Act of Endurance
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26 total reviews
Comment from Brigitte Elko
Wow. The picture is haunting and the words horrifying. This poem reflects feelings of terror for this reader. I, too, would have been scared to enter. A reunion at this house would not be anticipated with joy but dread. Well done.
Have a great day.
:)Brigitte
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Wow. The picture is haunting and the words horrifying. This poem reflects feelings of terror for this reader. I, too, would have been scared to enter. A reunion at this house would not be anticipated with joy but dread. Well done.
Have a great day.
:)Brigitte
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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A mystery, however, I viewed myself both sides, a four year old kid and teen, talking to be heard to the other. What was that?
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written horror story. About each house that is a few years old, has some kind of ghost hanging around because they cannot let go of the house where they were happy, or then sometimes unhappy before they get closure.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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A very well-written horror story. About each house that is a few years old, has some kind of ghost hanging around because they cannot let go of the house where they were happy, or then sometimes unhappy before they get closure.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Personally, I thought it was angels playing with us. These guys playful not threatening as others. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views about this write.
Comment from emptypage
I'm not certain how to react. I don't know if I actually understand it.... Is that because you write "chapters" of poetry and I need to catch up to understand, or are these stand-alone chapters? I'm truly confused, but that's my deal, not yours. Explain if you have time.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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I'm not certain how to react. I don't know if I actually understand it.... Is that because you write "chapters" of poetry and I need to catch up to understand, or are these stand-alone chapters? I'm truly confused, but that's my deal, not yours. Explain if you have time.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Bad grammar mostly, each poem is a chapter in a book, dispute all that you still gave such a rate. Thanking you for that generous rate and touching views.
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Keep up the good work.
Comment from thonnigford09
Interesting. I'm not sure if I understood the horror in the story poem. This seemed more like remembrances, fiction or not. I don't always take ghosts, aliens, or angels as a bad thing...These are positive to me. I think you might have been stating that and I will reread if you feel I might have misread or you could help me interpret this more. Overall, I loved the poem. I liked the style of writing and would definitely recommend this. Worth a reread and lots here to analyze!!!!
Thanks!! thonnigford09.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Interesting. I'm not sure if I understood the horror in the story poem. This seemed more like remembrances, fiction or not. I don't always take ghosts, aliens, or angels as a bad thing...These are positive to me. I think you might have been stating that and I will reread if you feel I might have misread or you could help me interpret this more. Overall, I loved the poem. I liked the style of writing and would definitely recommend this. Worth a reread and lots here to analyze!!!!
Thanks!! thonnigford09.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Note certain what occurred but it started as we first confronted the house: both absorbed by memories. Me seeing myself at both time frames holds my interests: how? Thanking you for o ver generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
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Thanks TPAC. This helped clarify the poem for me. I appreciate your time to do that!!! Thanks thonnigford09
Comment from Albertholden
I found this to be a very complicated poem. When I first read it, I had difficulty in following its trail. When I read it again I felt that I could understand and follow its footsteps. This style is not my cup of tea, but I can appreciate the work put into it and the reason why it is an outstanding piece.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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I found this to be a very complicated poem. When I first read it, I had difficulty in following its trail. When I read it again I felt that I could understand and follow its footsteps. This style is not my cup of tea, but I can appreciate the work put into it and the reason why it is an outstanding piece.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Revisions seem to be needed to better its readability. Thanking you for far too generous rate and encouraging statements about this write.
Comment from Challah1202
difficult to read, many awkward forms and combinations made the reading hesitant and jagged. This may be intended to emphasize the unusual theme or nature of the story. It may deserve a better star rating than I gave it. Maybe it's my inadequacy not your presentation. I'm sorry.
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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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difficult to read, many awkward forms and combinations made the reading hesitant and jagged. This may be intended to emphasize the unusual theme or nature of the story. It may deserve a better star rating than I gave it. Maybe it's my inadequacy not your presentation. I'm sorry.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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Don't be sorry, I have many short comings in my works; why revisions are consistently done. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating conveyances
Comment from c_lucas
An overactive imagination would explain the events. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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An overactive imagination would explain the events. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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No not imagination of any sort, the sight of me seeing myself remembering both sides of vision: a big mystery. The house event simply bizzare. Thinking you for generous rate and encouraging statements about this write.
Comment from Nika2016
Wow....love your writing style...so different than anything I have read...more dreamlike or thought-caught....You see the past in flashes and yet seem there. The house changes as if a parallel universe has been entered. This happened only once to me. Time stopped even though I was driving. I returned to a station to get gas for a traveler..but the station was miles away much farther than I had previously driven. My passenger said...time warp.
Great writing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2016
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Wow....love your writing style...so different than anything I have read...more dreamlike or thought-caught....You see the past in flashes and yet seem there. The house changes as if a parallel universe has been entered. This happened only once to me. Time stopped even though I was driving. I returned to a station to get gas for a traveler..but the station was miles away much farther than I had previously driven. My passenger said...time warp.
Great writing.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2016
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Interesting comment about time, I had twenty minutes active while.all other aspects stopped. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating conveyances.
Comment from humpwhistle
The four is because I suspect you're playing me.
In fact, I think you're playing us all.
Nothing wrong with that. And if you think the four is unfair,
I'll raise it. But I'll still think you're playing me.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
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The four is because I suspect you're playing me.
In fact, I think you're playing us all.
Nothing wrong with that. And if you think the four is unfair,
I'll raise it. But I'll still think you're playing me.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 15-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
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Not fully understanding your statement of play. It is as accounted: a factual occurrence. Very weird but true. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed captivating statement.
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I guess I misinterpreted. I'll change your rating. L
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A different presentation of a haunted house than what your usually get. You sort of had a "flow of consciousness" rather than an outright story, which gave us a deeper insight into the thoughts and memories of the participants.
Well done,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
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A different presentation of a haunted house than what your usually get. You sort of had a "flow of consciousness" rather than an outright story, which gave us a deeper insight into the thoughts and memories of the participants.
Well done,
Rhonda
Comment Written 15-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
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Glad this write found pleasing aspects. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.
