Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10003 "my perfect child"from birth I have longed for death
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Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
So perfectly written. Every word flows. The Authors notes sum it all up correctly. Let us be grandparents first so when we are parents we do not make mistakes. The artwork is perfect. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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So perfectly written. Every word flows. The Authors notes sum it all up correctly. Let us be grandparents first so when we are parents we do not make mistakes. The artwork is perfect. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you.
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Your welcome. You amaze me.
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good morning poet and happy Independence Day!
You are so right and we sure do learn a lot as we grow older.
Thanks for using my artwork, I am always honored. Loyd C. Taylor, Sr.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Good morning poet and happy Independence Day!
You are so right and we sure do learn a lot as we grow older.
Thanks for using my artwork, I am always honored. Loyd C. Taylor, Sr.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Thank you!
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My pleasure, Loyd
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good job CBAT!! I like your poem about children. It is true, when you are a grandparent you know better. I was 17 years old when I had my first baby, I didn't know what I was doing, but I read books.
You are missing some questions marks, I wrote a few notes, I hope you don't mind. Of course you can just ignorest it, it is your writing and you decide.
-first paragraph: Did you hear? He said
-third paragraph: their parents should have done
-fourth paragraph: questions mark after fat
-fifth paragraph: question mark after how she acted and after what she said
-eith paragraph: question mark after fitted
-nineth paragraph: use too instead of to (this one is too thin) ; the last line (be more small) should be- small or smaller
-You only capitalized the first letter in the first paragraph (Did) and one more on the fith paragraph (Have) to be consistant either capitalize all the first letters of all the paragraphs or don't capitalize any
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Good job CBAT!! I like your poem about children. It is true, when you are a grandparent you know better. I was 17 years old when I had my first baby, I didn't know what I was doing, but I read books.
You are missing some questions marks, I wrote a few notes, I hope you don't mind. Of course you can just ignorest it, it is your writing and you decide.
-first paragraph: Did you hear? He said
-third paragraph: their parents should have done
-fourth paragraph: questions mark after fat
-fifth paragraph: question mark after how she acted and after what she said
-eith paragraph: question mark after fitted
-nineth paragraph: use too instead of to (this one is too thin) ; the last line (be more small) should be- small or smaller
-You only capitalized the first letter in the first paragraph (Did) and one more on the fith paragraph (Have) to be consistant either capitalize all the first letters of all the paragraphs or don't capitalize any
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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You have answered some of my questions.
I know nothing about poetry, and second guess as you see- what to do.
Thanks again and again.
Comment from Curly Girly
Yes, I agree with the last stanza:
all do their best
sharing with the rest
all feeling
they know best
Suggestions:
a parents view
A parent's view
he Say's
he says
this one is to thin
this one is too thin
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Yes, I agree with the last stanza:
all do their best
sharing with the rest
all feeling
they know best
Suggestions:
a parents view
A parent's view
he Say's
he says
this one is to thin
this one is too thin
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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You always help me without being cruel.
Thank y.ou
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Even I make mistakes!
Comment from tfawcus
You have captured that feeling of uncertainty we all have had at one time or another during the time of our parenting. There are so many different opinions and so much sage advice to be had - much of it conflicting. In the end we must just do the best we can, following our hearts with love.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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You have captured that feeling of uncertainty we all have had at one time or another during the time of our parenting. There are so many different opinions and so much sage advice to be had - much of it conflicting. In the end we must just do the best we can, following our hearts with love.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thank you.
