Christine's Poems
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, chrissy, you did an excellent job writing this sweet verse of the change that needs to come about to bring beauty back to this world. congratulations on your win.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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this is an excellent write, chrissy, you did an excellent job writing this sweet verse of the change that needs to come about to bring beauty back to this world. congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thank you sweetwoodjax for you lovely words and congratulations on the win. I hope the message may be taken up by someone who may bring about some change somewhere. I have to believe there is still a lot of love left we just need to redirect it to where is it most needed. Appreciate you reading this poem With Cheers Christine😃
Comment from sajeda6
I love this poem. Beautiful message, it shows all the hate, and full of war. Yes, I believe we all need to bring back love into the world, all people around. When we think about it , we all breathe the same air, all have the same colour blood, we need to embrace each other even with our differences. Make the world a better, PEACEFUL WORLD.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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I love this poem. Beautiful message, it shows all the hate, and full of war. Yes, I believe we all need to bring back love into the world, all people around. When we think about it , we all breathe the same air, all have the same colour blood, we need to embrace each other even with our differences. Make the world a better, PEACEFUL WORLD.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much sajeda6 for your wonderful review and fantastic rating you do me an honour with this. I'm so glad you loved it. Wouldn't it be great to be able to have such a simple answer. And we all do need a big hug for peace. I give you one now With great appreciation Cheers Christine😀😀
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You are welcome. Hugs of peace back to you too. Not sure how to do the smily face on here, but not sure you probably did yours on your phone. lol
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No use my iPad but send you one for luck 😃Hugs back
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No use my iPad but send you one for luck 😃Hugs back
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No use my iPad but send you one for luck 😃Hugs back
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A worthy winner Chrissie for the Silver Lining contest - but if only we could save the world - that would be a difficult thing to do and way beyond individual capability and it never has been possible to get the whole world to agree absolutely about anything. Good abcb rhyme throughout and an enjoyable read. Congratulations on your win. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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A worthy winner Chrissie for the Silver Lining contest - but if only we could save the world - that would be a difficult thing to do and way beyond individual capability and it never has been possible to get the whole world to agree absolutely about anything. Good abcb rhyme throughout and an enjoyable read. Congratulations on your win. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you Dorothy for your lovely review and congratulations for my poem in this contest. I just let the words come out and hoped they would bring a message that we must take care of our world it's in a bit of trouble and I just had a vision of it crying. It was a bonus to win and I thank everyone who voted and or read this so appreciate you good wishes . With good Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image to go with your poem.
-Poem is written well, flows, and has vivid images.
-I like the first line and the whole first stanza. Very heartfelt.
-I also like the repetition of "My world...." and the personifying of it.
-I find these lines very effective:
"It reaches out to hold man close
Embrace each man inside." They really emphasize how the world wants to take care of us and implies what are we doing for it?
-Very well written conclusion.
-Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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-Very nice image to go with your poem.
-Poem is written well, flows, and has vivid images.
-I like the first line and the whole first stanza. Very heartfelt.
-I also like the repetition of "My world...." and the personifying of it.
-I find these lines very effective:
"It reaches out to hold man close
Embrace each man inside." They really emphasize how the world wants to take care of us and implies what are we doing for it?
-Very well written conclusion.
-Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thanks respa1 for your great feedback and congratulations on the win, for this poem. I feel with all that goes on at the moment with the world. If we could take a global look this is what we may see. I just hope we could one day embrace each other with love. Thank God it is not the majority like this so there is hope. I enjoy your comments and am glad you thought it well written. With heartfelt Cheers Christine😄
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You are very welcome for the feedback. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts.
Comment from w.j.debi
This is a timely message. It seems we expect the world to always be there to take of us, but we also need to take care of the world. Your repeating use of the "world" followed by the various actions/emotions it is experiencing helps build the intensity of your theme and gives an emotional impact to the reader. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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This is a timely message. It seems we expect the world to always be there to take of us, but we also need to take care of the world. Your repeating use of the "world" followed by the various actions/emotions it is experiencing helps build the intensity of your theme and gives an emotional impact to the reader. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you w.j.debi for having a read of this poem and for your comments and rating . I had hoped to invoke strong emotions in the reader so appreciate your review Cheers Christine😃
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Thank you w.j.debi for having a read of this poem and for your comments and rating . I had hoped to invoke strong emotions in the reader so appreciate your review Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Bill Schott
This set of quatrains, My World's Eyes Are Crying, take the population to task on our ongoing war with ourselves and the planet. The poem completes the idea of problem and solution in an enjoyable rhyming format.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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This set of quatrains, My World's Eyes Are Crying, take the population to task on our ongoing war with ourselves and the planet. The poem completes the idea of problem and solution in an enjoyable rhyming format.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thanks Bill for your review and comments . It is a problem that I'm not sure if we will ever be able to fix, but one can hope some changes may happen before it's too late. cheers Christine😄
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Thanks Bill for your review and comments . It is a problem that I'm not sure if we will ever be able to fix, but one can hope some changes may happen before it's too late. cheers Christine😄
Comment from Gert sherwood
Very good chrissyxxx
I can definitely see why you deserved firs prize especially when you said--
You MUST obey the golden rule
Bring LOVE to everyone
STOP all the ugly hate and war
Your ONE chance has begun.
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Very good chrissyxxx
I can definitely see why you deserved firs prize especially when you said--
You MUST obey the golden rule
Bring LOVE to everyone
STOP all the ugly hate and war
Your ONE chance has begun.
Gert
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thank you Gert if only it was this simple, but I do appreciate your thoughts and good wishes .Cheers Christine😀
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You are welcome chrissy
Gert
Comment from Delahay
There is so much pain and strife in the world it would be nice if we could work together to heal all the wounds. If every single person helped one other in some way it would make a big difference.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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There is so much pain and strife in the world it would be nice if we could work together to heal all the wounds. If every single person helped one other in some way it would make a big difference.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thank you Delahay for reading my poem and wouldn't it be nice if we all got on. I totally agree with you and feel a bit sad to write such a poem because at the moment things in the world arm.'t too great. Let their be more light Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Interesting poem about ecology and brings up some good questions about how we are treating our world and how we should start treating her before we all die. Good job!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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Interesting poem about ecology and brings up some good questions about how we are treating our world and how we should start treating her before we all die. Good job!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose for your review for this poem I hope we will have a good outcome need more love and peace Cheers
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. The rhyme and flow are wonderful throughout and the imagery superb and very inventive. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. The rhyme and flow are wonderful throughout and the imagery superb and very inventive. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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Thank you Mystic Angel 7777 for your very nice review of this poem and let's hope the world can see more light. With appreciation for your time Cheers
