To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "A Treatise On Human Imprisonment"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from amanda98653
This is an exceptional write, Mikey.
"flowing hair with blue eyes glowing
knowing no escape
still I tried to run"--such poignant, emotional verses
It doesn't make us weak to runaway from things that make us miserable. We are stronger when we know how to let go.
Hugs
Amanda
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This is an exceptional write, Mikey.
"flowing hair with blue eyes glowing
knowing no escape
still I tried to run"--such poignant, emotional verses
It doesn't make us weak to runaway from things that make us miserable. We are stronger when we know how to let go.
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
Comment from Zinnia48
This is a splendent (autobiographical, I'm thinking) poem about being a prisoner of memories/first loves (?!) Every line is powerful, but especially those first couple about the sun finding you, and the moon fleeing. Very strong both in visuals and in imagery. It's nice to read this on a sweet summer evening, Michael. Caroline
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This is a splendent (autobiographical, I'm thinking) poem about being a prisoner of memories/first loves (?!) Every line is powerful, but especially those first couple about the sun finding you, and the moon fleeing. Very strong both in visuals and in imagery. It's nice to read this on a sweet summer evening, Michael. Caroline
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
Comment from krys123
Mikey;
-you're written for, what seems to be, separate exposé of thought that are enterprising into one complete idea or concept.
-By the way nice to see you back Mikey, for a while I've been wondering.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-The man in Endicott building who apparently had fallen and remembered by no man shuffling his feet on by one day was some beautiful imagery that was exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive.
-I feel kind of ignorant being that it may, that I was unable to actually grasp the concept of your title. Though I think I may understand your titles concept, I did not understand the writing below in reference to it.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
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Mikey;
-you're written for, what seems to be, separate exposé of thought that are enterprising into one complete idea or concept.
-By the way nice to see you back Mikey, for a while I've been wondering.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-The man in Endicott building who apparently had fallen and remembered by no man shuffling his feet on by one day was some beautiful imagery that was exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive.
-I feel kind of ignorant being that it may, that I was unable to actually grasp the concept of your title. Though I think I may understand your titles concept, I did not understand the writing below in reference to it.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. We are on a long road. We enjoy the trip but we are unsure of the final destination. Is there a final? we learn the universes go on for ever. Do we have an end? Great work.
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I love the picture. We are on a long road. We enjoy the trip but we are unsure of the final destination. Is there a final? we learn the universes go on for ever. Do we have an end? Great work.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A nice poem Michael about the freedom and wonder of youth only to return as haunting memories in our senior years. That leaves you wondering what comes next.Well done. It's been a while. :<) Nancy
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A nice poem Michael about the freedom and wonder of youth only to return as haunting memories in our senior years. That leaves you wondering what comes next.Well done. It's been a while. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
Comment from robina1978
Excellent artwork that complements your poem perfectly. It is a free verse about a prison you can't see. It does not have to be prison that holds you captive. You gave a couple of examples.
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Excellent artwork that complements your poem perfectly. It is a free verse about a prison you can't see. It does not have to be prison that holds you captive. You gave a couple of examples.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
Comment from Megalips
Michael...it's been a while...sorry, probably my fault...I've been in and out.
Wow, I really like the way you set this up (given the subject matter) with the series of what I see as examples...the different prisons...and I love the ending "infinity is the world I'm in". The examples numbered as they are give a very nice separation so that you can consider each separately, and that emphasis would be lost with just stanzas alone. I like the simplicity in the examples in 1,2, and 3 contrasting with the depth of your final stanza...it emphasizes that simple moments and casual events can have great meaning.
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Michael...it's been a while...sorry, probably my fault...I've been in and out.
Wow, I really like the way you set this up (given the subject matter) with the series of what I see as examples...the different prisons...and I love the ending "infinity is the world I'm in". The examples numbered as they are give a very nice separation so that you can consider each separately, and that emphasis would be lost with just stanzas alone. I like the simplicity in the examples in 1,2, and 3 contrasting with the depth of your final stanza...it emphasizes that simple moments and casual events can have great meaning.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
Comment from livelylinda
Michael: this is so good! It reads quickly but needs to be read several times to attempt to understand all of it. I take from it how quickly life travels and what will be waiting for us on the other side . . . exactly where my life is now. Applause, applause for this original concept of an old idea. livelylinda
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Michael: this is so good! It reads quickly but needs to be read several times to attempt to understand all of it. I take from it how quickly life travels and what will be waiting for us on the other side . . . exactly where my life is now. Applause, applause for this original concept of an old idea. livelylinda
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
I have missed your work. Another piece in a style clearly your own. There is a subtle but strong flow to this with rhyme and alliteration. You do not over do it so it is effective without detracting. A thought provoking message. Our own natures and even intellect are prisons themselves. Quite deep. Great piece.
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I have missed your work. Another piece in a style clearly your own. There is a subtle but strong flow to this with rhyme and alliteration. You do not over do it so it is effective without detracting. A thought provoking message. Our own natures and even intellect are prisons themselves. Quite deep. Great piece.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Michael,
Welcome back, my friend. And quite a return to. This was a beautifully presented piece and, of course, very well written.
Very thought provoking.
G
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Hi Michael,
Welcome back, my friend. And quite a return to. This was a beautifully presented piece and, of course, very well written.
Very thought provoking.
G
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
