Little Poems
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Comment from rod007
It is obvious that you are not only a talented poet but an impressive painter too. This poem is spiritually uplifting and makes the point that God and Christ are there watching and protecting us. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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It is obvious that you are not only a talented poet but an impressive painter too. This poem is spiritually uplifting and makes the point that God and Christ are there watching and protecting us. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you rod. Not really a painter. Just a paint by number.
Comment from Joan E.
My word--you were already a budding artist at 10! Thank you sharing the work as a perfect compliment to your sonnet. I enjoyed your rhymes and rhythm plus your showcasing the bravest possible act. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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My word--you were already a budding artist at 10! Thank you sharing the work as a perfect compliment to your sonnet. I enjoyed your rhymes and rhythm plus your showcasing the bravest possible act. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank youJoan. It was just a bpaint by number, i just colored in the lines. But it turned out nice.
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Not "just a paint by numbers"--you were inspired, and now it's a family heirloom! More cheers- Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great sonnet. I love the painting, it must be very well done to become a family heirloom. The sonnet form is interesting and not too difficult to learn I think. I love the content of the poem, showing off your own spirituality as well. There is so much wrong in the world today, but we believe that all the evil be solved by our Savior.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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A great sonnet. I love the painting, it must be very well done to become a family heirloom. The sonnet form is interesting and not too difficult to learn I think. I love the content of the poem, showing off your own spirituality as well. There is so much wrong in the world today, but we believe that all the evil be solved by our Savior.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, the world is a mess, but there is hope. I am pleased you liked it.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Love the poem, Tom. Fascinating rhyme scheme.
The pic didn't come through - pity, I was anxious to look at the 'heirloom'. :)
The red/black combination was a strain on my eyes. Might I suggest changing one of the colours? Just a thought.
Terrific job, as always, Tom! I continue to be awed at your ability to keep producing quality pieces on such a scale.
Sonali
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Love the poem, Tom. Fascinating rhyme scheme.
The pic didn't come through - pity, I was anxious to look at the 'heirloom'. :)
The red/black combination was a strain on my eyes. Might I suggest changing one of the colours? Just a thought.
Terrific job, as always, Tom! I continue to be awed at your ability to keep producing quality pieces on such a scale.
Sonali
Comment Written 15-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thank you Sonali. I've added the picture in now. Glad you liked the poem, and thanks for the compliment.
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Great picture, Tom. We had one of them hanging in our living room when I was growing up.
Comment from Pantygynt
I think this the first Terza Rima I have seen on this site since I posted Nocturne which was about the third poem in my Littoral collection. This one uses the alternative ending - a couplet as opposed to a single line ending. I like this form with its tercets linkeby line 2 to line 1 reminding me of the links in a chain.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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I think this the first Terza Rima I have seen on this site since I posted Nocturne which was about the third poem in my Littoral collection. This one uses the alternative ending - a couplet as opposed to a single line ending. I like this form with its tercets linkeby line 2 to line 1 reminding me of the links in a chain.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes, I remember that poem well. I have now added the picture.
Comment from trimple
Hi there, Tom
I have just returned to FS after a break again and see that you have mastered the art of yet another style of poetry...
This looks to be extremely complex to me. I could not work out the meter for the life of me and trust you have:)
I don't seem to be able to get the beats as it were... LOL
As you know, I am not a believer myself, but I found your poem to be full of hope and appreciation.
Much love
tracey
P.S The picture you describe making when you were a wee squirt is not visible?
I will check your post again tomorrow :)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Hi there, Tom
I have just returned to FS after a break again and see that you have mastered the art of yet another style of poetry...
This looks to be extremely complex to me. I could not work out the meter for the life of me and trust you have:)
I don't seem to be able to get the beats as it were... LOL
As you know, I am not a believer myself, but I found your poem to be full of hope and appreciation.
Much love
tracey
P.S The picture you describe making when you were a wee squirt is not visible?
I will check your post again tomorrow :)
Comment Written 15-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thank you trimpe. Good to hear from you again. I have now posted the picture.
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Hi, Tom
Ah! Yes I can see it now. Wow what a splendid picture. And you havn't gone over the lines! :)
A prideful piece I'm sure
Much love
Trimps
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Comment from hannahorion
I see you are a master of sonnets. This is another fine example of a sonnet whose meter and rhyme scheme have been perfected. It is about the direction in which mankind is headed that is not pleasant. This is because the present demons are destructively obsessed. The poem celebrates that we should be glad that there is a sacrificial savior who died for our behavior as determined in the last lines. I found it easy to read and pleasant to think about. Five stars for a well done work of art.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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I see you are a master of sonnets. This is another fine example of a sonnet whose meter and rhyme scheme have been perfected. It is about the direction in which mankind is headed that is not pleasant. This is because the present demons are destructively obsessed. The poem celebrates that we should be glad that there is a sacrificial savior who died for our behavior as determined in the last lines. I found it easy to read and pleasant to think about. Five stars for a well done work of art.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much, Hanna. I have now added the picture.
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you are welcome.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
It is an amazing thing for one so blessed to have offered himself up for all of mankind. Sadly, he can only die once so the rest is up to all of us to make his sacrifice worthwhile. This is beautifully penned and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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It is an amazing thing for one so blessed to have offered himself up for all of mankind. Sadly, he can only die once so the rest is up to all of us to make his sacrifice worthwhile. This is beautifully penned and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thank you Mystic Angel. I have now added the picture.
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I took a peek and that happens to be one of my favorite pictures - I have one like it on the wall behind me, as well as another one in which the angel is hovering over Jesus as he prays in the garden. They remind me that even Christ had a moment of weakness and doubt so I should never be too hard on myself or on others.
