeated lines. It might be fun to try to include one, beginning line 10 with "but" or even line 12 as these are original lines that will never be repeated.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes, indeed the Volta is almost i possible. But certainly give it a try.
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad you are mining your brother's back yard--the vivid pink ladies are beautiful and your Pantoum Sonnet does them justice! As always, I enjoyed your rhymes and repeats plus found your "mothers' arm" simile very effective. I could see the "vibrant color" and smell the "lovely scent". Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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I am glad you are mining your brother's back yard--the vivid pink ladies are beautiful and your Pantoum Sonnet does them justice! As always, I enjoyed your rhymes and repeats plus found your "mothers' arm" simile very effective. I could see the "vibrant color" and smell the "lovely scent". Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thank you Joan. His back yard is like a park
Comment from I am Cat
I just love a pantoum...
I've not tried a pantoum sonnet...
I'll have to do that... interesting..
I love the rippling effect you get..
it's a lot of fun to do with rain...
I might try it with rain. ;)
Well done Treischel... your brother
has some awesome back yard!
I'm coming over!
;)
this is a gorgeous photo and a beautiful
pantoum to boot.
well done! I wish I could re-gift one of the sixes you gave me
today. ;)
alas, they won't let me...
Just know that this is one of my favorites of yours!
CAt
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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I just love a pantoum...
I've not tried a pantoum sonnet...
I'll have to do that... interesting..
I love the rippling effect you get..
it's a lot of fun to do with rain...
I might try it with rain. ;)
Well done Treischel... your brother
has some awesome back yard!
I'm coming over!
;)
this is a gorgeous photo and a beautiful
pantoum to boot.
well done! I wish I could re-gift one of the sixes you gave me
today. ;)
alas, they won't let me...
Just know that this is one of my favorites of yours!
CAt
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank you Cat. I'll warn my brother your coming. ;-)
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Indeed... you might oughta ;)
Comment from RGstar
once again your knowledge of the different forms impresses me. Regardless, you must make sure there is poetic ambiance and aura surrounding where it can be restricted by certain forms. This, however has the qualities. Keep on writing, my friend.
RG
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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once again your knowledge of the different forms impresses me. Regardless, you must make sure there is poetic ambiance and aura surrounding where it can be restricted by certain forms. This, however has the qualities. Keep on writing, my friend.
RG
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank you RG, i apoetciate that.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
What more can I say. You surprise me every day. It is a beautiful photograph of the most beautiful lillies. It seems your brother is a devoted gardener, and gives you a lot to write about. Also another interesting sonnet which you executed beautiful. Great work.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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What more can I say. You surprise me every day. It is a beautiful photograph of the most beautiful lillies. It seems your brother is a devoted gardener, and gives you a lot to write about. Also another interesting sonnet which you executed beautiful. Great work.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank you very, very much Sandra.
